she really has a thing about hitting him on the back :P
pixon1 4 years ago
Really nice beginning. I loved the misdirection about walking into the men's room.
aardvark1111 4 years ago
Uncle Bob has a *fierce* flat-top... Good mysterious opening, with lots of threads.
AndiJF 4 years ago
Excellent beginning. Welltold & the charqcters are well done! Very mysterious! I wonder if the neice now looks like him?
jhgf88 4 years ago
she really has a thing about hitting him on the back :P
pixon1 4 years ago
Really nice beginning. I loved the misdirection about walking into the men's room.
aardvark1111 4 years ago
Uncle Bob has a *fierce* flat-top... Good mysterious opening, with lots of threads.
AndiJF 4 years ago
Excellent beginning. Welltold & the charqcters are well done! Very mysterious! I wonder if the neice now looks like him?
jhgf88 4 years ago