You got some nice lines in there..He did say it's ok, but I just have a feeling Rivers in a different state of mind and I have a hunch(just a hunch) that he wants something "Edgier"
Oops. I guess it's obvious I didn't watch the entire thing before, lol. ;) You did make the lyrics fit for the most part, awesome. Also, your dog is a sweetheart. :)
wow, this is interesting writing. great job, and the dog really adds some nice touches to the song.
AndrewG4d 3 years ago
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I thought it was okay to post and "i miss you version". I did. Check out my video response & let me know what you think.
cbj919 3 years ago
You got some nice lines in there..He did say it's ok, but I just have a feeling Rivers in a different state of mind and I have a hunch(just a hunch) that he wants something "Edgier"
quazeekat 3 years ago
You might want to send these lyrics to Beck instead.
lisam805 3 years ago
I agree, this is a very abstract, Beck-like, yet very strong and gorgeous writing. I like it a lot.
PhotoGenic21 3 years ago
I agree that it's a bit cryptic but Rivers said to make it Edgy & Tough...
quazeekat 3 years ago
Also, he seems to not be looking for an "I miss you" type song...
quazeekat 3 years ago
I like it too. The verses are too long to be sung with the melody Rivers chose though.
lisam805 3 years ago
Thanks! Actually I had headphones on and was
singing right along to DTW's melody..so it dos fit but some of the words might need to be ironed out to make it fit perfectly...
quazeekat 3 years ago
Oops. I guess it's obvious I didn't watch the entire thing before, lol. ;) You did make the lyrics fit for the most part, awesome. Also, your dog is a sweetheart. :)
lisam805 3 years ago