Kina Grannis Co-Write First Verse

[kiekie84]

part 1 it's not the brick that makes this house a home it's not the shoes that you tell where we've roamed it's in our love and in the stories they show us who we are and they'll bring us together from so far and yes it's true our journey bleeds through the pages with a road that seems to long and far but that doesn't stop our hearts from beating and that doesn't stop and souls from needing all of each other just the way we are

[kiekie84]

part 2 cuz it's not the brick that makes this house a home and it's not the shoes that you tell where we've roamed but it's in our love and in the stories they show us who we are and they'll bring us together from so far so travel on little solder and tell the story far and wide of house with out bricks and a family's shoeless ride were love is over flowing and the pages never end and no matter how poor we are the journey has just begun so remember yes it's true

[kiekie84]

part 3

it's not the bricks that make this house a home

it's not the shoes that you tell where we've roamed

but it's in our love and in the stories

they show us who we are

and they'll bring us together from so far

[kiekie84]

i just had a very cool cool idea! ok so i was thinking about this and yes I'm back! lol ok so as you sang "it's not the brick that makes this house a home" i touched the wall in our house and repeated the those words and as you sang " it's not the shoes that tell where we've roamed" i tapped my shoes on the ground and repeated the words and then as you sang " it's in the love and in our stories" "they show us who we are" "they'll bring us together from so far" i repeated those words and thought

[kiekie84]

ok so we have no brick for a home but home is were the heart is and we have no shoes but we still roam and the love we have in our hearts that's were our home is our home is in our love and our home is in our stories and that's what shows people who we are and that's also what brings together from far away and it hit me this song is for the homeless family's

[kiekie84]

they may not have a home of brick but they still have each other and they have there unbreakable love for one another and they may not have shoes but they still have a journey and a story to tell and that story and that journey shows the world just who they are a family with out a home but with each other a family without shoes but with a story to tell and a heart of love that brings them together even if there far away... :) this song could be a movie.... :d

[kiekie84]

this song could be in a movie* but it could be a movie too lol

[kiekie84]

you need to make this into a poem or a new song!

[IamRafe]

@kiekie84 I've added to it some...just a couple lines...but I'm not set on the lines I've got and kind of stuck right now with it. It's a work in progress.

[kiekie84]

@IamRafe yes it'll come with time i suppose but sometimes i just wish time it's self would hurry up lol :P

[hidude8]

Ah.. I really like your lyrics. It's a shame that you didnt get in :( But hey, dont lose hope! There'll be other more chances to do something like this again :)

[IamRafe]

@hidude8 I've had so much positive feedback from this video. Thank you so much!

[hidude8]

@IamRafe

No worries :) 

[jayquan15ify]

not bad

[IamRafe]

@jayquan15ify not good either! haha...thanks for the kind of compliment! :)

[mouatech]

at first i thought it was weird but then i realize it was pretty good. good job!

[IamRafe]

@mouatech Thanks! Glad you got past the "weird" point! haha.

[IamRafe]

@sbk808 Sweet, thanks!

[ShringWebster]

i wish your lyrics had one

[IamRafe]

@ShringWebster Alas they did not though...bummer. I should have my Verse two posted up by tomorrow.

[chrisitneywenney83]

I really really loved your lyrics. I'm a writer too if you ever want to co write with me. No music up yet. Im still trying to figure out youtube. But awesome job non the less!

[IamRafe]

@chrisitneywenney83 Thanks you very much. Send me a message and maybe we can do some cowrite sometime.

[c64c64c64]

hey not too bad...i like

[IamRafe]

@c64c64c64 Thanks man!

[lovefunnystuff55]

Great story beneath the song :) brilliant

Keep up the great work

[IamRafe]

@lovefunnystuff55 Thank you very much, wish my Part II was having more success. Oh well. Maybe next round.

[SherriLovesCereal]

you actually have a really nice voice :) and wonderful lyrics!

[IamRafe]

@SherriLovesCereal I'll take the compliment on the lyrics...well I guess the voice too, but I still don't think I'm much of a singer. Please go check out my new lyrics for the Chorus. Thanks a bunch!

[mossy44sammoss]

ace mate well done :')

[IamRafe]

@mossy44sammoss Glad you liked them. Check out my new Chorus for the next part of the Co-Write. It's not doing so well and could use some thumbs up. I actually like it better than this first verse.

[hoperagland]

you're really great. very talented. so impressed

[IamRafe]

@hoperagland Thank you very much. I'm glad so many people liked my first verse. I hope just as many people will like my Chorus. It's uploaded and ready for thumbs up! :)

[kpas]

I love your lyrics!

[IamRafe]

@kpas Awesome, thanks. It is too bad I didn't win the first verse. Go check out my Chorus though and please give me thumbs up. Thanks!

[ray6monin6ho6]

:O

I actually love these lyrics!!!

:')

they are so deep!

keep it on man!! :D

would you be pissed if I used them to write a song?

xD

[IamRafe]

@ray6monin6ho6 Thanks for the compliment. I just finished uploading my Co-Write for the Chorus. I hope you check it out and spread the word...well I hope first of all you like it enough to want to spread the word.

Also about using this in a song, if you want to use this please let me see a finished copy and secondly if you plan on making money of it we need to make some sort of an agreement. :) Thanks!

[kno1famoUS]

I love the lyrics man.... great job

[IamRafe]

@kno1famoUS thanks alot man, please check out my new lyrics for the chorus and help me get some more thumbs up! Thanks.

[JoyRenee86]

I agree with you - I like the first two lines, but the last lines don't really flow well. But you've got a great start to a song!

[IamRafe]

@JoyRenee86 Yeah, I'm working on it still and I'm thinking about making this the second verse. More needs to be explained before this.

[kiekie84]

you should do vlogs when your working on this song like video yourself talking to the people watching your vids and talk about what your idea's are what area your shooting for in the song how it's coming along kinda like "your on this road trip in life not a real road trip but like a journey the journey of writing this song" take us along on that journey! it'll be good for your channel your ratings and any progress your trying to achieve on this youtube thing even if that's not why your here :)

[kiekie84]

ok so are we talking about 2 people? or a everyone in the world? or a group of people and it's not the brick cuz you could be homeless and still have a place to call home and you could be shoeless and still be roaming so it's in the love that we give to this 1 person? everyone? a group? and it's the story's that we share together with this 1 person? everyone? this group? this is something you will have to decided which can help build your song but it has to be a story first :) hope this helps

[IamRafe]

@kiekie84 Sounds like someone is a fellow writer! Thanks for the things to think about. Added a couple lines this weekend, but I'm not sure if they fit. Need to get serious about this thing one of these nights.

[kiekie84]

you know you kinda look like the guy off the note book LOL isn't that funny

[IamRafe]

@kiekie84 I've always kinda thought that too. And I think he wears a hat like that at some point during the movie. Also, I have a huge crush on Rachel McAdams!!!

[kiekie84]

i came back to this man i wanna hear more this song paints a picture like someone is standing out on a porch looking out to something beyond maybe the city in the distances maybe there family in the back yard maybe the ocean maybe there neighborhood maybe a long road that leads no were anyway there just standing there sipping there coffee thinking about life as the sun rises or sets... man i hope you don't win that way you can finish this as your own song :P lol cuz i have got to hear the rest

[IamRafe]

@kiekie84 Thank you very much for the comment. I've come back to these lyrics to try to finish the poem/lyrics, but I've been having trouble. Your take on it so far might help me get some progress going! If you are subbed to my channel I'll be doing a reading when it's all done.

[monkuashu]

man you made me cry!!! u r awesome!!! nice voice hehehe take care!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! and all the best

[IamRafe]

@monkuashu Thanks, I don't think I won, but I'm glad so many people have enjoyed my lyrics!

[bballplaya8638]

ha ha true your voice was not the best but the lyrics were really really strong. they are the first set of lyrics for her cowrite that i have ligit liked i hope you win

[IamRafe]

@bballplaya8638 Hey, thanks. I thought the lyrics fit the mood of the music pretty well. I know I'm not much of a singer.

[LasVegas1813]

<<<<<< We already covere'd IamRafe's version! ...pls check it out :D ...thx...

[IamRafe]

@LasVegas1813 Again thanks for the support on the song/lyrics!

[majshkdt]

omg its beautiful and honestly I like your voice! =P best of luck!

[IamRafe]

@majshkdt Thank you. I've been steadily falling in popularity :(

[KrayzieShortie]

Those lyrics are awesome ... thumbs up from me! Waaayyy better than mine lol.

[IamRafe]

@KrayzieShortie Thanks! Glad you liked them!

[Palindromics]

Dude, really belongs in the most popular bracket. You totally have my vote :)

[IamRafe]

@Palindromics I was holding the top 3 for awhile. I've gotten alot of thumbs down in the last couple days.

[edwardtulane82]

that was good man. hey, i can't really sing either, but that was pretty good :o)

[IamRafe]

@edwardtulane82 Awesome, thanks man!

[freezeyourself]

i think you did awesome. :)

[IamRafe]

@freezeyourself Thank you very much!

[Wordthy1]

good job homie..check out my verse when u get a chance

[IamRafe]

@Wordthy1 I couldn't find it to vote for, but I liked your lyrics. Good job.

[russtrinidad]

Congratulations!!

[IamRafe]

@russtrinidad thanks.

[rosebutxTH]

the best I've heard till now

[IamRafe]

@rosebutxTH Thank you!

[irishgoddess08]

really good! your singing isn't to shabby either, not the best, but not the worst either, if you took voice lessons you'd probably be good enough to sing your own songs...Maybe in the end after who we are, say "They bring us happiness when life starts to get hard" I think that would be a really good ending!!

[IamRafe]

@irishgoddess08 Thanks for the suggestions. Glad you liked my lyrics. Help me win, spread the word!

[Jexsal]

Great lyric and good luck ... ! :)...

[IamRafe]

@Jexsal Thank you for the comments Jexsal.

[masturbatingmuhammad]

too mushy

[lordlorenzo12]

bro thats best ive heard comes from the heart i can tell

[IamRafe]

@lordlorenzo12 thank you man, tell your friends to help me out. I've been hovering around #3 in popularity for a couple days now.

[ZuLyric]

amazing !

[IamRafe]

@ZuLyric Thanks much!

[K3VO241]

btw nice hat XD

[IamRafe]

@K3VO241 Thanks, I like hats...they cover my balding head! :)

[demaskbeauty00]

the lyrics have more meaning than any of the other ones i have heard so far

[IamRafe]

@demaskbeauty00 Glad everyone is taking the time to tell me how much they like the lyrics. Spread the word. Help me win!

[anishtube]

Rafe, you're was by far the best among all the other entries. i really like the direction you took with the tune, while everyone Else's was only about heart break and love. i love your direction and i love the meaning. Best of luck. I think you have a really good shot.

[IamRafe]

@anishtube Awesome, thank you! I hope I can do well. 2 weeks is a long time...and it's hard to compete with people like Kate McGill. She's amazing.

[kiekie84]

i looked at tones of other video entry's and most of them sounded a lot alike but only a few sounded way different from anything else and then i compared the good videos that sounded way different and cool to yours and they just couldn't match up i would = this too a song that Damien Rice would do and it sounds like a song that would write so be proud!

[IamRafe]

@kiekie84 Glad you are still enjoying mine even after soo many people have entered. Thanks.

[ShroomiePowah]

I really loved the lyrics.

It really complements the rhythm and melody. (:

[IamRafe]

@ShroomiePowah Thanks much! Wish me luck, I'm getting lots of thumbs downs :(

[ShroomiePowah]

@IamRafe Haaah, they don't know how to judge songs P:

It's alright! You have my and many others' support!

[IamRafe]

@ShroomiePowah It's much appreciated. Thanks.

[fishbowlbuttons]

Rafe. That was incredible!! Incredible. Holy moly.

[IamRafe]

@fishbowlbuttons hey girls! Thanks so much for checking out my video. Glad you liked it.

[southafricainamerica]

cool, if you don't win - I would love to do a co-write with you! let me know!

[IamRafe]

@southafricainamerica Willing to do a cowrite even if I do win! It's been too long since I've written much. Thanks for taking interest in my lyrics!

[southafricainamerica]

@IamRafe Sounds good. Let's do it. When do you find out if you win? I am gonna enter the next round.

[ssconner]

FUCK"N AWSUME!!! Brother!

[sweetness697]

hits home for me...... my husbands in cali im in canda ... nice job

[IamRafe]

@sweetness697 Think of the stories you'll have for each other when you're together again! May your time apart be few! Peace and thank you!

[sweetness697]

@IamRafe thanks we are working on being toghther just takes time :) and your welcome ! hope u win i put a verse in too but not as good as yours :) good luck

[traceydotcom]

i really liked it! :) it's tells a different story to the ones i've heard so far. and you're funny too :)

[IamRafe]

@traceydotcom Thanks, I have noticed a bit of a trend with some of the other lyrics people have been writing. Lets hope my unique ones will pay off a bit.

Some people are blessed a voice or a musical talent...I got whit! :)

[eveliiine]

i really like it.

[IamRafe]

@eveliiine Thank you thank you eve!

[K3VO241]

You a pretty cood voice sing a octave lower ad it would sound great :)

[IamRafe]

@K3VO241 Cool, thanks for the advice. I literally have no vocal control, but I'll remember to keep that in mind for the rest of the Cowrite.

[57004270]

After the 15 or 16 that I've listened to, you have the best one so far.

[IamRafe]

@57004270 Awesome. Thank you.

[virmacreations]

I like it though :)

[IamRafe]

@virmacreations :)

[davidsonghello]

i like the lyrics

[IamRafe]

@davidsonghello Thank you!

[ShringWebster]

I kinda like love this and forget other people ur good

ive herd worse

[IamRafe]

@ShringWebster Thanks for the kind words. Like I said in the video. I'm a writer not a singer. And I know I'm not like the worst singer on the planet, I just know there are plenty of people that blow me out of the water! Thanks for the support.

[jenny4life100]

kikie u need to get a life and stop messing with people

[kiekie84]

huh?

[FlowerPlanet]

I love this!!! it's really sentimental/you learn about life as you go/amazing! Ha! i hope this comment makes sense to you... your an exelent song writer. :) cant wait to hear your chorus!

[IamRafe]

@FlowerPlanet Thank you soo much. I understand what you mean. You learn about life through others...their stories, their shoes, their homes! It's up to us to make our own house a home!

[LasVegas1813]

***We love the lyrics and will sing it for you as soon as possible! :D ***

[IamRafe]

@LasVegas1813 I'm honored that you want to sing my lyrics. Thank you. Look forward to listening.

[kiekie84]

I'm brought back to this emotion and moment that reminds me and makes me feel as if my heart is covered in ink waiting for words to be written and if i could just take a pen and dip it in the ink of my heart and start moving my hands i feel as if the ink of my heart could just start writing it's very own words as if it has a mind and a life of it's own telling and writing the true secret's of my soul and i find it so strange how this one clip can move me so much really hope i hear more bye :)

[IamRafe]

@kiekie84 It's great to hear my words can have such an effect on someone. I will do my best to finish the song/lyrics/poem...whatever you wanna call it. Can promise I'll be able to put it to music.

[kiekie84]

loved it you need to make your own song your music great voice it's very mmmmmmm aaaaaaa mmmm amazing that's it there's the word I'm looking for breathe taking speechlessly awesome please if she doesn't wanna put it in her song make the rest of this into your own song and please make a another song anyway whether she chooses this or not! thank bye

[IamRafe]

@kiekie84 Wow, I'm flattered, I've already decided to write more just to finish this up. I doubt I would sing it though...I don't think I'm very good and I can't play any instruments.

[kiekie84]

@IamRafe learn to play! :)

[kiekie84]

loved it

[IamRafe]

@kiekie84 Thank you very much. Means a lot that you can look past the fact I'm not a very talented singer, but you can still enjoy the lyrics.

[LasVegas1813]

Great! :D

[IamRafe]

@LasVegas1813 Hey, thanks!