It's a good effort but I think you missed a lot of the beats in the script. Without them the drama in the scene doesn't have as much impact as it should and we don't really get any insight into the characters. Should also have been able to see a lot more of their faces in the shots.
I think where it loses me is once everyone stands up. The four actors together are crowding the frame, when this moment should really be between Frank, April, and John. In fact, April is completely out of the frame during the exchange, and part of what makes the scene so powerful is that John is deconstructing their happy face that they put on everything, so seeing their reactions to him and her reaction to Frank's outburst are key. Otherwise well done, I enjoyed it.
It's... alright I guess. Personal opinion, the acting feels stiff, especially on Franks and Johns part. But I guess it's good for what it's worth. The style is nice, but the subtleness of the emotions in the scene seem to fade cause of how quick it moves.
The exterior shot is stock footage I found on the Internet. This scene was shot in a TV style studio as part of a film directing class at Los Angeles City College. We had three walls and dressed the set to look like a 50's style house.
It's a good effort but I think you missed a lot of the beats in the script. Without them the drama in the scene doesn't have as much impact as it should and we don't really get any insight into the characters. Should also have been able to see a lot more of their faces in the shots.
popaddict 1 year ago
I think where it loses me is once everyone stands up. The four actors together are crowding the frame, when this moment should really be between Frank, April, and John. In fact, April is completely out of the frame during the exchange, and part of what makes the scene so powerful is that John is deconstructing their happy face that they put on everything, so seeing their reactions to him and her reaction to Frank's outburst are key. Otherwise well done, I enjoyed it.
SgtFluffyMcFay 1 year ago
directing pretty good... acting SUCKY
purpleizzie 1 year ago
It's... alright I guess. Personal opinion, the acting feels stiff, especially on Franks and Johns part. But I guess it's good for what it's worth. The style is nice, but the subtleness of the emotions in the scene seem to fade cause of how quick it moves.
Just my opinion. It's alright.
LieHonest 2 years ago
I like the house and the interior decoration.
Where did you shoot this? where in l.a.?
Isaiasm2006 2 years ago
The exterior shot is stock footage I found on the Internet. This scene was shot in a TV style studio as part of a film directing class at Los Angeles City College. We had three walls and dressed the set to look like a 50's style house.
LAactorTrent 2 years ago
:25-:35 Awesome segue from personal-ness to a dinner conversation. The brief pause before taking the lemonade to the table is perfect.
2:03-2:25 Nice camera angle =D
2:26 - Conversation with off screen character - awkward.
3:14-3:27 Awesome continued zooming in.
trentjl05 2 years ago
Hey Trent! Great video. Thumbs up man, keep it up and u might be the next George Lucas!
djklon3r 2 years ago