Liked the action and the shots. The trouble with this tale could be fixed by changing the line from "120 seconds" to "10 minutes". There is no way he covered all that space and action within that time.
That simple VO change would have made the film far more enjoyable and believable. It would have also made the film more intense. More time means more time for our character to worry.
The phone ringing at the end was a cleaver idea, but it didn't work. He needed to move for the phone. -Luke
I enjoyed the pacing of your film and the actioness of it. I think the ending was kind of lame though. Aslo the first cut from the title to the Cu on his face with the pan down to the phone was rough because the camera isn't moving enough off axis a cutaway would really help that.
I like the knock out to black shot. Good job. Your color in the bedroom scene was great, too. The countdown timer was a bit on the cheesy side. The use of the baseball was great-one of the most organic uses I think I've seen so far. Good luck!
I loved everything about this short film....the music, the mood, the way it was shot, the concept, and the actors fight scene. Very well made. Keep them coming!
I loved everything about this short film....the music, the mood, the way it was shot, the concept, and the actors fight scene. Very well made. Keep them coming!
Good job, I think the ending is sooo great!
Skook91 2 years ago
Cool! This is really good! Keeps you in suspense and leaves you wondering what's next. Going to watch the sequel...
LadyAbigail90 4 years ago
So....did you win?
trinitychild 4 years ago
We got 5th place out of 71 submissions.
cjjrufcut 4 years ago
Haha, this is awesome man! Great work, high speed and a catch ending.
DanielGardner 4 years ago
Liked the action and the shots. The trouble with this tale could be fixed by changing the line from "120 seconds" to "10 minutes". There is no way he covered all that space and action within that time.
That simple VO change would have made the film far more enjoyable and believable. It would have also made the film more intense. More time means more time for our character to worry.
The phone ringing at the end was a cleaver idea, but it didn't work. He needed to move for the phone. -Luke
TomySky 4 years ago
I enjoyed the pacing of your film and the actioness of it. I think the ending was kind of lame though. Aslo the first cut from the title to the Cu on his face with the pan down to the phone was rough because the camera isn't moving enough off axis a cutaway would really help that.
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EmotionalPictures 4 years ago
Stay tuned for the Extended Edition. Coming soon!
cjjrufcut 4 years ago
Wow, that was some nice work; overall well done.
stephennasby 4 years ago
I like the knock out to black shot. Good job. Your color in the bedroom scene was great, too. The countdown timer was a bit on the cheesy side. The use of the baseball was great-one of the most organic uses I think I've seen so far. Good luck!
wilkinson4925 4 years ago
Very, very, very well-shot!! Bravo and good luck!
RuthLaroche 4 years ago
I loved everything about this short film....the music, the mood, the way it was shot, the concept, and the actors fight scene. Very well made. Keep them coming!
trinitychild 4 years ago
I loved everything about this short film....the music, the mood, the way it was shot, the concept, and the actors fight scene. Very well made. Keep them coming!
trinitychild 4 years ago