Not bad. I would maybe add a little something to the hook/chorus. One thing I hate in hip-hop today is repetitiveness. I don't hate your song though bro. If you were selling millions with that hook, I might hate it a little bit. I like your E-40ish flow. I understand your style, so I know you weren't off beat very much, but there were parts that sounded like you slipped a little bit. Still good work man. Never give up.
Sounds like there is potential there...less words would be more if you get what I mean, give the beat a chance to come thru and weave vocals in and out of the beat etc....big up to you though for the positive vibe...and for going against the 'low vibrational' hip-hop that has flooded the scene. Keep on going...and thanks for the heads up. :-)
Yo Ram, i'm a conscious artist from Philly Pa.... i def see ur potential! once i get out the studio ima link u in to some jawns yo... i like what ur doing, i respect what ur doing, just keep at it, the light inside u can only shine brighter ! like ur style, just dig deeper and tap into the funk and raw material famz.... thanks 4 the song ....i'll be listenin..get back...ONE.....
Not bad buddy!!!. It needs a little work, but I like what I;m hearing so far. Stay @ it because in order 2 b a good emcee you have 2 stay dedicated. I like it you have potential develop it. WORD!!!!!!!!!!
Just got to get your 4/4 down alil bit better.Other than that still hot.Also id tweak the hook like add an effect to it to make it stand out.I think you should practice rapping over the fourth beat.Its a technique that very few have mastered but greats like nas em and big daddy kane have made it sound pretty dope.Even biggie has done it in a few songs.
I enjoy cannabis for inspiration and creativity in my rhymes. Also I couldn't really free style unless I was high. That is how I can freestyle much better now.
ok, I agree with a lot of these coments. The lyrics are above average, but the beat isnt engaging and the flow isnt consistant. Not hating, just giving my 2 cents. Keep going man, u have potential
I like the lyrics but you didn't flow on the beat. Sounds like you got nervous and just ran through the lyrics. Of course your nice, now to just work on that confidence and the flow and everything else will just role into place. MC to MC...you aight.
it seems like you was stressed when you rapped. it sounds like you were reading those lines off a sheet. you have to relax and feel the beat. i dont really like it
Hey scinny, i got your message. I like this song you made, id like to add a few bits of advice though. The flow is a bit off and you seem a bit tense when you sing. Try to keep the flow at a relaxed constant flow. Other then that, it's great :) Props. Especially considering this is 2004, i think youve made a huge progress ever since 2004. Looking forward to hearing from you about your new songs. :P
nice flow and good lyrically the beat sounds similliar to the sort of beat that blu uses in that it is pretty cool jazz style over all its pretty good nice street fighter reference to "yoga flame" and lotr reference "i have enough wisdom to make sauroman "
Quite a good song and beat, is the singer/rapper from Miami or around there? reminds me of a song from 2 Fast 2 Furious(no not the one by ludacris, a different one =/).
It's good shit! But let me throw this at you, if you want to get heard, you run a remix to a legends beat. What I mean is simply get a beat straight out of an artist. Your lyrics are dope, and people will not understand them, that's not me being cruel, it's just today's "game". Do a remix to this beat, Mobb Deep-Give it up fast instrumental, I really think you could pull it off. Ease up on the chorus, don't spit to fast on it, you do that, i'll get you heard!
there is a seriously problem with not enuf lyricists and ur vocab/metaphorical ability is some of the best ive heard ur only problem is that some dumasses mite not get half the punchlines haha but yea the beat isnt quitwe rite for this track plus it would be ill if u got a good female vocal for the hook
U asked for my opinon ..... U sound a bit like EMM, maybe u should slow sown the lyrics a bit, I like the lryics there positive, and edjucated. I think if ur tryin to break in the bizz just try hard you find ur spot, u have talent dont let it go, but who am I >? just a regular chick with an ear for good music at least I think so, lol
ay u sent me a message to check out this vid, and i did. like u said urself the rythym is a little off but forreal the lyrics are dope. im feeling this shit and im gone check out some of ur other shit. peace
Not bad. I would maybe add a little something to the hook/chorus. One thing I hate in hip-hop today is repetitiveness. I don't hate your song though bro. If you were selling millions with that hook, I might hate it a little bit. I like your E-40ish flow. I understand your style, so I know you weren't off beat very much, but there were parts that sounded like you slipped a little bit. Still good work man. Never give up.
JayDoubleEweAre 2 months ago
Tight lyrics, and the bells and horns are tight. I'm no expert but have listened to hip hop since 1991 ; I give it a 9/10
heysteele 2 months ago
Nice lyrics, but the beat aint saying nothing :)
BronzeEmpress 2 months ago
Sounds like there is potential there...less words would be more if you get what I mean, give the beat a chance to come thru and weave vocals in and out of the beat etc....big up to you though for the positive vibe...and for going against the 'low vibrational' hip-hop that has flooded the scene. Keep on going...and thanks for the heads up. :-)
roachy333 2 months ago
You Listen to alot of Aceyalone don't You ? haha Keep Up the Work Hope to Hear More Originality is the Key all love
onemanarmyasonrip210 2 months ago
Well... You got my sub...
MrHedgehog37 2 months ago
nice song bro keep posting more songs, I wnat to hear more from u and I want to see more potential
PunktualTruth 3 months ago
Yo Ram, i'm a conscious artist from Philly Pa.... i def see ur potential! once i get out the studio ima link u in to some jawns yo... i like what ur doing, i respect what ur doing, just keep at it, the light inside u can only shine brighter ! like ur style, just dig deeper and tap into the funk and raw material famz.... thanks 4 the song ....i'll be listenin..get back...ONE.....
insano1971 4 months ago
yeah, you could've changed the beat where your voice syncs with the beats. regardless, good rap bro.
DragonEXecuTionER 5 months ago
Keep Doing what u do Brother!
Da4Corners 5 months ago
decent lyrics brah keep it up!
cror 5 months ago
knowledge...
brainsick213 5 months ago
cool
ATCQFAN17 5 months ago
Nice job bro
smithree7733 5 months ago
its ok its not bad
mjsbadgirlfriend1 5 months ago
Not bad buddy!!!. It needs a little work, but I like what I;m hearing so far. Stay @ it because in order 2 b a good emcee you have 2 stay dedicated. I like it you have potential develop it. WORD!!!!!!!!!!
ewaythegreat 5 months ago
ur drum beat is off, try do it without the instrumental
florastacey9229 5 months ago
let all talk man, i think your idea is very refreshing and raw in a cool way
it personalises you and to me that is what hip hop is all about
if people want smooth shit pls just go watch whats left over from what used to be MTV
Combinia 5 months ago
this is dope good job hardly ever hear music like this anymore
JMS13579 5 months ago
i like your rap just the beat ruins your flow.
alexisgood9000 5 months ago
Just got to get your 4/4 down alil bit better.Other than that still hot.Also id tweak the hook like add an effect to it to make it stand out.I think you should practice rapping over the fourth beat.Its a technique that very few have mastered but greats like nas em and big daddy kane have made it sound pretty dope.Even biggie has done it in a few songs.
Brockthepain 5 months ago
I enjoy cannabis for inspiration and creativity in my rhymes. Also I couldn't really free style unless I was high. That is how I can freestyle much better now.
MistaBrown420 5 months ago
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MistaBrown420 5 months ago
not bad man, like to see how u rap now 7 years later lol
999qqoopo 5 months ago
Good music I like this
alwayA2I 5 months ago
aceyalone flow, thats who u remind me of
microphoneboner 5 months ago
i like your realness. jazz is ill boi.
microphoneboner 5 months ago
You remind me of that classic emcee style like Grand Master Flash or Melle Mel. You been writing since 04?
MariosLasagna 6 months ago
Nice lyrics, love the beat, cool voice. I also like the topic. Good job!
YoungDaVinci91 9 months ago
ok, I agree with a lot of these coments. The lyrics are above average, but the beat isnt engaging and the flow isnt consistant. Not hating, just giving my 2 cents. Keep going man, u have potential
TeddyWestGeass 9 months ago
It sounds like you're reading something really fast, it doesn't sound like you're rapping, if you get what I mean.
CreativePotion 9 months ago
Beat needs to change, lyrics are all good, read your comments theirs some good feedback
z0Vadenez0z 11 months ago
the lyrics are alright.
BUT GOD CHANGE THE BEAT MAN.
and you need a faster beat cause you cant flow to this slow beat so try to speed up your beats.
and if you have a slow beat try to put as little words in a bar as possible because if you dont do that then the whole song will flop.
thankyou for sending me the link to your song, i will definetly keep my eye on you.
mania17austin 11 months ago 6
lyrics are awsome but horrible beat and horrible flow
DeeJayVirk 1 year ago
Pretty good. keep doin it. dont listen to these haters. there after everyone.
TheCrazz123 1 year ago
terrable
SirLilSpazer 1 year ago
HORRIBLE......
jonez19 1 year ago
@jonez19 better than that bitch gayass lil wanye
thesouthrapsucks 1 year ago 12
@thesouthrapsucks hahahaha word....
insano1971 4 months ago
ok this is good but the lyrical commando sucks
AsianBoiee 1 year ago
the beat is nice. rhymes nice... not so sure they flow together...lol but i dig it... ;)
SevenShad7 1 year ago
Dope rhymes! it's not completely of beat....
-Da Wize Deciple
THEHRHOFTIME 1 year ago
off the flow, my man. need some improvement. you can do better. =)
chugdog 1 year ago
Good job!
DavePerry2012 1 year ago
I'd let the lyrics flow off the tongue a bit better. I think a better beat would help as well. Try a Bay Area beat once.
Other than that, I'm feelin' it. Keep doin what you do.
JSqAuD14 1 year ago 2
I like the lyrics but you didn't flow on the beat. Sounds like you got nervous and just ran through the lyrics. Of course your nice, now to just work on that confidence and the flow and everything else will just role into place. MC to MC...you aight.
Blaxxx305 1 year ago
it seems like you was stressed when you rapped. it sounds like you were reading those lines off a sheet. you have to relax and feel the beat. i dont really like it
DrivinMeWild09 1 year ago
Hey scinny, i got your message. I like this song you made, id like to add a few bits of advice though. The flow is a bit off and you seem a bit tense when you sing. Try to keep the flow at a relaxed constant flow. Other then that, it's great :) Props. Especially considering this is 2004, i think youve made a huge progress ever since 2004. Looking forward to hearing from you about your new songs. :P
dethcrypt 1 year ago
use a metronome when you rap, that will help you stay in the pocket... "you cant hold no groove if you ain't got no pocket."- JD Blair
TOPCAT3443 1 year ago
Your flow is a little off
chicagoo17 1 year ago
lol......
123Angel23 1 year ago
I like it man, keep doing your thing. Trust your instincts.
DirtMcGurt024 1 year ago
nice flow and good lyrically the beat sounds similliar to the sort of beat that blu uses in that it is pretty cool jazz style over all its pretty good nice street fighter reference to "yoga flame" and lotr reference "i have enough wisdom to make sauroman "
Imortals300 1 year ago
Quite a good song and beat, is the singer/rapper from Miami or around there? reminds me of a song from 2 Fast 2 Furious(no not the one by ludacris, a different one =/).
Johny40Se7en 1 year ago
dope
thesouthrapsucks 1 year ago
It's good shit! But let me throw this at you, if you want to get heard, you run a remix to a legends beat. What I mean is simply get a beat straight out of an artist. Your lyrics are dope, and people will not understand them, that's not me being cruel, it's just today's "game". Do a remix to this beat, Mobb Deep-Give it up fast instrumental, I really think you could pull it off. Ease up on the chorus, don't spit to fast on it, you do that, i'll get you heard!
blackpowerfreak 1 year ago
Good enough to subscribe to, keep posting shit, might even motivate me to get off my ass and actually post something.
Compton3clipsed 1 year ago
good job
ochocincoTO 1 year ago
lyrically sweet
there is a seriously problem with not enuf lyricists and ur vocab/metaphorical ability is some of the best ive heard ur only problem is that some dumasses mite not get half the punchlines haha but yea the beat isnt quitwe rite for this track plus it would be ill if u got a good female vocal for the hook
LUPEisBoss 1 year ago
its not how it sounds but what the message is about.
Djretrospective 1 year ago
I dig this!
jarbon5 1 year ago
hey, it's cool. i like it!
restlesssoul999 1 year ago
fuckin illin
halo239 1 year ago
you still suck
tazerAKAluis 2 years ago
NOT BAD!! Listen to a track by "'"DP' The platform' Just do it.
TLMNIKE86 2 years ago
5/5 ***
scarfacekilla1232 2 years ago
U asked for my opinon ..... U sound a bit like EMM, maybe u should slow sown the lyrics a bit, I like the lryics there positive, and edjucated. I think if ur tryin to break in the bizz just try hard you find ur spot, u have talent dont let it go, but who am I >? just a regular chick with an ear for good music at least I think so, lol
heidisworld2000 2 years ago
ay u sent me a message to check out this vid, and i did. like u said urself the rythym is a little off but forreal the lyrics are dope. im feeling this shit and im gone check out some of ur other shit. peace
youngvito262 2 years ago
5 stars*****.great
"migue3333"
migue3333 2 years ago
meeh, the flow won't do.
But skhizofrenik is .. better.
But where'd you record your music.
IrennMo 2 years ago