I get the idea, but it could be done a whole lot better. Like for example employ the "rapture technique"... there are volunteers but then they suddenly disappear. And just the three people are left. And then the phone rings, surprise its one of the previous volunteers asking how things are going with just you three! Make it more like a real twilight zone episode. Rewritten and re-shot. Don't worry you're acting will be better the second time around!
You could come up with your own vision, but it was just an idea I had. It was supposed to be constructive critcism but if it came off the wrong way I'm sorry. Pray about it and see what God wants you to do. Personally I like the video.
LMAO... diddnt make much sence but the guuy potraying the narator did a pretty good jub... wish i could say the same for the rest of the acting in this short film
He didn't get eaten. The last image of the video shows him tied up and the kids playing around him. I had to add that so people didn't think the kids killed him! :-)
I laughed till I cried--very well put together, and very effective!
cindywindy7777 2 years ago
god, they barely cried when their son died!!!
superduperbecca 3 years ago
He didn't die. You need to watch to the end. You see him at the end, alive, and almost well.
randytenn 3 years ago
that was cool keep up the good work
johnied8509 3 years ago
Very cool - 10!
God Bless. ;-)
SkyCat0729 4 years ago
Thats not too bad at all a bit predictable toward the end.
26TM73 4 years ago
;:-0
That was just... weird.
prophesize 4 years ago
That is one strange church.
Minfire 4 years ago
Listen to chado2423. He knows what he's talking about!!
StevenMSchubert 4 years ago
omg dude
StevenMSchubert 4 years ago
i volunteer every 2 days in the twilight zone ...
tazer5 4 years ago
I get the idea, but it could be done a whole lot better. Like for example employ the "rapture technique"... there are volunteers but then they suddenly disappear. And just the three people are left. And then the phone rings, surprise its one of the previous volunteers asking how things are going with just you three! Make it more like a real twilight zone episode. Rewritten and re-shot. Don't worry you're acting will be better the second time around!
chado2423 4 years ago
Yeah, go right ahead and film that version. I'd be happy to see it. As far as me re-writing and re-shooting, not going to happen.
randytenn 4 years ago
You could come up with your own vision, but it was just an idea I had. It was supposed to be constructive critcism but if it came off the wrong way I'm sorry. Pray about it and see what God wants you to do. Personally I like the video.
chado2423 4 years ago 3
The storyline has a good premise, yet this calls for a rewrite.
chado2423 4 years ago
I liked it overall, but I didn't entirely understand it. Guess the kids took over the place. Kinda like real life.
4everAslave 4 years ago
Thanks for the comments. The whole idea is about a church without volunteers is like a church in the Twilight Zone.
As far as the acting, they did their best. They aren't professionals. They are church members who gave two days for filming.
randytenn 4 years ago
LMAO... diddnt make much sence but the guuy potraying the narator did a pretty good jub... wish i could say the same for the rest of the acting in this short film
TheUnknown30 4 years ago
lol this is too funny
dewhaul 4 years ago
That was pretty good. I liked the part how Andrew got eaten or whatever by the little kids, and they still wanted to go to church lol
hell01234 4 years ago
He didn't get eaten. The last image of the video shows him tied up and the kids playing around him. I had to add that so people didn't think the kids killed him! :-)
randytenn 4 years ago
the idea was good but then the story was all messed up and seem to follow an unreasonable and ilogical pace
8Revan8 4 years ago
pretty good. keep it up
Paully41 4 years ago
Pretty cool.
merryberry1234 5 years ago