Snowfeet's poem collective (Line 2) by Abi

[harleynanda]

I agree with Lo (tinySpectacle), your realization lends and air of suspense, as if setting the lay of a mystery to be revealed. Nice touch.

[tinySpectacle]

Great line. I like how it breaths in some background and suspense as to the person speaking.

[FOSEEBOY]

I bet the song you were dreaming was ''I WANNA HOLD YOUR HAND''....

[TheSoSoAgnostic]

The Whirling Dervishes did that "you're a mean one, Mr. Grinch" song. :) Let the holiday season begin!

[ivebeenthere1]

I spin when I dance....my lack of balance

awesome words....love this!!

[bunnycatch3r]

Perhaps you were listening to a melody of Shams of Tabriz

[HaleyMary]

This poem gets better and better. I like these collective poems, 'cause it sort of feels like a choose your own adventure story with each person deciding what happens in the poem next. I still have to think of a line to add to this collective. :)

[snowfeet]

That's a great description--the choose your own adventure poem. I look forward to seeing when you get inspired to jump in and add your voice, HaleyMary.

[TheReasonWhyGuy]

@.@

dervish?

[CousinoMacul]

Dervishes are Chinese dancers that spin when they dance. Do a YouTube search, you'll see.

[snowfeet]

Now you don't even have to search. U2beOliver has posted a video of Whirling Dervishes as a response.