That wasn't very good. It didn't really have an ending or a beginning, it just opened with two guys talking, then mindless killing for the next 6 minutes, you need to improve on your script work, its not that great. You need to also think on timing, there were some clips where you start recording, and you take forever to know when the characters start moving. There were some good parts, like the cinematography, but thats about it. If you improve on your writing, your machinimas can be better.
We've already clearly pointed out in the description that we know there are some things wrong with it. I would pull out the "you're one to talk" argument, but I'm not about to get into some long argument that dominates the comments section. In any case, we know there some things we need to work on, as we have gotten some helpful critique from Machinima forums.
It's actually pretty funny. But you should change the title. There's another sort of machinima called "Last Man Standing" also. It's a Halo game show kind of thing. But otherwise, I loved watching this.
good one but if you listen you can hear a forge moniter and you can see the kill boundrys... not complianing just saying a rule making a movie is to watch over your recordings carefully or that happens. still like you said its your first
Who won.?
billybobjoe0976 4 months ago
gay
killerweman1 1 year ago
@killerweman1 look in a mirror
CoolMosh345 11 months ago
@CoolMosh345 i did and i see some one awesome what about you.
killerweman1 11 months ago
@killerweman1 Wait... You can't cuz it smashed when you looked in it,
Ugly bastard
CoolMosh345 11 months ago
@CoolMosh345 play nice kitties
Holymarine777 9 months ago
@killerweman1 play nice kitties
Holymarine777 9 months ago
did anybody here the betrayel at 4:46
SuperMacAtak 1 year ago
That wasn't very good. It didn't really have an ending or a beginning, it just opened with two guys talking, then mindless killing for the next 6 minutes, you need to improve on your script work, its not that great. You need to also think on timing, there were some clips where you start recording, and you take forever to know when the characters start moving. There were some good parts, like the cinematography, but thats about it. If you improve on your writing, your machinimas can be better.
kubrickman 1 year ago
@kubrickman
We've already clearly pointed out in the description that we know there are some things wrong with it. I would pull out the "you're one to talk" argument, but I'm not about to get into some long argument that dominates the comments section. In any case, we know there some things we need to work on, as we have gotten some helpful critique from Machinima forums.
fongwongchew 1 year ago
2:40 in forge.
FagTage4Halo 1 year ago
"BETRAYAL!!!"
katanamaster996969 1 year ago
One thing, atleast try to sound like you mean it when voicing a "machinima".
Peopleisgta 1 year ago
It's actually pretty funny. But you should change the title. There's another sort of machinima called "Last Man Standing" also. It's a Halo game show kind of thing. But otherwise, I loved watching this.
Mikethegr8tTiger4552 1 year ago
@Mikethegr8tTiger4552 Thanks, yeah there is a ton of machinimas with the same name, i will have to find a different one
BlueFluidStudios 1 year ago
@BlueFluidStudios and you guys should add alot more bad words like shit that would make it a lot funnyer
maxicansk8ter 1 year ago
good one but if you listen you can hear a forge moniter and you can see the kill boundrys... not complianing just saying a rule making a movie is to watch over your recordings carefully or that happens. still like you said its your first
SKITSmcFRITS 1 year ago
I like the way this turned out. Not the best, but oh well.
fongwongchew 1 year ago
i like it
UEMstudios 1 year ago
At about 3:00, you can hear the monitor whizzing around.
nocbl2 1 year ago
@nocbl2 yeah i forgot about that when i was editing
BlueFluidStudios 1 year ago
Beautifully done
kamstudioz 1 year ago