You sound out of breath.... It also sounds like you didn't practice a lot before posting your voice in the song. I bet if you fixed that and made the background lyrics come out better you could have a successful song... I plan on posting a version of myself sining this song although my interpretation of where I put the lyrics is a bit different. I don't mean to come across rude I'm just trying to give you some good criticism.
@crazylazygirl07 no no thats good that i get some constructive critisism but yeah i was worn out becasue i took so many takes that i just lost my voice and i was using my air efficiently but hopefully i can redo it (at the time i was on a limited time slot so i had to do it quick)
@we2 Please redo it, I like your voice and (yes you sound a tad worn out) am really looking forward to this possible future! I really liked the echo you had in the 1st verse, I'd add a little more of it through out perhaps. Please redo, you're the first vocal I've heard that did this and I LOVE the instrumental and story behind it. :)
@aralearachel Also, I'd try and make your voice not so flat, maybe tone it or layer it over the instrumental? It sounds as though laid under the music, and I'd love to hear a better blend, since your the first of two that I've heard and yours is fabulous!
Don't put so much stress on 'lining' (V1, line 5). I don't know if it was a fluke or not, but you were unable to reach that note so it took away a lot from your performance. (Shortening it to "line-in' " would be better than having it as "line-in' -ing")
Good luck in your career. Hope to hear more from you; perhaps something you've written yourself next time?
You started out rather shaky in the first verse, but once you hit the chorus, you evened out. It was really hard to understand what you were saying in the first verse when I originally heard it - but easier the second time.
You should practice singing the verses more than the chorus to make it even out.
Also; the dual singer is hard to hear (in the parentheses in your verses). You should have her (yourself?) come in a few seconds later or have her louder. It's very hard to understand/hear her.
Oh my! This fantastic! The lyrics are great and you sang it beautifully. Thank you so much for taking the time to make this! <3 It really made my day :)
I got here by reading Knite and seeing that there was a song. Personally, I adore this, even more so because it has to do with Knite. Thank you for making this!
@we2 It's fine! ^.^ I agree with Yuccuska. You have a nice voice, particularly for this song. Don't tear yourself down before you have a chance to be built up!
love the instrumental....its just i didnt picture the song to be sung like that. (no offense). I love knite though!
Inuyashyuzaha 1 week ago
i searched about the word in the lyrics blight...and it was so awkard..or i just searched wrong....enough of that ....love the song :D so nice!
uzuluna 2 months ago
This song is simply amazing. The lyrics, the melody, your voice, are so beautiful.
Can I make a cover of this song? I'll mention you, and also yuumei and Knites :)
xxAdytzaxx 2 months ago
@xxAdytzaxx sure if you would like but i didnt write the song
we2 2 months ago
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xxAdytzaxx 2 months ago
@we2 Thank you ^^
xxAdytzaxx 2 months ago
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xxAdytzaxx 2 months ago
@xelanesqueHQ why shall she disappear? noone shall disappear. even if their work isn't inspiring and so on. I like yuumei's art.
Anko0x0 4 months ago
@Anko0x0 bitch off
xelanesqueHQ 1 week ago
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xelanesqueHQ 4 months ago
@xelanesqueHQ true i got dinged today for one of my art pieces making someone uncomfortable
we2 4 months ago
@xelanesqueHQ learn to speak in a proper way or talk with yourself amigos ;)
Anko0x0 1 week ago
@xelanesqueHQ entitled to thier opinion
we2 4 months ago
You sound out of breath.... It also sounds like you didn't practice a lot before posting your voice in the song. I bet if you fixed that and made the background lyrics come out better you could have a successful song... I plan on posting a version of myself sining this song although my interpretation of where I put the lyrics is a bit different. I don't mean to come across rude I'm just trying to give you some good criticism.
crazylazygirl07 4 months ago
@crazylazygirl07 no no thats good that i get some constructive critisism but yeah i was worn out becasue i took so many takes that i just lost my voice and i was using my air efficiently but hopefully i can redo it (at the time i was on a limited time slot so i had to do it quick)
we2 4 months ago
@we2 I see... Well i can't wait to hear an updated version... i think i should be able to record my own version by sunday... not quite sure.
crazylazygirl07 4 months ago
@we2 Please redo it, I like your voice and (yes you sound a tad worn out) am really looking forward to this possible future! I really liked the echo you had in the 1st verse, I'd add a little more of it through out perhaps. Please redo, you're the first vocal I've heard that did this and I LOVE the instrumental and story behind it. :)
aralearachel 1 month ago in playlist Uploaded videos
@aralearachel Also, I'd try and make your voice not so flat, maybe tone it or layer it over the instrumental? It sounds as though laid under the music, and I'd love to hear a better blend, since your the first of two that I've heard and yours is fabulous!
aralearachel 1 month ago
Did you get mp3, or did you just play the song and started recording? :P
JelloFlavoredSkittle 4 months ago
@JelloFlavoredSkittle i got the mp3
we2 4 months ago
@we2 Where did you get the mp3? :o
JelloFlavoredSkittle 4 months ago
@JelloFlavoredSkittle i got it from the creator of the song on da (he gave me a link)
we2 4 months ago
@we2 Oh, thx for telling me
JelloFlavoredSkittle 4 months ago
(Continued)
Don't put so much stress on 'lining' (V1, line 5). I don't know if it was a fluke or not, but you were unable to reach that note so it took away a lot from your performance. (Shortening it to "line-in' " would be better than having it as "line-in' -ing")
Good luck in your career. Hope to hear more from you; perhaps something you've written yourself next time?
Tsukasa24 4 months ago
You started out rather shaky in the first verse, but once you hit the chorus, you evened out. It was really hard to understand what you were saying in the first verse when I originally heard it - but easier the second time.
You should practice singing the verses more than the chorus to make it even out.
Also; the dual singer is hard to hear (in the parentheses in your verses). You should have her (yourself?) come in a few seconds later or have her louder. It's very hard to understand/hear her.
Tsukasa24 4 months ago
@Tsukasa24 wow thank you i'm glad someone finally gave me a good critique fo what to do i will remeber that when i finish my own song
we2 4 months ago
Where did you get the mp3 for this to sing to?
And your voice doesn't suck, I really like it, it's a nice contrast to the music<3
Fyrakins 5 months ago
YES!! Finall I did find a sung version of this song, thank you so much. You're a really good singe <33
Anko0x0 6 months ago
The one, who dislikes this, may PM me!
duperhero2 6 months ago
Oh my! This fantastic! The lyrics are great and you sang it beautifully. Thank you so much for taking the time to make this! <3 It really made my day :)
akuyuumei 7 months ago
Yes i know who wrote it, :D
Yuccuska 7 months ago
Beautiful~! :D
KleptoCosplayer 7 months ago
I got here by reading Knite too.
I like it, I think you have really nice voice, it fits the music and story. The chorus sounds the best :D
Yuccuska 7 months ago 2
@Yuccuska thank you i'm glad you think so. I didnt write the song though
we2 7 months ago
@we2 Glad to know. Hope it comes out nicely.
Tsukasa24 4 months ago
I got here by reading Knite and seeing that there was a song. Personally, I adore this, even more so because it has to do with Knite. Thank you for making this!
fluffyhellbunny13 7 months ago
@fluffyhellbunny13 oh thank you i'm sorry if my voice sucks
we2 7 months ago
@fluffyhellbunny13 oh sorry i got confused by your comment i'm sorry
we2 7 months ago
@we2 It's fine! ^.^ I agree with Yuccuska. You have a nice voice, particularly for this song. Don't tear yourself down before you have a chance to be built up!
fluffyhellbunny13 7 months ago
yeah i know my singing sucks it's official
we2 7 months ago