All in all, it wasn't bad for a quick little project on no budget done in one afternoon. It kept me mildly entertained(although maybe not for the reasons you expected) and it had a few believable and sincere moments. As I said at the start, I especially liked the opening and closing narration. Whoever that girl is, she was damn good at her role. Just remember the things I said and take them into account the next time you make a film, and I bet you guys will do something great. Good luck. =)
Also: The costumes. The only one that was believable for the period was Gary's mother. The Man In The Black Suit MIGHT have been believable if you ditched the sunglasses, and you could handwave it by saying that he's supernatural, but why go through the trouble and leave holes in the story? Just ditch the glasses. The biggest offender in the costumes department was Gary's father, who looked more like a student at ITT Tech rather than anything a man in the early 20th century would look like.
@yonapaloma That doesn't make it immune to constructive criticism. I saw potential, and so I elected to point out what needed work. I'm sorry if I offended you.
I know your special effects budget was almost non-existent, but for the love of God WHY did you have Gary feed the Man In The Black Suit the fish? In the text he threw the fish at him, and the man caught and ate it. It wouldn't have been that hard to do(unless the guy you had playing him just couldn't catch a damn thing, which I doubt) and it would have made Gary's panic come across as genuine. By having him "feed" him the fish, and including that narmy dialog, it comes across as very silly.
Your titular Man In The Black Suit was likewise not scary. Strangely, his actor cycled between boring(his delivery of the news of Gary's mother) and unintentionally hilarious("big fish! biiiig fissshhh!") I guess it's no surprise that Gary's actor looked like he was trying not to laugh. That guy was probably the best addition to your film, but for all the wrong reasons.
The opening music and the girl's narration through the diary music was spectacular. It was what hooked me in, and as you probably know, hooking an audience with your opening shots is very important. After that, however, things started going downhill. The acting, for one. The acting was wooden and lifeless. Your actors seemed bored. They recited the dialog(which I'm assuming was taken almost verbatim from the story) without emotion.
This sucked more dick than Elton John on Valentines Day
JoseyJames 2 weeks ago
What the FUCK....Where's Gandalf??
JoseyJames 2 weeks ago
Dude I imagined the Black suit man to be a complete 180 from what I see here.
kapow951 2 weeks ago
Pretty good I guess. I mean you guys aren't the best actors. Props for the LOTR music though!
bitteroblivionhazza 1 month ago
@TheAllTimeGreatest1 hmmm. well pay attention to the story! The man has died and his granddaughter is reading his diary.
yonapaloma 1 month ago in playlist Uploaded videos
i find this a disgrace :(
4PeacexDarkness 2 months ago
that chick in the beginning has gat a faaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaat ass, hips and thighs. nice ;)
ilovebooty4ever 3 months ago
All in all, it wasn't bad for a quick little project on no budget done in one afternoon. It kept me mildly entertained(although maybe not for the reasons you expected) and it had a few believable and sincere moments. As I said at the start, I especially liked the opening and closing narration. Whoever that girl is, she was damn good at her role. Just remember the things I said and take them into account the next time you make a film, and I bet you guys will do something great. Good luck. =)
ometta7 6 months ago
Also: The costumes. The only one that was believable for the period was Gary's mother. The Man In The Black Suit MIGHT have been believable if you ditched the sunglasses, and you could handwave it by saying that he's supernatural, but why go through the trouble and leave holes in the story? Just ditch the glasses. The biggest offender in the costumes department was Gary's father, who looked more like a student at ITT Tech rather than anything a man in the early 20th century would look like.
ometta7 6 months ago
@ometta7 well, you took this ery seriously for a school project made in about 5 days total.
yonapaloma 1 month ago in playlist Uploaded videos
@yonapaloma That doesn't make it immune to constructive criticism. I saw potential, and so I elected to point out what needed work. I'm sorry if I offended you.
ometta7 1 month ago
I know your special effects budget was almost non-existent, but for the love of God WHY did you have Gary feed the Man In The Black Suit the fish? In the text he threw the fish at him, and the man caught and ate it. It wouldn't have been that hard to do(unless the guy you had playing him just couldn't catch a damn thing, which I doubt) and it would have made Gary's panic come across as genuine. By having him "feed" him the fish, and including that narmy dialog, it comes across as very silly.
ometta7 6 months ago
Your titular Man In The Black Suit was likewise not scary. Strangely, his actor cycled between boring(his delivery of the news of Gary's mother) and unintentionally hilarious("big fish! biiiig fissshhh!") I guess it's no surprise that Gary's actor looked like he was trying not to laugh. That guy was probably the best addition to your film, but for all the wrong reasons.
ometta7 6 months ago
The opening music and the girl's narration through the diary music was spectacular. It was what hooked me in, and as you probably know, hooking an audience with your opening shots is very important. After that, however, things started going downhill. The acting, for one. The acting was wooden and lifeless. Your actors seemed bored. They recited the dialog(which I'm assuming was taken almost verbatim from the story) without emotion.
ometta7 6 months ago
Well, allow me to give you guys a proper critique, because it seems you really did work hard on this...
ometta7 6 months ago
the gay in the black suit
offjeremygoes 8 months ago
not good...
prosteste 9 months ago
get the audio track authorized rights and get this working please . looks awesome but gives thumbs up till you do .
kingangelbiddy 1 year ago
I do have a way to really put a nail in the hand of WMG, a rusted, nail. Message me if you would like to know how to counteract WMG's retardation.
WallyGamerBF2 1 year ago
aww no audio :(
flaom1 1 year ago
That bad at all... is it an official dollar baby?
DBFF 2 years ago
man that fukn sucks i wanted to watch this grrrrrrrrr ur mum is a hoe WMG
DirtyDiana871 2 years ago 4
u guys did pretty good.....i like this video
SudanCarib 2 years ago