Quite a tale, Ronnie darling. A young boy goes on a quest to open the "rainbow gate" and become a man... really fascinating subtext. Sort of a bil-dongs-roman if you know what I mean.
Unfortunately, some of the more turgid imagery aside, it's badly overwritten, and I wasn't too sure why that poor fellow was trudging around in the woods in the beginning.
Still, strong effort. Better luck next time! Remember, less is more.
Some extracts of the poem are available on Goggle books.
The script based on the book is entitled 'The 13TH Sign' and is currently doing the producer's circuit, I've a meeting regarding this later this week in LA.
that "poor fellow" was the handsome and much more...talented actor-director-producer-writer David Bowles...
chocolatcats 3 years ago
I'll always......always adore him. Keri Caye
chocolatcats 3 years ago
Quite a tale, Ronnie darling. A young boy goes on a quest to open the "rainbow gate" and become a man... really fascinating subtext. Sort of a bil-dongs-roman if you know what I mean.
Unfortunately, some of the more turgid imagery aside, it's badly overwritten, and I wasn't too sure why that poor fellow was trudging around in the woods in the beginning.
Still, strong effort. Better luck next time! Remember, less is more.
RoddyHuggins 3 years ago
Mehhhhhh.
NoHayBandaMD 3 years ago
i really like that guy's face. is he welsh? nice music as well. what happens next? you hae a script you want to make a film of i take it?
emmajane 4 years ago
Thanks, I'm sure David is not Welsh!
Some extracts of the poem are available on Goggle books.
The script based on the book is entitled 'The 13TH Sign' and is currently doing the producer's circuit, I've a meeting regarding this later this week in LA.
RonAberdeen 4 years ago
This is only the beginning of the story...
ovo2u 4 years ago
This was the first few pages, there are 84 in total. Please see info.
Thanks for visiting I hope you enjoyed your trip Behind the Frozen Waterfall.
RonAberdeen 4 years ago
The poem is beautifully constructed and read here. A strong setup for an incredible tale. It makes me want to know what happens next.
Read the SP on Zoetrope titled 'The Thirteenth Sign '
You will not be disappointed . I guarantee it.
hannibal21 4 years ago
Thanks and I'm please you want to know more.
RonAberdeen 4 years ago
The poem is beautifully constructed and read here. A strong setup for an incredible tale. It makes me want to know what happens next.
byconnor 4 years ago
That was the idea. Please see info.
Thanks for visiting, I hope you enjoyed the trip.
RonAberdeen 4 years ago
IMHO. Not bad. Like the editing between povs.
Sounds like in-camera mike was used. External
mike woulda sharpened impact of actor's great voice and presentation.
Paulthewriterguy 4 years ago
Glad you liked it. I'm trying to improve the audio and will re-post if successful.
I'm sure David appreciated your comments.
RonAberdeen 4 years ago