Collision 01: The Crash

[blondebullet6241]

you should do a video tour of your house!

thumbs up if you agree

[LegoMasterM]

i sleep

[FuckYou0liSyk3s]

Captions

Lol

[McTylaa]

ZackScott and all of his pets and spiders should be riding on the meteor and when they meet brock they should tell him about their personal lives. that would be EPIC!

[hgfggg1]

I go into the backyard and look around.I feel strangely warm.I spot a small crater.It destroyed my flower bed.Luckily, my sesitive plant survived.I looked into the crater.I saw various minerals,some of which could make me rich.(because some metors have stuff like that in them.)I did not touch them because it was so hot.

[IcyProductionsInc]

a beautfull masterpeice

[LegitTalon]

I just think about the Risk video whenever you say Brock Wood. I love that video.

Also, great start. Maybe you can get it published when it's finished.

[dorkykaya]

Ooooh the suspense.

[xxTHALExx]

thats pretty damn good. I cant wait to hear more

[kyledontforget]

One suggestion, I think you should add closed captioning, if possible. It isn't hard to understand you but it's easy to lose focus, and reading while listening helps. The story was good though, can't wait for the rest!

[imjameslols]

didnt think id actually enjoy this - but that was actually pretty good

kudos.

[PandoraRanger]

Nice story, can't wait for the rest

[PortlandParkour]

part two should have... ZOMBIES... it should come frome the meteor!!

[metalorg]

Historical accuracy is awesome! Brock Albert sounds like a smug jerk - a perfect 80s business man.

Great Job!

[xDrinkingxPerfumex]

WHO is the psychologically disturbed individual who rated this video down?! They shouldn't be walking the streets!!!

[Zsmart]

Big Apple 3 A.M.

[KimberlyAnne618]

that's awesome! can't wait for the next one : )

[ZackScottFunClub]

I have two weeks until I present my next writing. Hopefully I can satisfy @cheesyflames.

You're right though. I did throw it together. I didn't realize my audience craved something more.

[dunpeal21]

Good start. I enjoyed all the references to the time period.

[JustAnotherCellist]

The thumbnail for this video totally looks like "LOLLISION"

[FabuLoosy]

I must say I was very excited about this idea for an interactive story and even more excited when I saw the first video was up, but I have to agree with Brock's comment. Inflection is everything. That's probably one of the reasons why I love your videos so much, actually. Humor just seems to come naturally for you.

However, it IS only the first chapter and I have faith that the Zack Scott we all know and love won't fail to entertain. :)

Can't wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work!!

[AcrossTheRiverStix]

Great job ZackScott :) I really do like the story. Though by fault of my own I was thinking you were gonna do hand drawn, crayola-colored pictures to go with the story! LOL. thumbs up (of course).

[ZackScottFunClub]

@AcrossTheRiverStix Oh man, that would take forever...

[AcrossTheRiverStix]

@ZackScottFunClub hahah I DO love Brock Wood's picture! It's great!

[Brocknoid]

@ZackScottFunClub Crayon drawings wouldn't take forever if you just did the highlights.

[ZackScottFunClub]

@Brocknoid OK, we'll start with you doing your part.

[mickchacon]

awesome

[DerSchnurrbart]

Dammit none of my ideas were used. I #FAIL at ideas.

[Brocknoid]

Jesus...you think that intro was long enough?? Watching you read is even more boring than I thought it would be, which is too bad because what you wrote was pretty solid. I think you need to set the mood better. Read with more personality using tone, inflection, and even hand gestures. Also wear a robe and darken the room a bit. Spice it up, man! Hopefully others will suffer through easier than I did. Can't wait to see the next suggestions.

[ZackScottFunClub]

@Brocknoid Maybe you should read your part over the phone and show me how it's done.

[JnAStudios]

sounds like an interesting beginning!

[marniespeaks]

chapter a day

[cheesyflames]

LOL. No offense, but I wrote better stories when I was in middle school. You're writing in a first-person perspective, but you're writing too plain. It's all too bland, no interesting words, and it isn't descriptive either. I don't think anyone would think - "Another day, another dollar." That's fun to say when I'm on paid vacation. Which I am.

Looks like you whipped this up in 10 minutes. :P

[AcrossTheRiverStix]

LOL...I was thinking the same thing!

[ZackScottFunClub]

@cheesyflames Yeah right, no one is a better writer than I am! >:(

[cheesyflames]

@ZackScottFunClub OMG, A CELEBRITY REPLIED TO MEEE!!! (Well, a Youtube celebrity). Don't worry Scott, even if you aren't a writer, you're still cool.

[Tizdizwiz]

@cheesyflames Well come on then, why dont YOU write your better story right now (preseuming your mental age is above middle school) and write it as a response? Well come on, hurry up, surely you can do something better? ;-)

[cheesyflames]

@Tizdizwiz I can't fit it in 500 characters. o.O

[ZackScottFunClub]

@cheesyflames I think a few sentences would do.

[cheesyflames]

@ZackScottFunClub Okay...what should i write on?

[cheesyflames]

@ZackScottFunClub Wait, nvm, I'll just re-write some lines from your plot;

Suddenly, blinding red light flooded the kitchen. Dirt erupted from a the ground, as a deafening boom sent a tremor throughout the house. We paused and gazed outside in fright. The air grew silent as the dust began to settle...only one thought came to mind...What the hell just happened?

[ZackScottFunClub]

@cheesyflames That's pretty good.

[cheesyflames]

@ZackScottFunClub Thanks! Typo in the 2nd sentence but whatever.

[cheesyflames]

@ZackScottFunClub The newspaper is still good for killing time at the office, however. But this new fad with television is getting really popular; I wouldn’t be surprised if the radio is eaten up too! Hell, would be watching the news right now if the cable guy had showed up on time!

[ZackScottFunClub]

@cheesyflames Rewrite the table part, but keep it first-person present.

[cheesyflames]

@ZackScottFunClub The whole paragraph? Won't fit in a comment.

[ZackScottFunClub]

@cheesyflames Should it go from this:

I slam my paper onto the table and walk over to the phone.

To this...?

I slam my paper onto the table causing its hand-crafted legs to creak under my might. Were I stronger, letters may have fallen from the inked pages only to get swallowed by a collapsing dining area. I arise from my seat and trudge towards my telephone a few steps away.

[cheesyflames]

@ZackScottFunClub Ha ha, that's getting better, but a little too extreme (Unless you were joking, in which this comment will make me look like a fool). :D

[teriakibeefjerky]

@ZackScottFunClub hells ya

[cheesyflames]

@ZackScottFunClub i had to cut it down and split it in two but here ya go- For now, I think I’ll just enjoy my fresh newspaper and hot coffee. The date on the paper seems a little odd; 8/6/86. It must just be a coincidence, so no big deal. I don’t usually read the paper anyways; it seems outdated now that Cable TV is the dominant new media source.

[bouncinmouncin]

It would be cool if you drew pictures that went along with the story.

[heytallman]

Zack wrote "what the hell" quite a few times in this. I am excited for subsequent parts!

[BHIND123]

Your a good writer

[Pinkynose499]

??????????

[Burky619]

fourth???? 

[ElectroSpy1]

4th

[rayster18]

3rdddddddddddddddddddddddddddd­ddddddddddddddddddddd

[LordFitzy]

FIRST HELLZ YEAH !!!!!! zack i need to talk to you!!!! plz send me a message ASAP!!!

[MegaShiny]

Awesome!