that's a great song man I loved it. What a cool story, the fact that it's true makes it even more remarkable. I love a good tale of how life just works out...
I'll save the details for another time but one of the worst things that ever happened to me led directly to me meeting my wife. Does that make it one of the best things that ever happened to me? So I relate to this song a bit, enjoyed it a lot. had to use the dictionary for "gaffe" though. Very cool word now that I know what it means :)
the only other thing that jumps out at me that I would do different. again, I have no idea if it's better. If you like it do it, if you don't don't. the last line it's good you supported the rhyme deck and heck with wooden and what the. matching the W sound in the first syllable and the e sound in the second syllable. I would further support the rhyme by changing "said" to "thought". thought will match consonant sounds with "that" from the first line and would seem to make more sense.
first of all thanks for helping Derek get his videos straightened out. that was driving me nuts ! good song, if it was mine I would keep the cadence going through the last line of the chorus first 4 lines have 5 syllables kind of alternates 2+3, then 3+2, then 2+3, then 3+2. so the last line I'd start 2+3 (but we)(are all glad)then I'd tag on (for that hand)(that he grabbed). I have no idea if that would be better than what you got. It's just what I would do.
I dont know how I missed this one. Thanks Gil
MattZawacki 3 years ago
You like it?
UncleVRoy 3 years ago
Gil And Cheryl said Yeah to this after told them about this here UncleVRoy.
MattZawacki 3 years ago
Great guitar playing my friend to accompany a great song. Well done 5*s :-)
Mark...
gerdenshed 3 years ago
Thanks Mark!
UncleVRoy 3 years ago
wow!i honestly love this song Johnny!im only sorry i havnt seen this until now!great job!
coolanddark 3 years ago
Thanks Dan!
UncleVRoy 3 years ago
yeah a simple twist of fate with happy end
really nice song with fine lyrics and great guitar swing 5*****for you
emifolk 3 years ago
Thank you much
UncleVRoy 3 years ago
and we are glad too! Isn't fate incredible! A split second can change the whole future- and it did - and - we got Dylan week !!!LOL!
This is such a visual song. I was right in there, in that Gym, imagining the events-such a good song.
Tilly220 3 years ago
Wow thanks!
It good to here that others can sense it!
UncleVRoy 3 years ago
I really liked. The rhythm, the story and everything really! No need for nerves doctor!
DardisMusic 3 years ago
Thanks that is nice of you to say, I mean type!
UncleVRoy 3 years ago
Also, thanks for the shout out in the beginning. I'm very flattered!
derekeverett 3 years ago
that's a great song man I loved it. What a cool story, the fact that it's true makes it even more remarkable. I love a good tale of how life just works out...
I'll save the details for another time but one of the worst things that ever happened to me led directly to me meeting my wife. Does that make it one of the best things that ever happened to me? So I relate to this song a bit, enjoyed it a lot. had to use the dictionary for "gaffe" though. Very cool word now that I know what it means :)
derekeverett 3 years ago
Thanks I greatly appreciate your comments!
I am inspired by your song writing, It make me want to write more!
UncleVRoy 3 years ago
Great song, Johnny! Love the melody, the lyrics and the story that gave you the inspiration! Five stars!
Johnfern99 3 years ago
Thanks John
UncleVRoy 3 years ago
Thanks very helpful!
UncleVRoy 3 years ago
the only other thing that jumps out at me that I would do different. again, I have no idea if it's better. If you like it do it, if you don't don't. the last line it's good you supported the rhyme deck and heck with wooden and what the. matching the W sound in the first syllable and the e sound in the second syllable. I would further support the rhyme by changing "said" to "thought". thought will match consonant sounds with "that" from the first line and would seem to make more sense.
dannyknapp 3 years ago
first of all thanks for helping Derek get his videos straightened out. that was driving me nuts ! good song, if it was mine I would keep the cadence going through the last line of the chorus first 4 lines have 5 syllables kind of alternates 2+3, then 3+2, then 2+3, then 3+2. so the last line I'd start 2+3 (but we)(are all glad)then I'd tag on (for that hand)(that he grabbed). I have no idea if that would be better than what you got. It's just what I would do.
dannyknapp 3 years ago