Sorry for this essay that i've written but I do think with what everyone here has said, you WILL improve from criticism and I love how you already know that and accept it :D. I've actually been a huge fan of you ellie... since the days when you made the videos about "ellie's experience with dating asian guys" if you remember ;P And i've watched your vids and read your blog and really admire your passion and I really respect your personality~ So i'm giving this criticism because i want
pause because it seemed more natural and there was 'flow'. Yes, pausing can be effective but the way you did it looked like you were thinking "stop ellie so that i can let the viewer can see this as a moment to gain their thoughts, and also i have to know how i'm going to sadly portray my next line." It did seem like you weren't THE glenda marsh. So before going into the character, really decide on specific personality trait Glenda could possess. It just seemed like Ellie lee putting on a sad...
first off, i want to give you majorrrr props as i think this was an UBER brave move for you to put yourself out there to know that you are prone to bashing and all sorts of negative criticism. **air high fives**
About the acting: I'm not going to write "Amazing!" or "ellie your amazing" because quite honestly, i didn't find it amazing. Like shortasiangirly, I did find most parts awkward because lots of the pauses looked forced. The parts that i did like was when you actually didn't....
i have to commend you for putting yourself out there. it's not easy, especially when you're just starting out. it's good that you're willing to grow and learn as an artist. before memorizing anything, you should write down what your objective is. for this piece, crying doesn't seem necessary. she seems more nervous and then relieved to tell her story. you don't have to say everything word for word. acting is more about conveying emotion rather than saying the right words. keep practicing!
I'm also an aspiring actress. This was really good! It seemed very mono-toned at some point, so maybe you should try to experiment with the way to say things some more. Overall, the feeling was great & you had great eye contact :D
It didn't feel as if you truly internalized the story. You seemed like someone PLAYING the role as opposed to someone BEING the role. Does that make sense? All those words you said should sound natural coming out of your mouth, and they didn't. I say those pauses you had in the middle of and in between sentences were too much. Also, pay attention to tone. Vary it from sentence to sentence.
At the beginning it was kind of awkward and I felt you didn't connect with your character enough to make the monologue truly believable. However, it got much better from 1:30 and onwards. It became more believable and I know this has been said before, but well done on the gradual welling of the tears. But overall good work and keep at it! We will support you all the way Ellie!
I thought it was good and didn't require to be more 'emotional' I mean nobody breaks down crying at alcoholic anonymous... They try to hold their tear.. It was just right.. Really touching.
ellie! this is a really good start!! i dont know much about this, but i gotta say that i agree with most of the comments here. it doesn't seem natural (but that's only a matter of time since ur new at this), n it seems like ur acting. a good actress, should not even give the viewer/audience the impression that she is acting. you ARE literally the character. that's what u should aim for. :)
It seemed kind of forced and it didn't really touch the heart. Thus there were some cringe worthy moments but just keep practicing I guess. I don't know much about this stuff but I'm just conveying what I felt while watching. It could just be me personally but yeah....
I think it needed a bit of a climax and some more emotion levels. The energy was kinda the same the whole time. It was good emotion, but it can get a little tedious after a while. There was a lot of pausing, which should only be used for big effect. monologues are usually from 1-3 minutes. I felt like you didn't quite connect because this character's life is out of control and i needed to feel that.& dont feel like you need shed tears to show sadness it's more important to live in the moment
I really liked it but I wanna be honest since this is something your really wanting to do and you asked for critiques.. even though it was good I didn't feel the character telling me her story it felt more like you were reading it off.. if that makes sense you didn't connect with me I couldn't imagine the story was yours and that's what I always felt like a monologue should be.. you taking on that person and their feelings... I did however appreciate how you were able to cry that did impress me.
it made me tear up as well. it seems like everyone said this already but the beginning is awkward (in a way that seems forced). the way your eyes moved looks forced. i think blinking between the movement would help (ex: blink, look left, blink, look down, look right, & eta.) and try not look at the camera in the beginning. looking down more in the beginning might help too. i would also like to see you do another monologue where we can see all of you because body language is important! great job!
I agree the beginning was a bit awkward but when you got into it and started crying it was very moving. I don't think it was that monotonous because it seems that's what the character is like but I agree about the pauses, there could be fewer of them.
I feel like the beginning was slightly awkward but after you started getting into it, it turned out really great. I agree with @Chilipeppergrl94 that it was little monotone.
This was really good. You really captured this character's personality. The tearing up was very convincing. It seemed a bit monotonous. And there seemed to be too many long pauses. But overall this was REALLY good if you are new to this.
dude this is fake trying to make young people fear drinking... f you
hubertchodeweenkie 1 week ago
to see you become successful~! (i sound like a creep:( ) Anyways... good luck on everything 언니 and give everything you've got. <3
hwangboel 3 weeks ago
facade.
Sorry for this essay that i've written but I do think with what everyone here has said, you WILL improve from criticism and I love how you already know that and accept it :D. I've actually been a huge fan of you ellie... since the days when you made the videos about "ellie's experience with dating asian guys" if you remember ;P And i've watched your vids and read your blog and really admire your passion and I really respect your personality~ So i'm giving this criticism because i want
hwangboel 3 weeks ago
pause because it seemed more natural and there was 'flow'. Yes, pausing can be effective but the way you did it looked like you were thinking "stop ellie so that i can let the viewer can see this as a moment to gain their thoughts, and also i have to know how i'm going to sadly portray my next line." It did seem like you weren't THE glenda marsh. So before going into the character, really decide on specific personality trait Glenda could possess. It just seemed like Ellie lee putting on a sad...
hwangboel 3 weeks ago
first off, i want to give you majorrrr props as i think this was an UBER brave move for you to put yourself out there to know that you are prone to bashing and all sorts of negative criticism. **air high fives**
About the acting: I'm not going to write "Amazing!" or "ellie your amazing" because quite honestly, i didn't find it amazing. Like shortasiangirly, I did find most parts awkward because lots of the pauses looked forced. The parts that i did like was when you actually didn't....
hwangboel 3 weeks ago
Amazing!;D
FoloBabes98 3 weeks ago
ellie your amazing:)
Viana961 1 month ago
i have to commend you for putting yourself out there. it's not easy, especially when you're just starting out. it's good that you're willing to grow and learn as an artist. before memorizing anything, you should write down what your objective is. for this piece, crying doesn't seem necessary. she seems more nervous and then relieved to tell her story. you don't have to say everything word for word. acting is more about conveying emotion rather than saying the right words. keep practicing!
MoniqueLikesToSing 1 month ago
Keep trying, seems very wooden, It seemed like someone reading lines with someone instead of acting.
Jigokutori 1 month ago in playlist Uploaded videos
The only issue is your tone. That's all. You're doing well :)
jamourvousx 1 month ago
I'm also an aspiring actress. This was really good! It seemed very mono-toned at some point, so maybe you should try to experiment with the way to say things some more. Overall, the feeling was great & you had great eye contact :D
vangpakau 1 month ago 2
good job..you did great.
lani199 1 month ago
Hum... Well it's not bad, not super good either, but you can do better! Just practice more :)
PreciousHime 1 month ago
it feels fake..
tokyodoru 1 month ago
It didn't feel as if you truly internalized the story. You seemed like someone PLAYING the role as opposed to someone BEING the role. Does that make sense? All those words you said should sound natural coming out of your mouth, and they didn't. I say those pauses you had in the middle of and in between sentences were too much. Also, pay attention to tone. Vary it from sentence to sentence.
lafilleenvogue 1 month ago
At the beginning it was kind of awkward and I felt you didn't connect with your character enough to make the monologue truly believable. However, it got much better from 1:30 and onwards. It became more believable and I know this has been said before, but well done on the gradual welling of the tears. But overall good work and keep at it! We will support you all the way Ellie!
Kirraxo 1 month ago 2
Amazing. Loved it from beginning to end! I support you all the way!!!
PowerlessPuma 1 month ago
I thought it was good and didn't require to be more 'emotional' I mean nobody breaks down crying at alcoholic anonymous... They try to hold their tear.. It was just right.. Really touching.
perlye 1 month ago 3
zoom out the camera, the viewer/listener feels awkward when your face is so close up.
But otherwise, its cool that you're an aspiring actress~
letjkrule 1 month ago 3
ellie! this is a really good start!! i dont know much about this, but i gotta say that i agree with most of the comments here. it doesn't seem natural (but that's only a matter of time since ur new at this), n it seems like ur acting. a good actress, should not even give the viewer/audience the impression that she is acting. you ARE literally the character. that's what u should aim for. :)
asiankiss99 1 month ago
It seemed kind of forced and it didn't really touch the heart. Thus there were some cringe worthy moments but just keep practicing I guess. I don't know much about this stuff but I'm just conveying what I felt while watching. It could just be me personally but yeah....
letshaptic 1 month ago
I think it needed a bit of a climax and some more emotion levels. The energy was kinda the same the whole time. It was good emotion, but it can get a little tedious after a while. There was a lot of pausing, which should only be used for big effect. monologues are usually from 1-3 minutes. I felt like you didn't quite connect because this character's life is out of control and i needed to feel that.& dont feel like you need shed tears to show sadness it's more important to live in the moment
amxk1996 1 month ago
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i'm sorry but honestly i didn't buy that at all.
it felt so forced, no emotions. you have to practice more on letting emotions flow naturally, connect with the character you're trying to take on.
it was very very awkward at moments and some of the lines you didn't quite deliver the right tones
and you need to work on your expressions
for monologues, it's better if you show yourself as a whole, body movement is also a big key in expressing a character.
good luck tho! but u got a long way~
chipmunky721 1 month ago
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chipmunky721 1 month ago
I love the emotions, very convincing!
musicjunkienic 1 month ago
im sold! good job! :)
Beek009 1 month ago
I really liked it but I wanna be honest since this is something your really wanting to do and you asked for critiques.. even though it was good I didn't feel the character telling me her story it felt more like you were reading it off.. if that makes sense you didn't connect with me I couldn't imagine the story was yours and that's what I always felt like a monologue should be.. you taking on that person and their feelings... I did however appreciate how you were able to cry that did impress me.
Kayters1185 1 month ago 22
@Chilipeppergrl94 Agreed!
amayachoify 1 month ago
I felt the pain and it felt real!!!! Good job!
amayachoify 1 month ago
Awesome!! Such raw emotion. Good luck!
mxchaelaxb 1 month ago
the tear was beautiful by the way <3
shortasiangirly 1 month ago
it made me tear up as well. it seems like everyone said this already but the beginning is awkward (in a way that seems forced). the way your eyes moved looks forced. i think blinking between the movement would help (ex: blink, look left, blink, look down, look right, & eta.) and try not look at the camera in the beginning. looking down more in the beginning might help too. i would also like to see you do another monologue where we can see all of you because body language is important! great job!
shortasiangirly 1 month ago 13
thumbs up Ellie looks like Asa Akira
koreanblood777 1 month ago
@koreanblood777
loooll that's what i thoughtt!
but ellie is more respectable then a porn star.
chipmunky721 1 month ago
I agree the beginning was a bit awkward but when you got into it and started crying it was very moving. I don't think it was that monotonous because it seems that's what the character is like but I agree about the pauses, there could be fewer of them.
IchLiebeTH483 1 month ago
I feel like the beginning was slightly awkward but after you started getting into it, it turned out really great. I agree with @Chilipeppergrl94 that it was little monotone.
lxschun 1 month ago
This was really good. You really captured this character's personality. The tearing up was very convincing. It seemed a bit monotonous. And there seemed to be too many long pauses. But overall this was REALLY good if you are new to this.
Chilipeppergrl94 1 month ago
that was really really good got me teary ;___,
lorelove1516 1 month ago
Amazing!!!!
hikaru7uchiha 1 month ago
Not an actor, so I can't critique you, but good luck! In my opinion it's pretty good. (:
19409 1 month ago
goooooooooooooooodddddd jobbbb
sarahhur 1 month ago
This is so good! kinda sad. but i liked it
quinny228 1 month ago