300 Tons of Steel Won't Change my Love for You [Poem]

[occupypoet]

Excellent. 

[hartsel2000]

Nice stuff Elly!

[PoetLina]

Superb! (That makes your poem up to 300 letters, somewhat different from tons of steel, but the effect is the same) :-)

[EllyMcCormack]

@PoetLina Thank you for checking out my video. It's good to hear from you! Not sure what you meant about the 300 letters though lol

[PoetLina]

@EllyMcCormack Your poem from the first "I" to the last contains 294 letters (just recounted, it could be 292 (oh, well...). Anyway, excuse for another lol

[seekthevisceral]

Every day, I think, 'All I need is one more maddening poem.'

Beautiful words and delivery!

[EllyMcCormack]

@seekthevisceral Thank you so much for the kind words!

[janeczka]

A very fine job. What I like the most are the third line and the "maddening kiss" image. Brilliant.

[celtichero9]

FANTASTIC!  I LOVED this! Really liked the coat and Tie!

God Bless

[VoxNeruda]

Congratulations, you've learned an invaluable lesson-

all Poets steal, so steal from the best.

You have your costume, you have your poem, you have your method of delivery.

Now all that's left is to do it before a drunken coffeehouse mob.

That and lift their wallet.

[EllyMcCormack]

@VoxNeruda This is England. The fattest people in Europe live here and there's no way I can lift more than 12 folds of skin to remove, successfully, the bile-smothered remains of their wallets, without somehow being entangled and absorbed into their packaged, bulbous bodies.

[VoxNeruda]

@EllyMcCormack Get a nimble toadie.

[tinySpectacle]

Excellent poem, Elly. So many incredible moments in here that make me jealous, but none more so than "clumsy daydreamer." It's the little unexpected two word combinations like that that really do so much. I look to do them in my poems all the time: you have beaten me to this one, damn it, it won't happen again! Thanks for the mention above and for the nice comment, too.

[EllyMcCormack]

@tinySpectacle Thank you so much for the kind words! I loved your work. It's nice being in this online poetry community... I think it's definitely a movement of its own.

[ladyofire]

Yes!! Love this...indeed, brilliant!! Bravo.

[DavidRandallCurtis]

Fraking BRILLIANT! Faved and shared on facebook! God, I hate you for being such a great poet. You & Lo & Roy are ALL brats! :P

[twohawksfucking]

@DavidRandallCurtis Ah hem... I heard that! (My thanks, David.)