@MattAlan01 Thanks! Yeah, I tend to go for understatement (or sometimes ridiculous overstatement), so I told her to keep it toned down. I suppose it's a stylistic thing, but I definitely see where you're coming from.
This was brilliantly shot and had great promise but it just ended too soon. We weren't able to view it as a story. Did they find something amazing? Where is he going now? Do we learn more about his sister? All these are questions I feel needed answering to do this film justice. I appreciate that some films go unanswered in films but in this one, more went un answered than were answered. I think, with a little more substance, this could be a very very very good short film of about 3-4 minutes!
This was brilliantly shot and had great promise but it just ended too soon. We weren't able to view it as a story. Did they find something amazing? Where is he going now? Do we learn more about his sister? All these are questions I feel needed answering to do this film justice. I appreciate that some films go unanswered in films but in this one, more went un answered than were answered. I think, with a little more substance, this could be a very very very good short film of about 3-4 minutes!
@samthomsa Thanks for the constructive criticism! Unfortunately, the film had to be no more than two minutes + credits in order to fit the requirements of the contest. A lot of what you said hadn't occurred to me, though. Great points; I would love to develop this further.
Excellent.
godfathertrevor 4 months ago
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JuliabandC 4 months ago
valiant effort, great music, lovely visuals, nice story, and so in tune with what I am experiencing right now
storyboardmediauk 4 months ago
Simple and inspiring and deep. Really nicely done. Freshman? Such promise. Good work!
ilenecutler 4 months ago
Great job! I hope the home-video footage is legal...
spacedout93 4 months ago
Nice. I thought the acting was worked fine. Not too emotional. I also agree with the comments made my samthomsa.
eomer41 5 months ago
whoaa this is really good!
ItsW3jent 5 months ago
That was really good. I think it would have been a bit better had the female had a bit more emotion in her voice, but overall, very very good.
MattAlan01 5 months ago
@MattAlan01 Thanks! Yeah, I tend to go for understatement (or sometimes ridiculous overstatement), so I told her to keep it toned down. I suppose it's a stylistic thing, but I definitely see where you're coming from.
SundogPictures 5 months ago
@SundogPictures Well it isn't like it ruined it, I just thought it would be more emotional that way haha.
MattAlan01 5 months ago
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This was brilliantly shot and had great promise but it just ended too soon. We weren't able to view it as a story. Did they find something amazing? Where is he going now? Do we learn more about his sister? All these are questions I feel needed answering to do this film justice. I appreciate that some films go unanswered in films but in this one, more went un answered than were answered. I think, with a little more substance, this could be a very very very good short film of about 3-4 minutes!
samthomsa 5 months ago
This was brilliantly shot and had great promise but it just ended too soon. We weren't able to view it as a story. Did they find something amazing? Where is he going now? Do we learn more about his sister? All these are questions I feel needed answering to do this film justice. I appreciate that some films go unanswered in films but in this one, more went un answered than were answered. I think, with a little more substance, this could be a very very very good short film of about 3-4 minutes!
samthomsa 5 months ago
@samthomsa Thanks for the constructive criticism! Unfortunately, the film had to be no more than two minutes + credits in order to fit the requirements of the contest. A lot of what you said hadn't occurred to me, though. Great points; I would love to develop this further.
SundogPictures 5 months ago
wat to tell a story, gr8 job.
digitalmasterz 5 months ago
OH GOD IT'S SO GOOD.
Xiwll 5 months ago