Embarrassing... the singing was just embarrassing. They are laughing at you. And um.. the rest was kinda funny, but you told it too fast. How about.. ditch the material about the commercial... tell the story non-motormouth style.. and there you go. A real comedy act. There were a couple great jokes about the kid seeing your penis tent. The penis tent is funny. Seriously... do you really need this much help figuring out where the funny parts of your story are?
Embarrassing... the singing was just embarrassing. They are laughing at you. And um.. the rest was kinda funny, but you told it too fast. How about.. ditch the material about the commercial... tell the story non-motormouth style.. and there you go. A real comedy act. There were a couple great jokes about the kid seeing your penis tent. The penis tent is funny. Seriously... do you really need this much help figuring out where the funny parts of your story are?
Sviolinist 2 years ago
be a comedian not a singer
xSynapse 2 years ago