Contradiction- Don't Fu[n]k Up Our Beats Contest IV Entry

[WeAreYoloTv]

lmaoo ayee he killed ittt! The nerdy white guy 1 haters 0

[gbabyrackmotto]

better than i thought but still corny as fuck lol

[winterwolfmc]

@gbabyrackmotto agreed. no offense, but gbaby kind of put my thoughts into exact proportion.

[MrMusicSupply]

you need a mic. the lyrics are dope though

[RJOppenheimer]

go play wow

[TheUncutTV]

ill



[MJzFTW]

Im LOLing

-Channel owners friend

[TOOGOODER]

Good thing this isnt a rapping contest

[superbay82]

iniquity is way better

[mattfried74]

it was decent just a bit corny at times

[FALL3NPROD1GY]

the flow was ill, but the lyrics themselves could be tweaked, but all in all,4/5 keep swaggin bro!mad potential

[jacoblevi99]

I KILL ALL YALL CHECK OUT HUNTER HADLEY G SHOCK

[subbacultcha91]

You have good metaphors. You have potential.

[sokrzy619]

well.. lemme put it this way..

on a scale from 50 TYSON to Lil Wayne.. you got about a Waka Flocka.....

[VEGABEATT]

this is so good i bump it in my car now

[dpimpjoshep]

that was nice bro they just hating.!!! keep it up :)

[matthew16275]

wasnt that bad i see alot of potentiol with u only thing is idk u dont seem that in to it idk it just dosnt seem ur that inthusiatic about it but other then that prety good

[CaliModeTV]

yo you had some good punchlines but a tip is work on a rap voice check mine out to i submitted it late so im not in the comp but might as well let people hear it

[decka585]

fuck u suck rap bout something real maybe ppl would take u seriously

[18BennyBlanco]

Bette then Big C. Hah.

[MrStrife16]

Idk what to say about it it wasn't bad but not amazing no offense but dont let any of these guys discourage u keep at it bro.

[DoobTube7]

nice belt rack homo.

[medicalman503]

I literally gauruntee you, if you had a better mic and directed vid the like bar would be completely reversed...just sayin but lyrically i was not expecting that, nice

[ChangeOfPaceHiphop]

He did nothing I haven't already heard before. No new style.. No new ideas or approaches.. No new lyrics.. Anybody can rhyme words. Lots of people can spit fast/flow. I gained nothing from watching this or listening to this, I learned nothing. I actually feel stupider. Hiphop is a bunch of copycats. No originality. Typical modern rap.... terrible. People need to understand the hiphop you think is actually good today is completely diluted... wake up.. Everybody in this contest is a joke...

[MrClassikal]

wack. rapping is not for everybody

[42oEnvy4o8]

Check out my video.yo

[CadoTvRipENT]

I smashed these whack rappers, with a hammer, Till I smashed myself.

[Younggunna00069]

Remember your lyrics do not read off the page, the message is right just need the emotion man check my entry out drunk rapping with 5 months of experience. I have hella work to do myself, let's get it.

[Dankdro420x]

Terrible. The dislikes speak for themselves.

[MCMaddMichaelAngelo]

/watch?v=6_z77otsa-g

Check my entry out guys

[slimgravy7]

yo u got some nice lyrics but u need to loosen up a little and work on the flow, stay with the beat. try not to sounds so stiff. checkout my entry! type into youtube "Mr.B Funk Volume IV Contest Entry" leave feedback!

[InfamousBigAl]

i like it man

[smarte2yahoo]

/watch?v=RKTYXk5D4aM please

[WickedShaun748]

hahah i like your style man its got that nerdyness too it im not trying to hate im just saying there was some knowledge in them lyrics haha

[KNUKLES54X]

nice flow homie, check my entry.

[The1kreature]

U got sum skill bro But u needa more flow practice that and more delivery and packin the beat down and you'll be one sick artsit

[TheTielurProject]

Lol reading lyrics on the screen

[RandomBABIES]

I like the whale and krill metaphor :3

[mjr101988]

hahaha you in the closet bro



[ADre3762]

quite bro, well you still can!!

[J03YB3AR23]

@ADre3762you meant "quit" right? and no he shouldn't. he's pretty good stop hatin -_-

[OfficialDeejayW]

@ADre3762 Well, at least my rapping is better than your spelling. That's a plus, so... thanks.

[instabad83]

@OfficialDeejayW 3 out of 6 is a failing grade indeed

[dirtydeadpresident]

@OfficialDeejayW yeah, they definatly need to learn how to spell.. but you definatly, need to quit. now.

[maxitoh23]

@dirtydeadpresident you d-e-f-i-n-i-t-e-l-y need to learn how spell

[PUNANYPROFESSIONAL15]

@OfficialDeejayW lmfaooo this boy said my rapping is better than your spelling lmfaooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[DeanoTheBigD]

@OfficialDeejayW Flow gets an B

Rhyme gets an A

U just need to work on ur voice. That is the best thing about a rapper. Look at wayne. His songs make almost no sense and are trash and he made it big. (some say its cause of bird man or somethin but i dont know) but his voice is slightly cool....sorta. Point being: If u work on ur voice and make it sound nice I think u'll do great.

[WickedShaun748]

@ADre3762 hey learn to spell if your gonna try to talk shit HAHAHA

[garrionfire]

not bad bro

[alexfloyd12]

Man, Ur Dope Straight from Fonixdarapper don't listen 2 these niggas/hater ass whiteboys

[OfficialDeejayW]

@alexfloyd12 Thanks man! I appreciate it

[charleeBEANS]

props



[iwolfman37]

I think you're real good lyrically and the only reason people don't like you is cause this ain't "raw", but it's dope as'f bro !!

[Toddd107]

not bad my man, i enjoyed it your flow was dope as fuck

[OfficialDeejayW]

@Toddd107 Thanks! I'm glad to hear it haha it seems like my flow has gotten mixed reviews

[jakep0732]

north koreans hate kim jon yung er whatever

[fbgm4life2010]

YOUR WACK!!! CHECK OUT MY BOY NICK A TEEN

[remixrgrapper]

what are you guys talking about he's not bad at all.

[YungFlyyCEO]

HEY BRO IVE GOT A SUBMISSION CAN U CHECK IT OUT MAYBE ???

[MrNiceWax]

damn this is bad

[Warxjay]

Rap is for every one no matter if your from the hood or from.a rich neighborhood

[MorInAmIcxRaP]

@WhiTeRaPPeRxTCC true dat homie fuck that fake shit rags to riches "real shit thats it"

[WhiTeRaPPeRxTCC]

you should put a bag over your head when you rap

[SmokinJsAllDay]

not bad lyrics you gotta practice your delivery

[YungFlyyCEO]

HEY EVERYBODY CHECK MY SUBMISSION AND DROP A COMMENT WOULD REALLY APPRECIATE IT

[LyriczLiL9]

showin love ,, funny how we only get 66 view on us and 6000+ on yours must be better then us i guess

[GlobalModders]

1:05 did i hear a STEAM message sound? LOL

[ThaUnknownUniverse]

check me out and you got a like from me ....

[DoNotFlyINsideOUT]

i dont know how this how so many dislikes, pretty good in my opinion.

[UnderGroundInsaniacz]

y do all yall mothafuckas call yourself raw,and call others wack!?!?!?!?!!?!?!?!?...all yall fckn suck bad!!!!!

[TaGGin9SKiL]

Kill yo self

[JayRTheMovement]

this is cool bro but check out my shit ! click on my name right now !

[YungFlyyCEO]

BRO ya delivery needs work ya lyrics are pretty koo lol some people won"t will call you whack kuz they understand nun of your punchline but i gives you a thumbs up you kept it "G" homie lol

[NJSk8ter333]

YO 17 YEAR OLD RAPPER IN THE CONTEST KILLS IT! CHECK IT OUT /watch?v=jHS3nRwhklY

[rondrizzle420]

you suck, you ass'll get choked out with those belts behind you

[eastbaker]

@rondrizzle420 check my entry out..

[bboy4life27]

People gotta stop hatin . Yu got sick rhymes , its just yur flow man (:

[Mr503Productions]

Check mines out

[Amoroner613]

YOU FU[N]KED IT UP FAGGOT GO DIE!

[enalbacastro]

No joke, you're a lot better than most of these whack entries. You need work on your delivery though... & don't go too deep into the smart guy role, 60% of your punchlines will fall short with these no brain dim-whits. Bunker Hill line was dope though. Keep it up, if you take it serious enough, you'll get somewhere with it.

[knighthawk92]

ahahahahaha 

[DreInc27]

dope lyrics.

[KidDiamondzDanzer]

I think your good dude, Don't listen to people,

They just jealous

[lvnTHORNfrvr]

bill nye the sceince guy raps lmao i thought u died son but work on ur flow and u be alot better no hate u aint bad

[CainKrow]

Yo I'm not gonna lie, it aint the illesst ive seen, but NOBODY ever picked up a pen and instantly became a legend... Talent doesnt outshine skill, despite how talented one might consider themselves to be, you can be a talented singer, but not have the skills to use you own voice. So dont take what the negativity has to feed you, its easy to talk ish on youtube, but it takes confidence, wich a lot of these youtube junkies havent had the oppertunity to encounter, to be REAL

Do You Homie

C.K.

[OfficialYUNGAZmusik]

Dont hate dude went off

[81kobefan24]

This is wack. Sorry.

[Irwin197]

Every line was bragging, killing wack rappers, and references like "I get girls like _____" or "I _____ like _____"...Not trying to troll THE SLIGHTEST BIT, but in contests like this you need to stand out. 90% of the people entering will have the same kind of simple rhymes. Just a heads up to OfficialDeejayW or anyone who wants to rap.

[KintuNomo]

------>  /watch?v=7VNXZilVTrM

[TReMcd]

doesnt look like u get girls! haha

[RResistance]

You look like the kid Hopsin trolled

[BLINkkzz]

sick rymes but stick to getting equipment for your self you have talent suscribe if you wanna hear my stuff when it comes out .

[CRAZYazzCOLTON]

sounds lil wayneish

[youngsid3]

nice lyric's

but you need 2 work on your flow

nice freestyle tho chur Turn It Up

[ziggyleonbryant]

IF u put more into it

check me youtu.be/watch?v=hDN9Kgy2IZ4

[ArsiniMusic]

Would maybe be good if your voice had more put into it

[FATObesityFAT]

no lie, you got some sick lyrics

from one amateur to another, you should practice your flow some though, you gotta have feeling!

this is pretty good though man

[OfficialDeejayW]

@FATObesityFAT Thanks man, I appreciate it

[jross2021]

@FATObesityFAT im all up in your face, LIKE PoRESSSSSSSS

[LiLAJ608]

ya but i bet you'll let the 107 dislikes get to you, you garbage boi ha

[DRACOTHE1DEMON]

HAHAHAHAHAAAHAHAHAH KIDDO U GOTZ WORK TO DO.."I SMASH THESE WACK RAPPERS" so ur gonna smash ur self huh that was a Contradiction hahaha get it

[ChangeOfPaceHiphop]

@DRACOTHE1DEMON I almost typed "You yourself are a contradiction". You beat me to it ahaha. I knew someone would

[DRACOTHE1DEMON]

@ChangeOfPaceHiphop lol you should check out my music homie :D lol

[OfficialDeejayW]

@DRACOTHE1DEMON Good one.

[DRACOTHE1DEMON]

@OfficialDeejayW lol thank you ...... check out my music on my page

[SmokinJsAllDay]

@OfficialDeejayW bitch made

[remixrgrapper]

@DRACOTHE1DEMON hes a fucking walking paradox, no hes not.

[ChangeOfPaceHiphop]

Better than Gucci Mane. Cept on his 'I just Wanna Party' verse with yela.

[Tok3nMusic]

lol herman kane

[TAPOUTorPASSOUT90]

creative lyrics... but shitty performance props on the lyrics and tell your smarter than most just not a rapper haha

[battle54321]

love it

[TheOfficialAD3]

Guys, Come drop a sub. Im gna be uppin my entry soon. Recordin etc...

[LilJoeyyy]

where you get the beats from?

[Iaresatan]

That beat dick.

[shaneshaneist]

I hate seeing retards posting comments on every video saying 'you not gonna win fool'. This competition is about exposure for all artists and that's the beauty of what FV have created. Anybody can enter and by entering they could get a few more fans and at the end of the day, EVERYONE WINS. The main prize is just the icing on the cake for one lucky person

[OfficialDeejayW]

@shaneshaneist EXACTLY haha I don't expect to win, but I got a lot of feedback, some positive and some negative. That's fine by me. Winning would be cool haha but hey, I'm just glad to get some advice and comments from so many people.

[LeoDapper]

just work on the delivery man.

[amort123456789]

im sorry but dont expect to win

[OfficialDeejayW]

@amort123456789 I wasn't haha but thanks anyway

[MrTwaTWaffles]

bad bad bad just bad

[PTGOG]

Be good if he wasnt so drab and monotone'd gotta put some emotion on it

[JohnyMickBananas]

i hate when rappers arnt saying anything. idk how if your good at talking about how good you are, than that makes you good

[OfficialDeejayW]

@JohnyMickBananas I would agree with you, but since this was for a contest I just figured I'd keep it light. When you're entering a battle-type setting you can't really rap about anything too serious.

[GrungeGod310]

shoulda looked into the cam instead of watching yourself on cam.... lol.

[TomPayeaLive]

come to long island if u want to get ur face rearranged

[TwistaJay717]

DOPE BRO check mine out man. #HISTORYINTHEMAKING

[TMathis0376]

DOPE DOPE DOPE

[NeelzNation]

not bad at all. i like it. however u may need to use less references to thor and more kids-teen stuff. by listening to hopsin u can tell funk volume likes hardcoree rappers. try giving ur raps a little more edge. thanks for ur time.

DJNEELZ.

[OfficialDeejayW]

@NeelzNation Thanks man, but at the same time I wasn't really trying to sound like FV, I'm just being me haha I see what you mean though. I appreciate it.

[DaIrishWarhorse]

@NeelzNation Bro, if I could rap worth a fuck I'd throw together a rap about the real Thor, God of War, Thunder, and Strength. That sir, is not kid's stuff. It's Norse mythology. Do not insult a powerful, masculine character, just because a comic book company took him and made him a super hero. If you looked into the actual mythology behind Thor, you could see how seriously hardcore the real Thor is. Just sayin' man. Not trying to hate. But I did a norse mythology project in school (assigned) JH

[SpadeWicked]

@NeelzNation mabye we should tell disney channel 

[CaptainTheThird]

@OfficialDeejayW Some pretty clever lines in there. I like the one about the Wicked Witch. Check out my entry if you get the chance! Feedback is appreciated.

[CushionProductions]

Whoooaa lots of hate on this entry. I thought it was pretty good. 

[ReficulLives]

Dude i dug your lyrics, hmu if you wanna collab sometime

[Wendustrial]

fuckin brutal man quit rapping



[GBxFROSTY]

this would have been sick if you had sounded more enthused about what you were saying. Your flow is nice man. Keep working on it and keep it coming. Might I suggest some better recording equipment though?

[SyKoViDeO]

This is hot-garbage .... fuckin waist of time ...

[KintuNomo]

My Entry for this Contest is so much doper than this... and it only has 150 views. The video quality isnt great but I promise that you wont be disappointed. /watch?v=7VNXZilVTrM

[LegacyItachi]

i agree you have some coool lyrics but gotta work on your flo i enjoyed it

[braddylanexperience]

pretty dope man.. fuck the haters ...Keep Doin your thing

[OfficialDeejayW]

@braddylanexperience Thanks I appreciate it! Check out some of my other videos too if you get the chance.

[HookedOnCronixs]

this is fucking so whackk

[MCJayFree]

your bars were good. why didnt you try to record it on a track it sounds like u just did it on webcam wtih the background foggy. anyways good shit dog, check out my submission i just posted

[OfficialDeejayW]

@MCJayFree Yeah I don't have a microphone at the moment so it's all via webcam. I figure it's better than nothing, right? haha I'll check out your video too. Thanks

[jtrafinchick]

i like how you used actual knowledge in your flows. shows that education isnt "uncool"... props

[OfficialDeejayW]

@jtrafinchick I like getting comments like that, thank you! Check out some of my other videos if you've got time.

[Tysex201]

nice lyrics but you need some flo lessons your way off key

[geoffcouillard]

hey its hopsim from the ill mind of hopsin 4

[battle54321]

love it thanks

[Ace111694]

it was aiight....Work on your Flow

[torreonebitelott]

You should check my entry out homie

[WraithPk]

It was nice but it would of been better if you memorized it. Subbed though bro :D