A Complex Complection

[DavidRandallCurtis]

Sneak... how does all this stuff get past me? I have to start a playlist for you... I hope yer happy! :P

[1Aware1]

indeed the idea of that makes me quite happy. :P

[sadmidget8000]

"and this poem is about?" asked I suspiciously.

[1Aware1]

lol, I pondered why suspiciously? and thought.

this poem is about a man i saw once, in civic center park, to be simple, although there is always more to that story lol.

[harleynanda]

Your interpretive vision is played out for us here in example. There is no specific relevance for this figure in the park other than a mirrored metaphor for your multifaceted eye upon the world. He stands before us here revealed in the varied intricacies of his interpretability; behavior and effect, patterns and purpose, origins and evolution, source and summation; all in examination of the mystery of their interplay, that fascination not for the Yin nor the Yang but the interrelation ...

(1/3)

[harleynanda]

... of the two which gives both rise and purpose to the energy they generate. And your love for this dance is expressed through the admiration of your words, a fascination for reasons and relations unrevealed to the common eye. Many poets translate the world through their write as the measure of their focus. You shed these visions like a perpetual stream, a byproduct outpouring of your interpreting through the immediacy of your examination and emotions, ...

(2/3)

[harleynanda]

... these fully engaged though detached and not possessing, yet constant in process. Your intrigue, obsession, insights, and visions are a fascination to share. Thank you for leaving these doorways wide.

(3/3)

[sadmidget8000]

dude, you really like words don't you? don't wanna be an ass but just say what you mean

[1Aware1]

i do only say what i mean, what i mean may not be simple, infact most anything worth saying knowing or thinking is, i say what i mean in full, not in sumerization, thats all. but yes i adore words, as i do many other things which may seem to everyday to adore, but that is my nature, i adore gray skys, and the way light bounces off street signs in the night, sorry if it coplicates you, or me to you.

[sadmidget8000]

not you, "harleynanda" i like your long and windly sentenses. it's said these imitate thought. look at my only vid, you'll see why suspiciously.

[1Aware1]

wow, never before has anyone broke down the way that i write so detailed, thank you so kindly for havin the courae to see my words and what they mean in reards to the world and my perception and then understanding it better then i ever have. it is for people like yourself which i write.

[christopherinsc1981]

very nice

[Kabuki0009]

Very good, I really enjoyed it from start to finish, keep up the good work*****stars;)

[1Aware1]

thanks, it would be awful for people to enjoy the begining and then not the end. :)

[entheogensmurf]

"And the song he hums sounds peaceful

Although the words he doesn't pronounceate

would say otherwise"

The above lines didn't flow smooth enough. Not that I have any immediate suggestions.

Regardless, decent work 1Aware1.

[1Aware1]

thanks, i know, and the sad part is its my favorite line too, so i couldnt bring myself to completly remove it, i think ither the last line needs another word like surly say otherwise, or the others need shortening, but i cant think of any words to use instead or which i could cut out and still make the same image. its always good to hear critisim, thanks. and im glad you liked it anyway

[InmediasMe]

Really excellent lines in here. Very nicely read as well.

Lo

[1Aware1]

thank you, but they are not as excellent as your own lines, thanks I have been trying to improve my readings.

[flameoflifebookhouse]

I love how you read your poetry. Brilliant!

[1Aware1]

thank you, most people feel the opposite, and that i am to quick most often.