Wow, I liked it even better the second time I played it. I would like to think this was not written from personal experience. It sucks to cut someone you loved out of your life, even to be the bad guy they need you to be to make that happen.
There's no doubt you're a talented wordsmith.
I wasn't looking for this sort of thing today, but this vid gave me pause.
Do you know any one who might benefit from these words? I can take comments on expanding on peace topics and try to write what people need to hear. Kind words can heal
and uplift, but I always want more ideas for my art.
What you've expressed is at least one good reason I live alone. Mutuality seems impossible in this life. Are two people ever in the same place at the same time, I wonder? I admire the courage I see in your rawness.
First of all, I love the title. This was very well expressed, I loved the emotion and I thought it incredibly unique. I'm very touched and impressed by your poetry. It contains the kind of passion that I strive for in my own work. Thank you for sharing!
Your poem is touching. Your heart is free and open. More so than most people without your challenges.
Sinekyre14 1 year ago
I don't see the phrase "exquisite corpse" come up much....are you a reader of Poppy Brite?
blackesteyes13 2 years ago
I am not, but I would like to know more about this material "Poppy Brite", feel free to email me about it and any unique material on poetry.
JonahTorn 1 year ago
Wow, I liked it even better the second time I played it. I would like to think this was not written from personal experience. It sucks to cut someone you loved out of your life, even to be the bad guy they need you to be to make that happen.
There's no doubt you're a talented wordsmith.
I wasn't looking for this sort of thing today, but this vid gave me pause.
Kudos Bro, keep it up.
Rrrowlf 3 years ago
thats really good! it sounds really nice!
famguy1981 3 years ago
Very good man.
TrivselTV 3 years ago
Well done!
LuminolBlue 3 years ago
man, you've got talent! keep it up!
fivehoursaway 3 years ago
Well done man. The poem comes to life. My hat is off to you.
ejgiv 3 years ago
Do you know any one who might benefit from these words? I can take comments on expanding on peace topics and try to write what people need to hear. Kind words can heal
and uplift, but I always want more ideas for my art.
JonahTorn 3 years ago
make poems about the New World Order...
Leiflton 3 years ago
I have one.
Three exquisite phantoms,
One is, not new,
Two is, not my world,
Three is, Not my order.
Neither is it yours.
distressed7 3 years ago
What you've expressed is at least one good reason I live alone. Mutuality seems impossible in this life. Are two people ever in the same place at the same time, I wonder? I admire the courage I see in your rawness.
runawayspacedog 3 years ago
That was excellent. I am not a poet myself, but I do like it very much. You give excellent delivery!
Has anyone told you that you resemble the actor John Goodman?
feelytouchy67 3 years ago
wow that was nice very good.!
RedHead531 3 years ago
Beautiful and interesting, but I have a problem:My english is not so good, I cant understand all at the first time, so I must
repeat it!
dearmalika 3 years ago
i dislike poerty but this makes me like it a bit more thank you. fantastic job!
xDi3hardx15 3 years ago
First of all, I love the title. This was very well expressed, I loved the emotion and I thought it incredibly unique. I'm very touched and impressed by your poetry. It contains the kind of passion that I strive for in my own work. Thank you for sharing!
livingpassion 3 years ago
cheers again. i really liked this!! wooowie!
Ladycroft144 3 years ago
♥ exquisite
SomebodyIusedtoknow 3 years ago
beautiful.
teenwitchlovergirl 3 years ago
Thankyou, but what do think of poem. (HA! Ha!)
Seriously Thank You.
JonahTorn 3 years ago
you are very welcome!
teenwitchlovergirl 3 years ago
Very good
jpage78 3 years ago
Thank you. Every one should check out the
vidoe on your channel:
Paul McCartney - Back on my Feet
Paul McCartney is awesome!
JonahTorn 3 years ago