a villanelle - Land of Dreams

[leftysergeant]

You are clearly having fun with this, creating such images of a world turned all catawampus.

The villanelle form works especially well for this theme.

I have also been listening to other pieces you do in this form and have concluded that it is probably the best form to match the normal rythm of your speech.

A totally delightful experience. 5*

[dashpoet]

What a fantastic affirmative comment, thank you. To think that my poetry is so well received makes the 'effort' of publishing it all worth while. I have enjoyed the rigour of fitting my thoughts into such a tight space, found it invigorating in a way. Again, thank you!

[yustforfunonly]

This is my favorite one so far. 5/5 and xo

[dashpoet]

Funny peculiar in the mix with with funny haha - just for fun really, which is appropriate! Glad you like it, thank you.

[rttallie]

everything down to your intonation is perfect...this is very deep...i always get inspiration from the most unexpected places...like YouTube

[dashpoet]

Thanks again rttallie. I have found YouTube to be a great place to mix and share with other poets. Pleased to meet you here!

[kel2corkey]

That's a bed time poem for my kid.

5*****.

[dashpoet]

Thanks Kel... sweet dreams!

[NewBrazdolph]

starry video! 5* from me too.

[dashpoet]

Cheers Braz! The more the better for my starry day!

[TheRavenOfPoe]

Delighted to hear another of your villanelles performed! This one has delicious alliteration in it and beautiful imagery =)

[dashpoet]

Thanks Raven. I was surprised how hard I found it to memorize this one for the video - I think the somewhat surreal set of images had something to do with that!

[PaulBradford13]

Hello Mark. this was such a pleasant poem.

"With nothing left but wind to weigh".

5 ***** for you today.

Paul

[dashpoet]

Thank you Paul, I'm glad you like my little bit of whimsy!

[Kabuki0009]

very nice, very nice indeed *****stars; )

[dashpoet]

Cheers Kabuki, this is a bit of a dance drama really, lives up to your name somewhat... glad you approve!

[PulsarPoet]

An ethereal dream. We crave innocence and that which can't be seen.

[dashpoet]

I enjoyed putting myself in 'another' place to write this, pure escapism really. Thanks for your thoughts, PulsarPoet.

[czmma]

"While we danced light the lead ballet

where yesteryear is sometime soon

'twas once upon a faraway"

(far beyond worlds of any words. Like "too ( ?) for words." I am always speechless about your words)

[dashpoet]

Glad to bring something different to you, thanks for taking the time to comment here czmma.

[leftgreenthumb]

Great simplicity and the visual the starry day brings as u read.. Solid work! :)

[dashpoet]

Thanks leftgreenthumb, I'm glad you caught the mood of the poem. Cheers!

[EdMuirton]

Most enjoyed Mark! Cheers Dash!

[dashpoet]

Great to wing this to you, thanks Ed, my pleasure.

[ExaggeratedElegy]

Hey Mark,

Lilting, breezy, becalming...it's certainly eased my state of mind. Beautiful work, 5* and faved.

By the way, would you mind at all if I featured this on my channel page?

George

[dashpoet]

Would I mind? I would be flattered, honoured even. Thank you George.

[bigeeezy]

most agreeable my friend

[dashpoet]

Easier on the mind than some of my diatribes! Thanks bigeeezy

[AntaresInScorpius]

nice, i love it favorited.

[dashpoet]

Thank you, for such an affirmative comment. Cheers!

[PoetLina]

Beautifully constructed - a modern Lear in a Romantic french

setting. 5* Fav.

[dashpoet]

Thanks so much, PoetLina. Positive comment on writing technique carry weight coming from you, and your references are flattering!

[anglicansag]

A lyrical confection ! Sweet and light.......

I like the alternating refrains....and the fairy-tale quality..... and the ironic metaphors with which it is replete are worthy of Oscar Wilde !

And, of course, your signature -- mellifluousness ( with alliteration thrown in, to boot ! )

★ ★ ★ ★ ★

[dashpoet]

Proper box of chocolates comment! Rich and delicious, certainly something to chew on, linger over. Thank you anglicansag.

[anglicansag]

Too many "and"s ......LOL

[dashpoet]

... a favourite filler... like toffee I guess, sticks things together!

[Loreleila]

Flabbergobby! :P I can't work out if yours makes less or more sense than mine. Either way, love this. :)

[dashpoet]

Flob-dob-a-lob. Bill and Ben all over again! Thanks Loreleila, glad you like it.

[RowanFortuneWood]

Great poem and performance, I quite like the recentish popularity of structured poetry on YouTube. 5*.

[dashpoet]

Thanks Rowan. I've enjoyed the mental gymnastics involved in this, been pleased to know before I start that there will be an ending!

[janeczka]

Aboslutely love it!! this is right up my alley. I thought this little tune would go well with it ;)

[janeczka]

Absolutely even. Sorry, sober! :p

[dashpoet]

No woriies..

[dashpoet]

Hits it on the ethereal button, great pairing, thanks janeczka