Creative Writing Story Structure- advanced Part 3/12

[ti2my94]

I think you already wrote the book, but it would be cooler if he chased after bob all the way until the end, killed him out of revenge, and then finds out that it was Charlie all along, and that's how he realizes that revenge is never the answer. I think it would create a much bigger impact on the reader. But that's just me.

[architectus777]

@ti2my94 The novel ended up going in a pretty different direction, but the ending is very powerful. The good guy dies. How and why he dies is what makes it powerful. 

[ti2my94]

@architectus777 by the way i forgot to thank you for all of this! it helped me greatly and i appreciate all the work you put into it.

[Starfall3]

Thanks for posting, this series really helped me.

[Gooodwitch]

i love 6th sense too. im writing a book thats got the best story ever, i didnt know the ending for a long time so i never bothered writing anything down. it started w/ opening scene...then i thought of the middle ...but when i thought of ending it all fell together...its a great story but not sure i have what it takes to write descriptively enough

[Starfall3]

r u going to publish it? what's it called?

[ultimate8pac]

SET OUT IS GOOD, STORY IS not so goodon and that revenge can make you happy but it sitll not good, plus kiling someone does make thing better sometime as if he doenst kill that guy that guy could go n ot rape more people and take advantage of jack doing nothing

[FukinMikeAlright]

excuse bad gramer, viewing on ps3. u just made a hanus comment about drugs, many of the most creative minds are twisted on drugs they unloked true creativity for boring closed minded people in society to

[architectus777]

Depends on the drug. Drugs mostly turn people into scum. Those few people that are responsible and use drugs for artistic reasons,are well, the few.

[FukinMikeAlright]

I Wouldn't say mostly turn people into scum but you are right about depending on the drug. I smoke weed and i enjoy it, it relaxes me and lets my thought track flow, i think its very good for creative arts, writing and music ect. Dont get me wrong, I'm not saying drugs are good but i think weed and magic mushrooms shouldnt be considered a drug, less harmfull than alchahol. ANYWAY i see your point and just to let you know im currently using your structure to help me write and its helping!.

[architectus777]

I don't consider weed a drug. I guess technically it is, but it doesn't turn people into bad people. Neither does shrooms or acid or ayauhaska. The drugs I'm refering to are the highly addictive ones that mess people up. Alcohol messes people up. Herion, cocain, meth, pcp. You get the idea.

Go to my channel and playlist. Check out the new version of story structure. It's better I think.

[grpjlj2009]

i thought of something an extra twist where all this can be added the reason for peace and justice many time we react but we accuse and all and we are pointing at ourselves..he ends up having to face his horror of incest and through all this he did not get satisfcation until he breaks down. i am attempting to write a book and i need some advie do u mind..can i give u my email or something how does it work

[totallymoah]

Yeah, it's repititive, but i like it that way. I think it helps me remember the things i should keep in mind. By the end of the 12 vids i'll probably won't even need to pause the video and take notes! Thankyou! Oh and you might already know this but the second "opponent" is written wrong. Thanks again!

[XxXEishieXxX]

lol when you said : the audience might think "wow he didn't kill bob" my first thought was but he killed Charlie... I don't know why i found that so funny

[MattyWalpole07]

couldnt agree more - very good - but repetitive!!

[robertc009]

these are good vids so far, but REALLY repetitive, no offence, i'll try and make it through all 12 though.

[architectus777]

They are repetitive, but we learn that way.

[sweetnsour2devour]

I like how you effectively elaborate everything, or make it "robust" because to newcomers like me it reallys 'drums the message home' lol!

[ZacksEnder]

The quote you mentioned was from Adaptation. I just watched it the other day. Amazing movie.

[architectus777]

They can be the same but not always.

I might desire to be a rock star, but I don't need iit. Perhaps I need to get over the death of my father.

[Buboes1]

ty for this btw!

[architectus777]

You're welcome.

[danicontessa]

you have no idea how you have helped me today,awesome job!! you rock!

[architectus777]

Thank you, and you're welcome.

[smithy928]

great job!

[SunShowers87]

Not to be picky, but you misread what Rankao said. "Came down a little (coma), Man." Makes perfect sense.

[architectus777]

You're right because he forgot the comma.

[architectus777]

That should be calm down little man. Sorry I couldn't resist. I have ADD so I can't help but being jumpy at times.