Velvet Heart (Original Song)

[healthyaddixion]

i love the " dodgy instrumental section" :)

"i try, i try, i try" <33....you succeed.

you are truly "you" and noone else...love this one, favorited it.

[Oswlek]

Followed Ron (rhopen)'s favorites here and I'm glad I did. You have an enjoyable style.

[slippereal]

very cool man great verbiage and sweet fingerpickin!

[ERICROBILLARD1]

great!

[chrisgilroy19]

that was a cool original man really superb, have to fav this really good stuff here.

[yeahitsdirty]

i like it

[robby63]

PS..I love the word "dodgy" haha..but I did enjoy the *dodgy "instrumental" secton*

[robby63]

This is lyrically so strong, makes for a more than memorable song. Your guitar and vocals set the tone incredibly well too.

Added to my faves and your playlist too..;)

Robby

[urimidden]

Great song. I like the finger picking.

[Cisoma]

the chary worlds of spiders, of silk worms,

of butterflies

of moths

woven

subject to angered winds

and furious fires

and reticent rains

and the occasional crushing wayward limb

but strong enough to provide a sort of transient shelter

[UncleUsurp]

oh! what i would do for a half a look through even but one of your eye's.thank you milady :)

[TheBrooklynRadio]

"Sickly sweet defeats

The need te Know beyond reflect-

Shun the ways of wayward days

That wave us with regret

Sly falter,slow stride

Outgrown before denied

Cos its you whose good te glow

Where the rosy roses go"

Your awesome man!

Peace

[UncleUsurp]

thank you brother.

[jonathandavidr]

Another really good track.

[mrlachy]

Hi! I thought this was pretty good, but I have a few suggestions for you. Your lyrics are very imaginative and there's a lot of good imagery in there, but I feel like it's a bit disjointed and as far as I can see there's not really a theme/message/story being told. I'm guessing you are a Dylan fan, so try and analyse how he creates images within a story or a theme that stays coherent. Also, there isn't a lot of variation melodically... although I do like what you have. Just trying to help!

[UncleUsurp]

Very logical/helpful suggestions,with a precision i thank you for..look forward to hearing how you express this insight through your music.Thanks again!

[Tedsuzan]

"Play the pause", and I'm "good to glow"...This is one of your gooderbestisms. Have you given busking a go yet? Coffeehouses at least?

Fyi, I'm mostly just a fan of music, but I do think of songs from time to time; If you wanna hear one of my more complex melodies, try "corporate beauty".

[UncleUsurp]

Thanks dude!though what exactly is a gooderbestism?

[harrrbo]

Again totally unique with wonderful lyrics and word play , top notch in my book my friend

[UncleUsurp]

thank you kind sir :)

[HaIeybop]

you try and succeed!This is my new favorite of yours, love it.

[rhopen]

What a great composition. I like the flow of the words and the guitar work is first rate. Another great song from you, my compliments.

-Ron

[UncleUsurp]

Still ever grateful for your finely tuned words of encourage :)

[ladylabret]

Pay it forward, shake yer spark

Shape it like yer velvet heart

i love these lyrics :)

[Dengar013]

Another Stellar performance My Friend! You are Brilliant Brother and need to get your ass signed (not literally...LOL)!

Thousands of Trippy Stars To You Brother!

Carl

[UncleUsurp]

I might spin out of orbit with these kind comments!

[timelapse19]

Nice job, loved the 'dodgy instrumental' section as you called it! 5*s