Very nicely done with sweet music and finely paced. Congrats to you and your old gandpa too. One criticism though, if you don't mind me saying - the pack of cookies wasn't established firmly enough in his hand at the start - so some people might think the younger man was actually stealing the older man's cookies right from the get-go. Kind of undermines Douglas Adams' point to the story!
Yes! I noticed that too! I had a close-up shot of the cookies and newspaper in my hand but it came out way too dark so I had to make do! Thank you very much for the feedback!
The biscuit Story!!! Infamous! Wonderful! My favourite chat up story to unread girls!!! I greatly admire that you've gone to the trouble of actually making this little short story. But I would have made it in a train station... an English train station. Other than that I loved it. good work
What a situation. D':
Naeka 1 year ago
Thanks for taking an idea from my favourite writer and turning it into a very well made short.
hollyhillian 4 years ago
Very nicely done. Glad that there are people out there prepared to take a wonderful idea and turn into a short purely for pleasure .Many Thanks
hollyhillian 4 years ago 2
Cookies are fattening!!! Sucrose Whores!!! Love the short and the beard!!!
dcaste3474 5 years ago
Very nicely done with sweet music and finely paced. Congrats to you and your old gandpa too. One criticism though, if you don't mind me saying - the pack of cookies wasn't established firmly enough in his hand at the start - so some people might think the younger man was actually stealing the older man's cookies right from the get-go. Kind of undermines Douglas Adams' point to the story!
PluggyPoo 5 years ago
Yes! I noticed that too! I had a close-up shot of the cookies and newspaper in my hand but it came out way too dark so I had to make do! Thank you very much for the feedback!
matzamafia 5 years ago
The biscuit Story!!! Infamous! Wonderful! My favourite chat up story to unread girls!!! I greatly admire that you've gone to the trouble of actually making this little short story. But I would have made it in a train station... an English train station. Other than that I loved it. good work
WilliamHeart 5 years ago