This is really good. I have a few tips if you want. At the begining, you need to explain what happened more clearly. Specify weather it was past or present and I would suggest making it Sakuras flashback. Other than that your descriptions are good and it's a good plot.
This is really good. I have a few tips if you want. At the begining, you need to explain what happened more clearly. Specify weather it was past or present and I would suggest making it Sakuras flashback. Other than that your descriptions are good and it's a good plot.
i love that at the end you still have sakura not say she is in love with him and that its just to comfort him. i totally see her brain washing herself like that.
i had his feeling in my head when i was reading this, it was like an unreal state of amazement. also my heart was beating faster than the speedracers. FANTASTIC.!!!!!
i luved it! even though, i did see some spelling errors, but nothing huge. but i do want to say something about the text/ story itself, naruto's first kiss was with sasuke.... i wouldn't prefer it, but thats how it was. but i get how it would technically be naruto's first because it wasn't intentional and it was with another guy. so i guess it was his first. but thats the only actual story error i found. plus it didn't bother me too much ^^
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I don't like Naru/Saku, as a rule, but this wasn't that bad. Anyway, I didn't see any problems with it, except for the occassional spelling error. Usually just an extra letter, or a lack of one, nothing serious. Anyway, good job!
What did you mean when Natuto groaned when Sakura touched his mark?
smiixy2048 9 months ago
reading this makes u feel dead inside.......
richloverobin 11 months ago
This is really good. I have a few tips if you want. At the begining, you need to explain what happened more clearly. Specify weather it was past or present and I would suggest making it Sakuras flashback. Other than that your descriptions are good and it's a good plot.
SmiffyPresentation 1 year ago
This is really good. I have a few tips if you want. At the begining, you need to explain what happened more clearly. Specify weather it was past or present and I would suggest making it Sakuras flashback. Other than that your descriptions are good and it's a good plot.
SmiffyPresentation 1 year ago
EPIC SWITCH INTO THE SAD MUSIC MAN VERY GOOD WITH THE STORY I HAD TO SEE MYSELF IF I COULD NOT CRY I FAILED *INSERT BEST CRY EVER AUTOTUNED AUDIO *
kingant100 1 year ago
that waz reat... i loved it but im cinfused still... WHY COULDNT HE TOUCH HER ON THE MARKS?!?!
AnimeMangaFreak8 1 year ago
it rocked and im actually a girl not a boy a girl and im 17 years old
Montrice1994 1 year ago
not to ruin the moment or anything but at 5:00 sakura thought it was naruto's first kiss to but she saw the kiss with sasuke and naruto :P
RumsieLoZ 2 years ago
that's what i called unconditional LOVE!!!! name it...
liezlpecho 2 years ago 2
i love that at the end you still have sakura not say she is in love with him and that its just to comfort him. i totally see her brain washing herself like that.
dudtheman 3 years ago
that was great
vadeem6 3 years ago 2
SOOO GGOOODDDDD I LOVE your FANFICS
LegendOfHaruno 3 years ago 2
this was awsome!!!!!!! i fucking cried my heart out! i even felt my heart beat supper fast at the *good* parts... lol i loved it.. i hope u make more
narusaku4life13 3 years ago 2
i had his feeling in my head when i was reading this, it was like an unreal state of amazement. also my heart was beating faster than the speedracers. FANTASTIC.!!!!!
klaretin 3 years ago 2
That was great, good job. :)
T0b4k1 3 years ago 5
that was so awesome
drexzx96 3 years ago 4
I cried in this one, I love your fanfics XD
LoveLifeManga 3 years ago 3
Awh :P Glad you like it ^_^
SpamSkillz 3 years ago
Amazing i about cryed it was great make more plzs!!!^^
chatterbox3344 3 years ago 5
OMG!!!!!!! i love it!!!!!! but please put them as a couple, with her in love with him????? it would be so sweet
ionlyneed3wishes 3 years ago 4
*on the verge of tears* my god that was awsome...i beg of u please make more =,D
TheBigManIsHere94 3 years ago 3
I have only teo words for this, man...
EPIC. WHIN.
I really would like to see another one from you....
NARUSAKU FTW
konan4tekidan 3 years ago 3
That was beautiful! You actually had me crying at the end! I really do hope you make another one, please!
AshCresentmoon 3 years ago
that *sob* was the best *sob* narusaku fanfic *sob* i have ever *sob* seen
poplockit911 3 years ago 2
this was awesome, so much passion, romance, etc. u shud du hell more fanfictions.:DDDDDDDDDDDDDDD
sakuraharuno0012 3 years ago 2
that was sniff so beautiful
yuratyurar 3 years ago
awesome!it made me want to cry
Ghalee001 3 years ago 3
*sniff* that was so...... *sniff* beautiful
please make more.
13auroraborealis13 3 years ago 4
awesome!!! make more^^
nig7wols 3 years ago 3
now go make another one XD
Gra55Fairy 3 years ago 3
super mega crazy mega awesome awesomness! XD
Gra55Fairy 3 years ago
i luved it! even though, i did see some spelling errors, but nothing huge. but i do want to say something about the text/ story itself, naruto's first kiss was with sasuke.... i wouldn't prefer it, but thats how it was. but i get how it would technically be naruto's first because it wasn't intentional and it was with another guy. so i guess it was his first. but thats the only actual story error i found. plus it didn't bother me too much ^^
kiarimi 3 years ago
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I don't like Naru/Saku, as a rule, but this wasn't that bad. Anyway, I didn't see any problems with it, except for the occassional spelling error. Usually just an extra letter, or a lack of one, nothing serious. Anyway, good job!
fenrir7139 3 years ago
I'm not sure where but I've seen this before. Try to be original
don't mess with someone else work!
frederickps3 3 years ago
If your talking about NarutoRamenUzumaki.. That's me i got suspended and made this account.
SpamSkillz 3 years ago