My Immortal Chapter 3

[cliftongirl1022]

150 points from Slytherin!!!

[cliftongirl1022]

Who the hell tells their date that someone else is hot???

[karsten69]

if she is applying TONS of eyeliner... wow... her eyes must be tired, which would explain her bad writing.

[TheZiggirawk]

If Mary Sue was an apple, Draco would be all up in that shit

[RealParadoxBlues]

I'M SMOKING DRUGS!

[koshiir2ra]

ohmahgoodness, the monty python moment at the end was priceless

[HentMas]

[nerd rage]ok, ok, ok, i can tolerate the horrible writing, the abissmally wrong stuff about being a vampire and trying to make herself as a frikken hot girl, and well, she adding the bands she likes, but one thing is for certain, if she ever read the books, and liked them and placed a little attention in details, she would know that Draco would never ever even get NEAR a damn car, he hates EVERYTHING muggle...

[/nerd rage]

[BuildDestruction]

THIS.

[Mrduderpants]

God dammit, we get it you like black and generic hot topic clothing! D:

[WishingForAUnicorn]

gahhhh this makes me ashamed to be a into some of the bands i listen to and kinda gothic. this girl has ISSUES!

[FlameFeathers]

What a wanker!

[chocolateraaiissiin]

2:47 Does she say ugly blonde face?lmao! Warewolf Hillary Duff image anyone?haha

[bedhead1167]

but he didn't drive us to Hogwarts, he drove us to . . . the Forbidden Forest

haha when i read my immortal that's exactly how i heard it XD

[Shaestel]

I wonder if J.K. Rowling has read this...

[TheRockValentino]

@Shaestel Probably. I think Tom Felton has read it too. He was talking in an interview about a fanfiction he read where within a couple chapters characters were doing really inappropriate things.

[NekonekoCyborg]

1)lol she's so stupid she's probably like 10

2)guys I'm educating you emo is not a descriptive word it is a genre of music you tube frank iero describes emo (or something like that)

3)SHE GIVES PEOPLE WHO LIKE MCR A BAD NAME WERE NOT ALL BLOOD GOTHS WHO LIVE IN BLACK EBONY COFFINS AND NEVER OPEN THEIR EYES UNTIL THEY KNOW SOMEONE IS THERE -:(

[Gleefreak47]

Wait wait wait....Draco put his arm around her whilst jumping up and down to GC? That's skill.

[SebOfAllTrades]

I LOVE GOOD CHRALLOTE!

[PACMANnot]

@SebOfAllTrades

This fanfiction makes me ashamed to be a fan of them, Simple Plan, and MCR.

It also makes me want to stab a bitch(preferably then one who wrote this eye gauging story), but I'll refrain from doing so.

[NotSoGracefulProd]

"We walked into his flying black mercedes..."

They didn't get in it.....they walked into it. I just spit soda all over my lap.

[XXmello42]

I tried to read it, but couldn't get the plot... This is helping.

[IAmOogeyHearMeRawr]

Oh my god...this Ebony girl really has it out for Hilary Duff @_@

[Aliwhoops]

AHAHAHAHA I love the way

your talking in monotone then the song randomly came on

[shuri]

The monty python sound effect at the end got me

[44kiyoko44]

I choked.

LAWLS THIS STORY IS SO TERRIBLE. xD

[georgilo1997]

all this corset stuff on the front and back...nice

[breathlessloveless]

My IQ just dropped 50 points

[n1g3ld34c0n]

Aw jeez, it renders "Good Chralotte" as "goods relics"? XDD That's great, YouTube.

[BloodyViolet314]

I think some of my brain cells just died....

[breannlove]

I'm sure, if this was a troll who wrote this monster, is laughing it up somewhere... *shakes head sadly*

[hunkyzombie]

i love the matter of fact way you read ""hi draco" i said in a depressed voice"

[LuminatedDarknessC8]

I feel bad for Good Charlotte.

[hado123]

holy shit the detail with the clothes

[GracelessSacrifice]

...Good Charlotte is kind of tainted in my mind now.

[apusama]

it's ridiculously hard to defend goths and emos with this crap on the internet xD

[9tailNaruto]

@apusama No it's easy to defend them. Enoby/Ebony/Tara is a "Goff" and she's very "Gpffic", two totally different things. XD

[apusama]

@9tailNaruto ahh, good point.

[SukiDaYoNe123]

@apusama lol this girl is just an extremist, most people labeled as emo are more indifferent to "preps" than anything

[oddoddwest97]

I guess people gave her good reviews so that she would keep writing this pure lulz fanfic.

[PeriodicTableware]

Holy fuck, this makes me ashamed of listening to Marilyn Manson.

[icarcass]

OH NO THE FORBIDDEN FOREST! I HATE IT THERE! I HEARD THOSE TREES WERE PLANTED BY PREPS.

[midnightkitsune100]

Since when did Hot Topic become a casual gothic lolita store. If it really were it'd be my favorite store. And since when to goths were corsets and skirts. Tara Gilesbie must have seriously confused casual gothic lolita with goth. Goths don't wear skirts...

[sunnieheart1]

@midnightkitsune100 they are not goths in this story, they are "goffs".  Completely different things.

[Pokemonmariofan]

I love you.

Best. Shit. Ever.

[hte624]

But, I know Goths! They're not stupid enough to give this a good review!

[Sennoko]

as people write.. spelling and writing should get better.... shoudn't it? XD

[TehKensu]

I think the fic would have less misspelled words if the writer WAS drunk. >.>

[yoshifanforlife]

YOU ARE BRILLIANT!

[jagus12]

Why do all chapters end with with a dramatic elipsis

[AyunadirProductions]

Malfoy is very OOC in this story, isn't he. >_>

[Ashkihyena]

Among well...everyone in this fic.

[sheepsan89]

@AyunadirProductions is there anyone (besides Ebony/Enoby/whatsoever and Willow), who isn't?

[AyunadirProductions]

I don't know whether I should laugh or cry at the horridness of this shit.

Love the way you read it, though.

[HayLinLa]

@AyunadirProductions I'm doing both.

[EstherPandele]

@AyunadirProductions Try laughing and crying at the same time.

[NightUnite]

@AyunadirProductions Do both. I am! :'D

[BowserTheSecond]

She loves telling people how she gets dressed dosen't she.

[Ashkihyena]

I love the emphasis you put on "tons" there.

[Caliniphr]

Thanks for this!! the only good (bad?) thing that fic has is that it's introduced me to MCR and now I quite like them.

I should do the same for Good Charlotte now that I've heard them here.

[daleksr]

My God this is hilarious!