Hello guys. I've been making poetry for a while now, and I really want to express it to the public--by means of a website. If it would be possible for anyone to please critique my work and try to make me a better writer, that would be so helpful on your part. Please don't take this as spam, and thank you for any consideration you have. The link to the website is stated below:
Hey guys, I must say, I do love the vid. And as well, I just recently started a youtube channel and I only have one poem vid so far, I don't think its too shabby for a first vid. If Ido say so my self ;P please check it out if your interested (AND GIMMEE SOME FEED BACK) :D (P.S, Not all my poems will be sad, and not all my vids will be poems, some piano, some rap :P) I'll be waiting for visitors on by channel, lol byee!! :D
My girlfriend of 3 years left me for someone who could "take care" of her more (her words).
I couldn't eat, I couldn't sleep .. seriously, I never knew I could feel sooo terrible. Losing (and getting rejected by someone you love) is by far the worst feeling in the world!
Anyway, I'm back with her now after the 3 months of what was basically emotional torture.
pretty cool but you know when you talk about love you talk about 1 AND ONY PERSON. So starting with saying that this vid is dedicated to all the guys you ever liked (WTF) or loved reveals you never loved truly some1 in your life but created only fake feeling with your mind that lasted for a few days, which is REALLY pathetic. ah and sth else: you say boys are heartbreakers? if you truly wnt to see one you only have to look at your mirror
Hey not all boys suck I'm actually one of the few nice guys left on this place called earth but truly I'm nice and treat my girl right btw nice slideshow
realy i will neverever forget the paifull moments that you bring in my life its truse when painfull tears falling from my eye. you hurt me plz stop hurting me. and realy one day i will realy go away from al those who hurted me very much. and never say bye bye
you forced ne down this path of sorrow, im sorry but i feel like theres no tomorrow, when my heart was broken the remaining happiness vanished, your gonna make me snap, im tired of all this crap, break me any further and you will see my inner demon from hell, nobody knows why im scarred or my heart is charred, ( i suck at poetry), i love u and i hate u, i can no longer trust u,
srry about this when ur reading this don’t stop or something bad willl happen my name is summer i am 15 i have blonde hair many scars no nose or ears i am dead if u don’t copy this to 5 more sites.. or … i will appear one dark quiet night when your not expecting ir by your bed with a knife and will kill u thius is no joke something good willl happen to u if if u post this on 5 more pages
@MsJasperMCullen Please Dont tell me not to cry please dont tell me there was a reason why you dont know what i am feeling or how much i hurt the wet spots are from tears on the collar of this shirt you think i should go on in life forget about it and be strong but deep down i am sad, and i dont want to go along i dont expect you to understand why for no apparent reason i break down and start to cry my life has changed forever you see and thats why im not acting like the same ol me
Gift you are my gift from heaven that has been sent from above. i have dream and prayed that one day we will meet. you are my everything that i longed for, they say good things come to those who wait. and suprise you are here my soulmate,my joy, my everything. you are my gift that can not be brought back you are the type of gift that last a life time to remember and not to ever forget that you are my only gift..
don't feel ashamed..koz guys are also human beings..they do have feelings too...amd they do cry...and believe mw..when a guy cries, it's the worst thing to handle!!!
boys say one thing and do the oposite. he told me he'd take care of my heart but he broke that promise now it lays in pieces. pieces i can't put back together. a broken heart is like broken glass;; you can't put it back together </3
The with the purple drop poem i cryied really bad ,because it remind me of someone that i'v just went through this passed summer and i still love him to this even that where not together!!!!!!!!! ;'''(
You ain gotta feel that way. Find a guy who's in tune with his emotions and knows tha "real" value of a girl who loves him. Cuz a guy like that wont wanna let you go.
just leave it at this . if u meet the wrong guy in your life u will experience pleasure for a very short time. but if u meet the right guy. the pleasure can last for a lifetime. so go out and do experiments to find who is good and is not.
''missing someone gets easier everyday because even though you are one day further from the last time you saw them you are one day closer to the next time you will" you get closer to them the more you miss them.
yeah.... throw something.. but it better be a durian cause.. durian have more pointy skin than pineapple... if u don't know what durian is.. just search an image for it... u might laugh it... hahaha.. n_n
Hello guys. I've been making poetry for a while now, and I really want to express it to the public--by means of a website. If it would be possible for anyone to please critique my work and try to make me a better writer, that would be so helpful on your part. Please don't take this as spam, and thank you for any consideration you have. The link to the website is stated below:
lucasriskramos. wordpress. com
DourPianist 1 month ago
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Hey guys, I must say, I do love the vid. And as well, I just recently started a youtube channel and I only have one poem vid so far, I don't think its too shabby for a first vid. If Ido say so my self ;P please check it out if your interested (AND GIMMEE SOME FEED BACK) :D (P.S, Not all my poems will be sad, and not all my vids will be poems, some piano, some rap :P) I'll be waiting for visitors on by channel, lol byee!! :D
PetyBot 2 months ago
THIS IS HOW I FEEL WEN I LIKE A BOY :( D:
monio04 3 months ago
@monio04 Same Here
Danielleotown 3 months ago
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Break ups suck!!
My girlfriend of 3 years left me for someone who could "take care" of her more (her words).
I couldn't eat, I couldn't sleep .. seriously, I never knew I could feel sooo terrible. Losing (and getting rejected by someone you love) is by far the worst feeling in the world!
Anyway, I'm back with her now after the 3 months of what was basically emotional torture.
If you're going through the same, go to:
Breakups2Makeups. com
That guide helped me get through it.
MMArtist99 4 months ago
Evanescence! <3
insanity745 6 months ago
It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives.”
8luvbug 6 months ago
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check out my channel, im a new user and i have alot of poems to show!
jalenfine 6 months ago
love the last pic, "dont make me go all glowy on yo ass!"
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MMArtist99 6 months ago
pretty cool but you know when you talk about love you talk about 1 AND ONY PERSON. So starting with saying that this vid is dedicated to all the guys you ever liked (WTF) or loved reveals you never loved truly some1 in your life but created only fake feeling with your mind that lasted for a few days, which is REALLY pathetic. ah and sth else: you say boys are heartbreakers? if you truly wnt to see one you only have to look at your mirror
animezsoul 7 months ago
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animezsoul 7 months ago
muaahah lolz ''dont make me go all glowy on yo ass!'' i lawled
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donhonki1 7 months ago
What's the song?
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You're really good :) keep it up.
colevanblaricom 9 months ago
i just break down for no reason..
its not you, babe i promise..
its just somethin ive done for a while..
i guess im still depressed:/
cottlin1 11 months ago
My love is of a birth as rare a tis for objects strange and high.
It was begotten by despair upon impossibility.
Magnanimous despair alone could show me so divine a thing,
but fate does iron wedges drive and always crowds itself betwixt.
For fate with jealous eye does see two perfect loves, nor lets them close,
their union would her ruin be, and her power depose.
And therefore her decree of steel, us as the distant poles have placed,
as lines, so love oblique may well themselves...
FellowTownsman 11 months ago
...in every angle greet.
But ours so parrallel, through infinite can never meet.
FellowTownsman 11 months ago
wake up darling
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sweethippy67 1 year ago
This was a good little work of art. Made me cry a bit... knowing that the boy I love has gone away, but he will return and always be in my heart
angemala 1 year ago
In soviet Russia, poems read you
magnifly4111997 1 year ago
this is making me cry
ryansgurl0922 1 year ago
I ACTUALLY STARTED BREAKING DOWN CRYING DURING THIS
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DarkShadowAMV 1 year ago
LMAO!!! " Dont make me go all glowy on yo ass!"
AjGold131 1 year ago
to only one
darlene3351 1 year ago
im sad i just lost my mom just before we went on summer vacation
its hard writing this
JoeFish1979 1 year ago
@JoeFish1979 im sry.. :'(
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devindevon59 1 year ago
like the poems but think that the rock song ruined it a bit
pressident200 1 year ago
this is the song 4 me lmao.
scaryboo1000 1 year ago
Hey not all boys suck I'm actually one of the few nice guys left on this place called earth but truly I'm nice and treat my girl right btw nice slideshow
hotyoyo75 1 year ago
@hotyoyo75 i know wut u mean me too some boyz odnt know how to treat a gurl
malehot9 1 year ago
realy i will neverever forget the paifull moments that you bring in my life its truse when painfull tears falling from my eye. you hurt me plz stop hurting me. and realy one day i will realy go away from al those who hurted me very much. and never say bye bye
zulqarnainrufi 1 year ago
i love this part boys suck they break herts throw things at them......like pineaples
there pointy lol my fav part
nicksgirl545 1 year ago
you forced ne down this path of sorrow, im sorry but i feel like theres no tomorrow, when my heart was broken the remaining happiness vanished, your gonna make me snap, im tired of all this crap, break me any further and you will see my inner demon from hell, nobody knows why im scarred or my heart is charred, ( i suck at poetry), i love u and i hate u, i can no longer trust u,
mythicman4545 1 year ago
es dis video from celia felise
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srry about this when ur reading this don’t stop or something bad willl happen my name is summer i am 15 i have blonde hair many scars no nose or ears i am dead if u don’t copy this to 5 more sites.. or … i will appear one dark quiet night when your not expecting ir by your bed with a knife and will kill u thius is no joke something good willl happen to u if if u post this on 5 more pages
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TheMiamigirl4 1 year ago
What does 0:37 say i cant read it
MsJasperMCullen 1 year ago
horselover101k 1 year ago 3
@horselover101k Evanescence - Wake me up inside
Ayesha77 11 months ago
I love this video and i love this song.
ojanae19 1 year ago
I like the pineapple one.... So true!!
Hobochic87 1 year ago
a little scared but ok
cassandra0987 1 year ago
pain
pharmdude321 1 year ago
I LIKE THIS SO MUCH
sitycool 1 year ago
i liked it
TheKrazybitch10 1 year ago
:-D nice
juncalub 1 year ago
I love the song and this video has truth and humor to it...good job!
P.S.: "It's better to be hated for what you are than to be loved for what you are not" -All time favorite quote of mine
Crimsonrose4love 1 year ago
27THAONE 1 year ago
check out my channel read my poem please and subscribe!!!!! thanks all that do..i appriciate it
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love is heat
but love is sweet
when 2 lips meet
love is complete
Faicus1 2 years ago
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Faicus1 2 years ago
i have a poem
Faicus1 2 years ago
my aunt and uncle died almost 3 years ago and i just listened to a song yesterday and i stopped eating and i try to eat but i just cant =,(
cutaywithbrokenheart 2 years ago
hey this video is really touchy and the messages that are given through it really very piercing... .. touched my heart..... deep down....
sunnymhatre 2 years ago
how can dont love you when everyday i beside you. i think only you can do it. steve i really hate you
karinasteve 2 years ago
u know even though we can't c da persons we really MISS :(
it does get a bit easier little by little
quezadaaaa 2 years ago
2 07 is like me
:(
princesschan88 2 years ago
loved the vid but what was up with the avatar at the end? lol
stalkereatsbabys 2 years ago
so sad
but i'd throw something harder than that, like a cinder block or something.lol
Haleydaawsomeful 2 years ago
Made me shed a tear!
and im a guy..
I feel ashamed for admitting that o0
jiand21 2 years ago 21
@jiand21 when guys are being taught not to cry they are being taught to be afraid...its okay to tear really. im glad you admit you have emotions
sweethippy67 1 year ago
@jiand21
don't feel ashamed..koz guys are also human beings..they do have feelings too...amd they do cry...and believe mw..when a guy cries, it's the worst thing to handle!!!
MusicAddiCTeD009 8 months ago
I cried a bucket when someone very special to me left.. too much sadness, till trying to get over him../
marshnita 2 years ago
@marshnita get over him and move on if god have yall to end up together yall will but until then just live life to the fullest
and just pray and ask god if you and him are meant to be pull yall back together dont be sad.....
27THAONE 1 year ago
2:27 and 1:36 are me
xx
great vid x
buttlergirl1994 2 years ago
these are me:
0:06 0:38 1:37 1:57 2:07 2:42 2:50
T_T
luckdragon01 2 years ago
boys say one thing and do the oposite. he told me he'd take care of my heart but he broke that promise now it lays in pieces. pieces i can't put back together. a broken heart is like broken glass;; you can't put it back together </3
xxiLuVsCaRaMeLxx 2 years ago
@xxiLuVsCaRaMeLxx not all guys are like that..a lot of them are,but you will find the perfect one :)
IanTVtube 1 year ago
@xxiLuVsCaRaMeLxx yes u can just be strong and pull yourself together
and just let go and just remember what goes around come back
he will be back mark my word
27THAONE 1 year ago
@27THAONE you were right.He's back.
iTSxLiZxOmgxD 1 year ago
i <3 the one at 1:38
tnklacious 2 years ago
1:50 is great
coke123098 2 years ago
What's the name of this song?
bostonfan2012 2 years ago
Bring me to life, by evanescence.
horselover101k 2 years ago
Bring me to Life - Evanescence
rbendix 2 years ago
@bostonfan2012 Evanescence - Wake me up inside
Ayesha77 11 months ago
is there any videos with love poems with GOOD love poems in the backround??????????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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SohailPoetry 2 years ago
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great poem! ... proper touchin aswell.. seen as you all like poems.. check my channel out aswell and let me know what you think of ma latest poem!
SohailPoetry 2 years ago
The with the purple drop poem i cryied really bad ,because it remind me of someone that i'v just went through this passed summer and i still love him to this even that where not together!!!!!!!!! ;'''(
misshoney520 2 years ago
You ain gotta feel that way. Find a guy who's in tune with his emotions and knows tha "real" value of a girl who loves him. Cuz a guy like that wont wanna let you go.
stanjon711 2 years ago
Note to self.
Boys suck
They break hearts.
throw things at them.
..throw pineapples, they're pointy.
hahaaha, thats so funny xD
cutieforever12345 2 years ago
when i read this poem i cry hardly i will remember all the past with my bf
sunnycheong77 2 years ago
And where do gays fit into all of this?
Pareviax 2 years ago
just leave it at this . if u meet the wrong guy in your life u will experience pleasure for a very short time. but if u meet the right guy. the pleasure can last for a lifetime. so go out and do experiments to find who is good and is not.
=) good luck to everyone finding the right person
spiciekid 2 years ago
yeah but we (guys) aren't all bad and we can make girls extremely happy for the rest of their lives
SwAgGaRyT 2 years ago 2
Guys get hurt just as much, it's expressed differently...
naomie76 2 years ago
Cute <3
xxxjellbell22xxx 2 years ago 6
this waz really good. and ill admit tht a guy can be a jerk. and ima guy but ive been hurt by all the gurls i liked.
TheFamousR 2 years ago 3
thats really beautiful ! xD
subtiel3 2 years ago 2
i hear u sis boys suck when they break ur heart ive been their 2
brokenheart9087 2 years ago 2
Check out the "My last poem to you" in the Video Responses by "Chaching102" will leave you Paralyzed in a moment..
chaching102 2 years ago
how many have u liked or loved then! ;) theres a lot of poems, really good to :d
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pcgames234 2 years ago
the poem at 2:57 makes sense
''missing someone gets easier everyday because even though you are one day further from the last time you saw them you are one day closer to the next time you will" you get closer to them the more you miss them.
czmxrider 2 years ago
Where Did You Get The Picture At 3:20 From? x
XDemiiDiamondX 2 years ago
a friend, do you want me to email it to you? through youtube of course.
horselover101k 2 years ago
keep it up your poems rock! :]
lxlsnopp101lxl 2 years ago
What am I supposed to do with this broken heart?
Nervescheme 2 years ago
@Nervescheme
put it back together and be strong!!!!!@
have fun
27THAONE 1 year ago
jack- 1:08, dont tell me not to cry
badtimesallthetime 2 years ago
3:24 = Halarious!
great video!
JannaBabeyyy 2 years ago
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i loved them all
starheartskull15 2 years ago
lmao
Note to self.
Boys suck
they break hearts.
throw things at them
....like pineapples. they're pointy..
aha i love it
:P
BeautifulFallinTear 2 years ago
i think its the best poem i have ever seen or heard even though u didn't write it all, u did a great job making this vid
EvilDante2000 2 years ago
yeah.... throw something.. but it better be a durian cause.. durian have more pointy skin than pineapple... if u don't know what durian is.. just search an image for it... u might laugh it... hahaha.. n_n
octob3rfun 2 years ago
And I thought I had issues. lmao
cumstain50 3 years ago
rofl
horselover101k 2 years ago
if you add musci and show how you feel with musci it will make ppl cry maybe
lalo6one7 3 years ago
1:52.....story of my life
triciaC4me 3 years ago
Very nicly composed video, even if it's not all you're work.
malaki013 3 years ago
Woooooooow I just spelled "your" wrong. Wow. I can't believe I just did that!
malaki013 3 years ago
You wrote all this? wow.. ah-ma-zing!
It's exactly how I feel!
xoxx
aqua4eternity 3 years ago
actually i only wrote some of it.
horselover101k 3 years ago
no actually, u wrote NONE of it...
DenyceRB 3 years ago
loved it
celicahernandez 3 years ago