You should also avoid bad clichés, like only writing about "love" and "death" and "darkness" in non-rhyming lines. It's not poetic, but it's how everyone starts out. I'm not hating on your super old video, just guiding. If you are still writing poems, you are probably a lot better now. Try using rhymes. Poems that don't rhyme tend to be amateurish.
Remember capital I and first letters in every line.
Also remember the ' (apostrophe) when skipping letters, like in "don't".
Hour* Taking*
You sort of tell the obvious in the bloody poem. It's obvious that it's blood from the first two lines. This really just tells the event of blood coming from someone's face. There should be a reason or conclusion.
You're*, etc.
Just because grammar is extremely important when writing poems. Few like bad grammar.
this is 1 of my poems : My heart is weak my soul is still.Y cant we just sit bak and chill?No smoking weed no getting high.We really dont hav to but im gonna try.If u dont want to u dont hav to go.Time shouldnt be going by this slow.My stomach hurts i cant breathe.Please can u just let me be? Y r u taking this shit so far? dont u c tht im falling apart? i cant c im going blind.Or is all this shit just in my mind? fuck it i dont want to do this anymor.I think the rain is finally starting to pour.
Hey, I really like your poetry. The images are very cool. Nice job! Check out my channel if you get the chance please and let me know what you think! They are old poems, but I will have some newer ones up soon!
Thanks for the poem used it for my school project. got an A. Thanks!!! Thumbs Up
jordanp127 9 months ago
I like your poems. You're really good at putting words together ^ . ^
AnnaBananaKooKooCake 10 months ago
You should also avoid bad clichés, like only writing about "love" and "death" and "darkness" in non-rhyming lines. It's not poetic, but it's how everyone starts out. I'm not hating on your super old video, just guiding. If you are still writing poems, you are probably a lot better now. Try using rhymes. Poems that don't rhyme tend to be amateurish.
MagnusRulerHardt 10 months ago
Lie* Soul* Shatters* Can't* Because*?
Remember capital I and first letters in every line.
Also remember the ' (apostrophe) when skipping letters, like in "don't".
Hour* Taking*
You sort of tell the obvious in the bloody poem. It's obvious that it's blood from the first two lines. This really just tells the event of blood coming from someone's face. There should be a reason or conclusion.
You're*, etc.
Just because grammar is extremely important when writing poems. Few like bad grammar.
MagnusRulerHardt 10 months ago
btw ur poems r really deep and amazing
membrain525 1 year ago
this is 1 of my poems : My heart is weak my soul is still.Y cant we just sit bak and chill?No smoking weed no getting high.We really dont hav to but im gonna try.If u dont want to u dont hav to go.Time shouldnt be going by this slow.My stomach hurts i cant breathe.Please can u just let me be? Y r u taking this shit so far? dont u c tht im falling apart? i cant c im going blind.Or is all this shit just in my mind? fuck it i dont want to do this anymor.I think the rain is finally starting to pour.
membrain525 1 year ago
nice poems! im a poet myself
kokubos 1 year ago
Wow i loves ur poems can u give me some tips or somethin thx :)
FreakIpodtouch 1 year ago
LOVE IT !!!! <333
9eminemFan 1 year ago
LOVE IT <33
9eminemFan 1 year ago
Good job :D
Poetrilin 1 year ago
that was tight dawg
ongthisucks 1 year ago
Loved the vid.
You did a good job
Starfighter20014 2 years ago
uh...did i have to do somethin about the white poem cuz it sounds really familiar... o.O...if not ok im relived...
kidomarutwin 2 years ago
Anytime. Thanks for the kind words!
NADAgostino 2 years ago
Hey, I really like your poetry. The images are very cool. Nice job! Check out my channel if you get the chance please and let me know what you think! They are old poems, but I will have some newer ones up soon!
NADAgostino 2 years ago
Thanks a lot i really apprecite it. your Channa is vary cool and u have some nice poems ^.^
xxAnimeLover1994xx 2 years ago