Close, but no cigar -- but I did appreciate your effort. Everything sentence that distracted from what Contribute does should be eliminated: no rap about missing bullets, why they're missing, the tedious means necessary to correct 'em; no comment about how the color blue is difficult to see for the links, no unexpected surprises. A second version that gets to the point, functions and features of Contribute would have to be better.
Close, but no cigar -- but I did appreciate your effort. Everything sentence that distracted from what Contribute does should be eliminated: no rap about missing bullets, why they're missing, the tedious means necessary to correct 'em; no comment about how the color blue is difficult to see for the links, no unexpected surprises. A second version that gets to the point, functions and features of Contribute would have to be better.
citizenbfk 3 days ago