A lot of editing and development need to be done...I think when you introduce characters, say something that pops out about them; I noticed you liked to talk about their hair and eyes, but it seems repetitive to me...
On a diff note: the music distracted me a bit =[ instrumentals, perhaps ? :)
Hah. thanks. i like it when people criticize. i swear my friends couldnt do it to save their lives. xD ya. i gues your right. to me, what i see first is their hair and eye color. xP but thats just me. i'd love to hear more from you on my other posts. i totally need it :] and ill try to change the music. xD Thanks for watching!
A lot of editing and development need to be done...I think when you introduce characters, say something that pops out about them; I noticed you liked to talk about their hair and eyes, but it seems repetitive to me...
On a diff note: the music distracted me a bit =[ instrumentals, perhaps ? :)
But anyway, I like it for the most part :)
ShirinJoyu 2 years ago
Hah. thanks. i like it when people criticize. i swear my friends couldnt do it to save their lives. xD ya. i gues your right. to me, what i see first is their hair and eye color. xP but thats just me. i'd love to hear more from you on my other posts. i totally need it :] and ill try to change the music. xD Thanks for watching!
kodochalover123 2 years ago