Student Short Film - 'Broken' 2008

[IJplum]

Very nice, I can tell that this was a very well thought out video. The use of color was very well done and the the music definitely added to the drama of the whole composition. A+ my friend, keep it up!

[riggerrogger101]

A great movie :)

I would say to improve try making the music quieter and the voices lowder :)

[lilyvega21]

this is a really good concept! :) need work on shots, and shakiness but really good concept! :)

[camaz04]

@lilyvega21 thank you so much!

[kaprioshka]

This is a great platform for portraying your talent. Im truely impressed and I think you should participate

I will keep following up on this video..

regards,

Kaprioshka.

[ObelixDman]

Good job. My critiques would be...

move the camera on certain shots, not just tripod the whole movie. Also, when the kid didn't come back from school, it wasn't apparent that she was worried. Just looked like she was washing dishes. In my oppinion, you should have had her waiting a the door for a while ready to do something, then move to dishes as time elapsed. And a little bit more time on the discovery, and less time on random cutaways like buttoning jacket. But good job.

[camaz04]

Thankyou, @ObelixDman some good advice there I'll definitely take on board :)

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[ScorpionHuntress]

That was really well done =D I'm writing a short horror for my school right now so I can appreaciate the effort that went into that. Nicely done!

[camaz04]

Thank you so much @ScorpionHuntress that's really cool, short horror's can be really amazing if you do it well! Definitely a lot of effort, but so worth it! Be sure to upload and then link me when you've finished I'd love to see!

Sarah. xo

[rekajsmith19]

What program do you use?

[camaz04]

final cut pro

[Tubeboy732]

Definitely Enjoyable!

[camaz04]

thank you heaps! @Tubeboy732

[oooooVANESSAooooo]

this is reaaaallly good. loved it.

[camaz04]

Thank you so much @oooooVANESSAooooo

[HandyTheXxxX]

Just loved it!

[camaz04]

: D yay

[ashleedizzle]

ahah i remember this from the monash youth film festival :)

[camaz04]

hahahah! aww yay really!? :)

[beevers93]

wow immense im doing year 12 media :P

[camaz04]

cool :) i did it last year! LOVED IT...good luck for your exam!!

[beevers93]

dont scare me! xD

[camaz04]

aww! i didn't mean to scare you! hehe. if you know most of the material you'll be absolutely fine! the rest....you can make up :) (but i so didn't say that ;p)

[beevers93]

well i do drama and performing arts aswell as media and business so im not scared of it going weird as it happens in drama a lot and improvising is what i do (and i didnt say that) xD

[camaz04]

hahha that's the way!! well all the best for everything! i'm going thorough uni exams and assignments at present, not much more fun! xox

[Formsofheaven]

Wow, that was great!

[camaz04]

Thanks!!!!! I cant believe i'm still getting comments for it (= must upload some more!

[Formsofheaven]

Oh yes, please do!

I stumbled on it by accident, and once I watched the first minute of it, I had to watch the rest!

The ending left me speechless!

[camaz04]

aw really?! hahah - thanks so much thats awesome!

and in that case i definitely will, so stay tuned!

[srishtijain1]

hieeeee...loved ur movie....superb potrayl of schizophrenia..:)....

[camaz04]

thankyou!! (= it actually got into a film festival like 2 weeks ago! yay

[barb3894]

Great film! Awesome work!

[camaz04]

thankyou so much (= !!

[DesertJones]

i liked it alot. Good work

[camaz04]

thanks heaps! (:

[victoriavhm]

very very neat

[camaz04]

thankyou!!! :)

[dhoned]

Cool movie, nice intro that got me interested to continue watching and then I couldn't stop until I found out how it ended........... and the ending sweeeeeet.

[camaz04]

thanks HEAPS!! :) glad u like it

really gotta start making moree

[blkcass]

wow this film was really good the way it was twisted at the end was one of the best i hav ever seen it was great :)

[camaz04]

wow! hey thanks so muchhhhhh :-)

[shayes205]

Ive watched this somewhere! But I dont remember where. did you get into top screen? Or maybe my media teacher showed me.

[camaz04]

omg noo wayy!! unfortunatly i didnt get into top screen haha, shameful!! how have you seen this before ?? thats crazy lol.....,,,,,i wonder where you could have seen my film!! oddd

[shayes205]

I know its crazy as! Ive definatly seen it before but for the life of me I cant remember when. My media teacher sometimes shows us other students films though so maybe it was him.

[camaz04]

hhahaha fair enough!! i wonder where he got it from ? unless.....you go to the school i used to go to ? lolll

[shayes205]

I dont think so. I go to The Geelong College. Do you know what I might of done? I watch so man student films, both on youtube an at school. I may have watched yours on here before then when I saw it I recognised it, but it was only from here haha. Its possible I just got them mixed up.

[camaz04]

aww thats cool yeah fair enoguh..........i do the same thing :-) so u still at school, doing media this year ?

[shayes205]

Yeah I'm doing year 12 media this year. My year 11 short film, and a short advertisment project I did for media are on my youtube page.

[camaz04]

oh cool! i did it last year and loved it :-)

i'll check your films out!!!

[shayes205]

Cool thanks. The first one which is the ad is pretty funny I think. We didnt really take it that seriously. And my short film I dont really like that much, I still got A for it though and the second highest mark in the class. I only wish i could do it again this year.

[123emeraldwaters321]

hey

nice film how did u go with it grade wise?? did u get into top screen?

I did year 12 media too, and only just got around to uploading my film on youtube as well!! one of my friends is short listed look out for "mango tree" video cilp she made an entire film out of stop motion photography and payed 450 for the rights, pretty insane what some ppl will do.

[camaz04]

hey yeah thanks heaps...i got a very high for it....and actually landed a 42 for media and got my name in the paper! woo!

unfortunaly i didnt get into top screen...oh well :-) there are plenty of chances for things like that.....i check your movie out and your friends...howd you go in media??

and yes, 450 is preeeetty insane!!

[camaz04]

heey thanks! yeah i was in the paper...hahah got 42....but it got scaled down to 39 and i was like noo way!

but was still in the paper yayy

hehe heyy im loading up your video now, gonna watch it :) is it the to do list??

talk soonnnn

xx

[yoveedove]

congrats! yeah i got better than i thought for media too - but it sucks how it gets marked down. takes ages to make a film...

feel free to check mine out on youtube!

hope you get in ya course - my friend got in that same course but deferred so she'll be in it 2009.

xoxxo

[yoveedove]

hey good work!

any luck with top screens? i tried out with no luck. i really like the parts where she looks through the photo album (both times), and the flashbacks look awesome!

hope results went well for you

xoxxo

[camaz04]

thankyou heaps!! yeah, i tried out but didnt get in....same as u hehe oh well :P

thanks my results turnd out better than expected! i hope u were happppppy! :)

xxx

[xxuselessbulletsxx]

Niiice. although the story is cliched, i liked the film very much. at the start it was slow and...so-so. But you really did pick up the pace when she finds out that her son wasn't real. :) you did very nicely around there with the music and also the effects and the shots. liked it very much. :) good job!!

[camaz04]

haha thanks heaps!!

yeah i know... starts a bit...well yeah, ... lol

and i need to try and steer away from anything cliche....but so so much you see these days unfortunatly is cliche....ish

ill get there :)

[xxuselessbulletsxx]

d/w. did u write the script urself? how many films have u made so far? im an amateur to film making myself but one thing's for sure, i do write a shit load of scripts before hand. :P im looking to do another film prject in febuary...**excited** xP when's ur next film? (if u make one?) im looking forward to ur future films. I really think u have some talent there.

[camaz04]

yeah i did. i made oh.....about 8, but only 2 by myself...scriptwritting is something really good to get into!! i wanna start making another one after christmas and new years....so soon! haha stay tuned, it will be up soon, have a feww ideas in mind....not many

[Dajanad06]

haha,

need to figure out how i can upload it onto youtube first lol

ohh thats awesome, yeah i know a friend who paid 450 dollars to get song permission, crazy huh?

yeah im in year 12, you?

what school you going to?

x

[camaz04]

ah yes, that would help..took me a while lol

$450! thats insane!!

yeah same, year 12, ive applied for swinburne next year - film and tv and i reallllly want to get in!!

how about you

(haha this is bizzare how were having a full conversation on the comments for my movie!)

xo

[Dajanad06]

hey,

yeah i do media too, i entered my film but i doubt itll get in lol

how did you manage to get song permission from those artists?

thats awesome, i emailed so many and only one replied. :(

x

[camaz04]

haha awesome!

id like to see yours : )

i was really lucky with the songs...i rekon i emailed about 40 bands or artists, got a fair few reply, some wanted me to pay!! i was like - er no thanks :)

i assume ur in yr 12? u looking in to doing media next year..

good luck with exams and everything (if u are in yr 12 haha)

: ) xo

[Dajanad06]

hey,

this is pretty good :)

did you enter it into topscreen?

[camaz04]

hey! thanks heaps!

yeah i did send it in...hopefully it gets in!

find out dec 1st if its shortlisted..

you do/did media??

[camero66]

great work - im proud of ya - Uncle Remo

[frankyricoops32]

haha adam goes to sleep with a beanie....what a mad dog..

i should clearly be in this film.

nice job, great music too!

[seybabe0]

Fucking amazing!!!

I love you Sarah.

Xx