SEE WHAT YOU MADE ME DO (Spoken Word by David Randall Curtis)

[vudu8ball]

Loved this. If you have been raised in chaos then that is what you come to feel comfortable with. I have moments like this myself. It's just all to perfect, have to do something to fuck things up...

[TheAuroraBlack]

so deep in its truth.."waiting for someone to mess it up, again.." wow..

[aaronbergAPB]

Great piece. Like a mini story. You are not boring, that's for sure.

[NewBrazdolph]

Toxic relationships are all that seem to be around...can a couple ever get along well?

[AncientAtheist]

Outstanding - as almost always. Thanks for posting a video today, which reminded me that I had forgotten to get to this like I promised myself! coño!

[sookiestackhouse2u]

i knew a girl like that many moons ago. tragic creature. she overdosed last i heard.

strong words, david. you NEVER disappoint.

[razorbrown]

Good one David. Excellent.

[jamesarongray]

i heard this guy goes off in bed! lol :P

[TheRavenOfPoe]

Your power with language here - wow!

Some people can be as addictive as drugs and just as bad for us - I think you captured the intensity of it here perfectly. This is a poem that will stick with me!

[CliffKFF]

Great job DRC with the writing and delivery of this poem, which is eerily like a movie I just watched several days ago called ".45" with Stephen Dorff and Milla Jovovich. Milla plays a battered girl who ultimately winds up in control of the situation -- I much preferred the outcome of that movie to what seemed to have happened in this poem. It's worth watching.

[DavidRandallCurtis]

CliffKFF: Thank you!  I will have to check out that movie--I'm a big fan of Milla Jovovich. Ever see "Million Dollar Hotel?" Love her in "The Messenger" too--I think she is kind of under-rated as an actress..... ( and my guilty pleasures of hers are the "Resident Evil" films--I loved the last one set in Vegas :P )

[CliffKFF]

thanks for those recos -- I've been wondering which of her other movies to watch first, since this was the first movie I've seen her in

[floydstinkyboy]

so true!

[KingHeathen]

too many different things to comment on to fit in the box...

Nice job David

[DavidRandallCurtis]

KingHeathen: Thanks a lot King!

[JamesWalterOrr]

Great poem and reading, David.

The further you spiral, the tighter the circle.

Sub-title: For every action there is an equal and opposite reaction.

Unfortunately.

Easy

[DavidRandallCurtis]

JamesWalterOrr: Thanks for the comment and thanks for posting a video response!

[harleynanda]

A vivid picture of addictive behavior, my good friend, and another great example in your storytelling style where you extract the bitters and deliver them as if at the bedside. A saturated composition, not only in your usual great titling twist, but the subtleties of composition, its extremes ranging from "I was seduced by..." to "During those last days...". I can quite easily picture you telling this from a fireside setting in leather chair with smoking jacket, slippers, cognac snifter and...

[harleynanda]

(cont'd) ...cigar; a blend of Hitchcock, Orson Wells, and Ambrose Bierce delivering the day's morose reflections at its closing.

[DavidRandallCurtis]

harleynanda: That was a very nice comment.... I love the way analyze things when you comment... you would be a great film critic... or critic of just about any art form I think.... have a great week!

[charlottepoet]

something about the image of those cracked teeth really made me stop and replay this video :)

well done as always DRC!

-jessie

[HeidiSaid]

Brilliant~ just loved this!

[DavidRandallCurtis]

HeidiSaid: Thanks for the kind words and for taking the time to type them! Have a great week!

[andrewnorris1]

You can tell almost from the outset that this story is heading on a downward trajectory. Tragic but so realistic. You once told me that you like to take cliches and reinvigorate them, well, you certainly breathed new life into the title. How often other people are always to blame for our predicament, while we chicane around the real issues. Your choice of details speak volumes and the last line still reverberates in my ear. Superb writing Fav'd 5*s, at least (2nd time posted, can't see 1st)

[KappyLaLaShow]

Your work always impresses me! Love the imagery and realism

[peebzzz]

Awesome =]

[RowanFortuneWood]

Fantastic, darkly comic, narrative poem. Five stars and favourite.

[windcu]

nice one again David!

[AliasSpecWriter]

wow, great poem! The situation is so terribly believable, which I suppose is both good and bad at the same time.

[AcidEntertainment]

The title says it all. Love it!

[missdivinestalls]

o.0 love it!!!!

[janeczka]

Fuck. This gives me chills.

[RichardRoy2]

I don't know what to say about this one DRC, except, very painful. Brilliant, but not your usual. Thanks David. It strikes me that loneliness is a monster that can't be faced by some people. But perhaps they're mistaking being alone for loneliness. Perhaps they consider themselves as unworthy of company. 5*'s and Fav'd.

[MrLovePoet]

Wow! What a life and what a psychology. I was rivetted to that poem. Well done, sir!

[PoetLina]

David, I am embarrassed by your credits, all I did was tell you this is a brilliant poem and even there I was not wholly correct because I did not recognise quite how brilliant it was until seeing this delivery. The stanza (go for stanza, Mary) beginning "Kelly hopscotched over the twelve steps..." is so sharp, it cuts through all the "cotton wool" surrounding the issues you address.

[Elenkhos]

Favorite.... great work man.

[Drastam]

nice one David.

[dashpoet]

I'm with Largo on the title, the poem is pure DRC, making the mundane memorable. Class act Sir, exceptional write.

[VisionGhostPoet]

I do recall I think you mentioned to me on Skype the story behnd this. That or something similar. I liek the last couple of lines, really does send the message home.

[tinySpectacle]

This is an excellent poem! 5/fave

[DavidRandallCurtis]

tinySpectacle: Coming from a the greatest lazy bones poet on youtube :P -- and one of my poetic heros (and no, I am not just saying that) -- thanks for the comment. Brat.

[SerenityMellissa]

Kelly hop scotched over the twelve steps (I love this illusion)

[smartbluecat]

Very visual - excellent work, man. As usual you knocked it out of the park. I love the structure and the story. I'm sure lots of people know a Sandra you captured her wonderfully.

Gary

[sonofwalt]

From the appropriate title to the final line, it's bloody well perfect, D. You got me.

[seekthevisceral]

Beautiful! Thank you for sharing your poem and your voice!

[PlayboyHerbie]

Great poem! Awesome presentation! Superb delivery! A Plethora of Sincerity (Thanks Eric!). Made me plug in the Clues Cd to listen to "Johnny and Mary".

[Idlinfarm]

And herein lies human drama. We like to hear about it but not get caught in it. You have a gift, David.

[DavidRandallCurtis]

Idlinfarm: Thank you. Nice words to hear coming from a master! (I really mean that!)

[sharbohemia]

Vacuuming at 4AM? - hmmm...

Captivating story... I love your delivery.. you never rush your words.. so confident...

so sure , David. (Note: You said to write what you feel like writing in response to the vid... and that's what you brought forth in me..)

Peace ~Shaz

[healthyaddixion]

oh god... how do you come up with this stuff. beyond brilliant. my new favorite! i worship you. just sayng.

[DavidRandallCurtis]

healthyaddixion: Well, I think Roy or tinySpectacle or SamDougken are far more worthy of worship! I am a child of a lesser god :P -- seriously, thank you Healthy... your words mean a lot. Thanks for your kindness--it helps keep me going. In answer to your question how do I come up with stuff--I always try to keep in mind that the poem is more important than me, and the reader/listener is way more important than me...

Peace! ;)

[JesusSavesAtCitibank]

Great work!!

I've observed how some women seem to always fall for some poor excuse of a man -- a real jerk! I suspect it's because they both suffer from a lack of self-esteem. In essence, they make the perfect match. It's a kind of mutual destruction pact.

[Nigelcf]

Sumptuous poem beautifully delivered as ever 5*s.

[dvnobles]

Captivating...brings us into that life for a brief glimpse from a safe distance.

//dan

[controversialbook]

Countless million have slowly suffocate in the rivers of their minds afraid to step foot on that dreadful shore of realty. I don't understand it. I have refused drugs for fear of missing one frame of this distorted movie clearly. Like the alcoholic craves the smell and taste of his or her favorite blend, I'm addicted to the sights and sounds of idiocy and self-mutilation of humankind. 5*.

[liz1060]

so many relationships end with a punchline ... uncommonly good telling of a common story, David -- definitely your specialty 5*

[ScepticalAgnostic]

Those were some superb metaphors, combined with a dark and compelling storyline.

...Fuck. Now I feel like a critic. Have a drink on me. Ideally not literally.

;]

[CousinoMacul]

Well done!

[xyzllii]

Depressing little tale...thanks..

[unmeasuredinstances]

Wonderfully done and when done, wonderful.

[marycigarettes]

it's a whole movie in a small cluster of stanzas or verses or whatever we call these things....no one does it better,big boy.

[andrewnorris2]

You can tell almost from the outset that this story is heading on a downward trajectory. Tragic but so realistic. You once told me that you like to take cliches and reinvigorate them, well, you certainly breathed new life into the title. How often other people are always to blame for our predicament, while we chicane around the real issues. Your choice of details speak volumes and the last line still reverberates in my ear. Superb writing Fav'd 5*s, at least

[Pamandymagic]

A superb poem, belovéd, as is the delivery and presentation. Well done! I think an ego-massaging Skype session is in order (I'll be going for the burn!). Will try to catch up with you in the next day or so.

x x x

[fellowtuber123]

OMG I'm commenting ;P

This is excellant, David. So many exceptional lines. My favourite though, is the last, it hit me hard if you know what I mean. Keep posting more. Well, we all know you will anyway, but... lol

See you soon! (meaning yes, I will show my face in your comment section again) ;P

[nordicsky]

This is an amazing write... a dark, dark tragedy of mutual destruction.

" --like she was waiting

for someone

to mess it up again."

Each reading reveals more layers of meaning.

Regards, Peter

[Rutle]

Brilliant poem, "He drank life in.

She snorted it" great line.

[rozeboosje]

WOW - very good poem. Gave me the chills

[Largo64]

You got it even better this time, David.

I always wonder why some abused women go back to their abusers. They must have a very low opinion of themselves to tolerate that treatment from anyone, or to believe even for a moment that it was their fault.

5/5* and fave.

[TruthCracker]

Hey I saw it the second time, and it meant even more. I love how its real stories. Frazer, I'm an addict!

[CaptainArmageddon]

Fantastic, definitely one of my favorite of yours. My youtube got updated, so I can only give you a "thumbs up," but it's a big thumbs up!!!

[DavidRandallCurtis]

CaptaniArmageddon: Thanks... a lot! But what is the deal....  is there some new youtube update where one can only give a thumbs up? Just wonderin' -- I'm a little (lot) drunk right now :P -- peace! ;)

[Jadabh3]

And the book says that above all rational choice free will always will prevail

Laughable/ hospital

Subtle.... Rob x

[DavidRandallCurtis]

Jadabh3: Thanks for the comment Rob!

[keanghiero]

Nice & good work David.

5*

all the best

Kean

[DavidRandallCurtis]

keanghiero:  Thanks for the stars and the comment!

[TruthCracker]

Frazer I love your stuff. I'm addicted!!!!

[DavidRandallCurtis]

TruthCracker: Frasier thanks you for your addiction! :P (and yer comment!)

[TruthCracker]

Frazer rocks! Wobblehead says so too

[heatherlynblue]

wow, drc. this is an incredible piece of work.

[DavidRandallCurtis]

heatherlynblue:  you are too kind as always. I love you! ;)

[heatherlynblue]

no, drc. i'm serious. really well done. thank you for putting so much time and care into your work and sharing it with us. you just get better and better.

[leftysergeant]

When you say "During those last days..." I get the impression that there is more to the story. but I hardly think we need dwell on it. Neither of them was rehabilitated.

That sort of thing never ends well.

Once again, you offer a great insight into a world most of us would just as soon not visit. Bravo.

[DavidRandallCurtis]

leftysergeant: thanks for the comment. that world, is actually all around us i think... i have a little experience in working with people when they are going through things like this poem describes--and very often they really are the people next door. or the ones you'd never think would have such problems. peace, david

[bradmanthethird]

@leftysergeant

hmm, not to interpret his work too much, but I think it's meant to mean that she killed herself, along with "wanting to mess it up again".

[renegade4dio]

I know Sandra! Except her name is Karen. She started taking the next step: Smashing up her own living room and face after week-long meth binges....

[DavidRandallCurtis]

renegade4dio: I hear that. I known people that will stay up for days cleaning their place--only to smash it up like you talked about. Thanks for the comment.

[Neffabletranscendent]

I got so excited when I saw your video in my subscription box (ooooh yeah, I started doing baby claps) and, true to form, you did not disappoint. You are by far one of the most engaging individuals I've ever come across!

XOXOXO

[DavidRandallCurtis]

Neffabletranscendent: I love baby claps :P -- seriously, thanks a lot... thats a very nice thing to say.

[DavidRandallCurtis]

DruChaos: Thank you Dru!

[AnneOnAMoose]

I gotta 5* and fave this one, thanks.

[DavidRandallCurtis]

AnneOnAMoose: Thank you very much!