I liked this piece. It was well done. I do want to offer one piece of constructive criticism, though. I understand that you wanted to do a silent film, and that's fine, but the writing of the text seemed awkward. It didn't really sound like a conversation is what I mean. It was like "Hi. You need to go to your room." That was an awkward transition. Like I said, well done otherwise.
thank you! i changed it before my presentation today and it made a huge difference!
soulsoldier1126 3 years ago
I liked this piece. It was well done. I do want to offer one piece of constructive criticism, though. I understand that you wanted to do a silent film, and that's fine, but the writing of the text seemed awkward. It didn't really sound like a conversation is what I mean. It was like "Hi. You need to go to your room." That was an awkward transition. Like I said, well done otherwise.
Damien5254 3 years ago