i get what you mean and thanx for commenting. this is one of the first poems i ever wrote so i get why it must lact flo also i think its missing background music but i just cant find the right kind(if you have any suggestions that would be helpful) although since you didnt feel the flo in this one i wrote anohter poem its on my account so if you want you can watch and comment how you feel about that one too
The words are decent, but (no offense, I'm a critic.) it lacks flow. Very good try though.
mansonman1 2 years ago
i get what you mean and thanx for commenting. this is one of the first poems i ever wrote so i get why it must lact flo also i think its missing background music but i just cant find the right kind(if you have any suggestions that would be helpful) although since you didnt feel the flo in this one i wrote anohter poem its on my account so if you want you can watch and comment how you feel about that one too
itachiVSsasuke13 2 years ago
awesome poem! I am now a real man!
jarzfriend 2 years ago