I love love love the message you are putting out here. I couldn't agree more with everything you said.
A few words of advice from a fan, however: I worry that your message comes off a bit didactically. Not quite sure how to fix that though, and it might be a bit arbitrary. And while I love the diction you used, the poem lacked rhythm, which is usually inherent in slam and beat poetry. Obviously it's a very personal thing, but I think rhythm will help the listener click with your words better.
... Your Hot though,,,
reymundo1a 4 months ago
I love love love the message you are putting out here. I couldn't agree more with everything you said.
A few words of advice from a fan, however: I worry that your message comes off a bit didactically. Not quite sure how to fix that though, and it might be a bit arbitrary. And while I love the diction you used, the poem lacked rhythm, which is usually inherent in slam and beat poetry. Obviously it's a very personal thing, but I think rhythm will help the listener click with your words better.
Laceytech 2 years ago
We need to do a better version TAT
halfmoonhowl 2 years ago
So? This will have to do for now. XD
learntospel 2 years ago