It has a good idea to it, but work on how you present it and word it. Don't make things happen too fast either. Oh, and add music, too.
Another thing: This has kinda already been done! I don't know if you're trying to make it better or be a copy-cat. If you are copying, then, not cool!
Y a du son?
shachana94 8 months ago
Seriously???
It has a good idea to it, but work on how you present it and word it. Don't make things happen too fast either. Oh, and add music, too.
Another thing: This has kinda already been done! I don't know if you're trying to make it better or be a copy-cat. If you are copying, then, not cool!
smaple476 2 years ago
I don't like your story. Really, you couldn't at least add music?
OMFGRedo 2 years ago
first to comment? o.O
bleachandnaruto1 2 years ago