Naive (rewritten from 2008) Original - Danielle Edenfield

[ZeabiGames]

beep boop

[jsr9422]

impressive

[danbergam]

*he compares it to the 1st version*

Aww, your vocal lines! And how you sing them, with so much feeling!

You've always been great at singing, but it's clear how you've been able to develop, respect to the first version, and add more and more expressivity to it! :-)

I like this different structure, how the chorus is placed not before the second verse and how it changes in the end: definitely, songs also are about structuring parts and letting'em be more effective!

:-)

[Dandy087]

@danbergam Thank you for noticing the differences :) that's EXACTLY what I did ha ha. I felt that I sang the chorus one too many times the first time, and that going two verses before it was more settling. That, and of course, the development of my voice. I wasn't impressed with my older version :P I can be my own biggest critic sometimes. Thank you for watching Dan! Have a good day.

[danbergam]

@Dandy087

All of what you wrote... and not only! Now the audio quality is way improved and your performance can be better appreciated in all of its nuances! :-D

Oh, I think that for an artist being critic towards oneself is important: it's the (very needed) premise for to improve! ;-)

Thank you for being there doing your own thing and letting us witness the process, Danielle... it's precious, because it's stuff from soul to soul! :-)

Have a great day in return! ^_^

[NOWICALLEDMYSELF]

sounds good",)