Hmm... the plot so far lacks cohesiveness (I find myself asking 'what's going on?' too often). What I can determine from the plot makes me think that your theology is something strange, insane even. Some of the exposition is original, while other parts are clichéd. The characters... while you clearly make their positions and ailments known, it seems to be done in a very blatant matter without regard to expositional depth. Their designs also lack originality.
(con't) Some of your sprites are awkward (particularly at 2:53), and the repetition is a bit boring. You have quite a few grammatical errors strewn throughout the video, and it adds to the confusion. The profanity is rather unnecessary and repulsive. Sentence structure is rather passive, and makes the dialouge dull.
That's the bad news. The good news: you have potential. Keep working on this project, refine it, sharpen it. You might make something amazing out of it. Best of luck to you.
@mrFaymus Everyone has different way of animating, people seem to enjoy it, im not a perfectionist and i do not make magic when i animate so please dont expect me to be perfect and some what seem to offend my way of animating, the day that you make an animation and make it better is the day that your allowed to judge my animaton but please dont try to what seems to be offend me in my video.
@KevKenshin101 I was trying to offer constructive criticism, but if you're too uppity that you can't be bothered to improve yourself, then so be it. Perfection is not necessarily the goal, but it is nonetheless worth striving for. If a single of the simple things I mentioned was to be improved upon, people would rave you even more. I mean you no ill by posting what I posted. Feedback is not meant to flame, nor is it meant for mindless glorification. Dwell upon edification to improve yourself.
@mrFaymus Its not that im arrogant, Im not striving for perfection either, I enjoy animating not to be the best but for myself and to please the people, And i am not The best animator so dont expect complete greatness from my efforts, I dont wished to be rave'd I just enjoy, enjoying the people and having fun doing what im doing, so thanks for your criticism but no thanks
and when they're all walking together or something, maybe you can put them in different frames, so they don't look like they're walking in the same frame.
lol Final Fantasy X much hehe the first one i dont remember what part that was in lol the 2nd one i think it was his first fight with the boss the big spider or that squid one
eternity of light waves as start music
Izuru57 1 year ago
Final Fantasy music :D
Boredddish 1 year ago
wow its nice :D make more of this type of videos :D jyjy
1998snake 1 year ago
ur an amazing animator. subscribed<3
iPrettyG1rl 1 year ago
It's pretty good, but least the text longer the next time
MsNathaniel1 1 year ago
EXCUSEEE MEEEEEE, I REALLY LIKE THISSS VIDEOOO must u wait until 500 subscribers to make the second one =[
iampencil 1 year ago
teach me how to custom pose pm m
456brandon 1 year ago
Hmm... the plot so far lacks cohesiveness (I find myself asking 'what's going on?' too often). What I can determine from the plot makes me think that your theology is something strange, insane even. Some of the exposition is original, while other parts are clichéd. The characters... while you clearly make their positions and ailments known, it seems to be done in a very blatant matter without regard to expositional depth. Their designs also lack originality.
mrFaymus 1 year ago
(con't) Some of your sprites are awkward (particularly at 2:53), and the repetition is a bit boring. You have quite a few grammatical errors strewn throughout the video, and it adds to the confusion. The profanity is rather unnecessary and repulsive. Sentence structure is rather passive, and makes the dialouge dull.
That's the bad news. The good news: you have potential. Keep working on this project, refine it, sharpen it. You might make something amazing out of it. Best of luck to you.
mrFaymus 1 year ago
@mrFaymus Everyone has different way of animating, people seem to enjoy it, im not a perfectionist and i do not make magic when i animate so please dont expect me to be perfect and some what seem to offend my way of animating, the day that you make an animation and make it better is the day that your allowed to judge my animaton but please dont try to what seems to be offend me in my video.
KevKenshin101 1 year ago
@KevKenshin101 I was trying to offer constructive criticism, but if you're too uppity that you can't be bothered to improve yourself, then so be it. Perfection is not necessarily the goal, but it is nonetheless worth striving for. If a single of the simple things I mentioned was to be improved upon, people would rave you even more. I mean you no ill by posting what I posted. Feedback is not meant to flame, nor is it meant for mindless glorification. Dwell upon edification to improve yourself.
mrFaymus 1 year ago
@mrFaymus Its not that im arrogant, Im not striving for perfection either, I enjoy animating not to be the best but for myself and to please the people, And i am not The best animator so dont expect complete greatness from my efforts, I dont wished to be rave'd I just enjoy, enjoying the people and having fun doing what im doing, so thanks for your criticism but no thanks
KevKenshin101 1 year ago
Where the fuck is my camp piggy 5?!!!!!(jk lol) this video was awesome :D
mcdaddy249 1 year ago
Woo nice FF10 music, love it :D
dxvictim 1 year ago
Woah, nice man.
firelord555 1 year ago
Lol that was cool, idk why but I started laughing when I recognized where the sound effects came from. :D
DawntoGone 1 year ago
the random capital letters annoy me..
and when they're all walking together or something, maybe you can put them in different frames, so they don't look like they're walking in the same frame.
it looks weird like that.
Toadus148 1 year ago
So far so good! I can't wait for the next episode. =D
thagamerTJx 1 year ago
lol Final Fantasy X much hehe the first one i dont remember what part that was in lol the 2nd one i think it was his first fight with the boss the big spider or that squid one
unhappylife94 1 year ago
really kool
ButteryMMVCabinet 1 year ago
really good vid definatly make more just make the reading time a little longer couldnt finish reading in time
miniaturebox 1 year ago
Freshh azz VID
MapleStoryIsFunlol 1 year ago
needs a better name than HIM, i understand it but still D:
masteritachi500 1 year ago
@masteritachi500 His name isnt actually HIM, it just hasnt be revealed yet.
KevKenshin101 1 year ago
@KevKenshin101 i know but rlly, messes some vocab in things up owo;, so when the episode gonna come out?
masteritachi500 1 year ago
@masteritachi500 Go to my prof and read the side itll explain some things.
KevKenshin101 1 year ago
cool alot of story and action this may be a great series :D
Danny8849 1 year ago
i love this<3 great job ima sub you :D -subs-
iiBunniesPWN 1 year ago
i hope you finish this looks good you know :P
1LastSpell 1 year ago
Lol.. Final Fantasy 10 influences aye Lol
RandomDota 1 year ago
@RandomDota its not a FFX influenced, i just love that game so i use the songs and stuff from it because it fits perfect.
KevKenshin101 1 year ago
Post more comments yoo
KevKenshin101 1 year ago
Very awesome I hope you continue the episodes this is very cool
rizened 1 year ago
@rizened Thanks, I plan to work more on this and eventually finish chrono story after this nahmean?!?
KevKenshin101 1 year ago
omfg epic
tranmich 1 year ago
cool
WilliamZh4o 1 year ago
Nice to know you're back :)
zeno227 1 year ago
first
narutoeps2 1 year ago
@narutoeps2 xD lmfaoo
KevKenshin101 1 year ago