Great job for a first effort! I enjoyed the ending. You told a complete story in two minutes. You should be proud of that. That's something a lot of more accomplished filmmakers should learn to do. My only suggestion would be that you hold on a lot of shots much longer than you need to. I'd say you could cut 30 seconds out easy. I'd also like to see some wider shots that show the boy and the second man in the same shot. That part felt a little claustrophobic to me. Again, great job!
you go mark. not bad for the first one. don't tease the people.
ajuggyb 3 years ago
Great job for a first effort! I enjoyed the ending. You told a complete story in two minutes. You should be proud of that. That's something a lot of more accomplished filmmakers should learn to do. My only suggestion would be that you hold on a lot of shots much longer than you need to. I'd say you could cut 30 seconds out easy. I'd also like to see some wider shots that show the boy and the second man in the same shot. That part felt a little claustrophobic to me. Again, great job!
jdaws47 3 years ago