The words in the poem seem forced rather than naturally flowing.You seem to be trying to coax "sahityik" words into your writing. That's not what makes a poem good. It's the message itself, no matter how common your words are. Read Bhupi Sherchan's "ghumne mech mathi andho manchhe" and see how small words work great.
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izabellaoc 5 years ago
The words in the poem seem forced rather than naturally flowing.You seem to be trying to coax "sahityik" words into your writing. That's not what makes a poem good. It's the message itself, no matter how common your words are. Read Bhupi Sherchan's "ghumne mech mathi andho manchhe" and see how small words work great.
mickthesick 5 years ago
Thank you.
pradeepraja 5 years ago