It sounds a little like MrSirRaven, also you could make your voice sound interested in making the commentary. But it is good for your first commentary, much better than my first commentary.
it seems like every time you end a sentence your voice drops down at the beginning then you got louder then dropped back down plus it feels like I am watching another commentary over this that has already been done my inspiration for this was MrSirRaven but if you look at our videos they are different it honestly feels like I am watching pauldragonmaster2's commentary with a bit of MSR just try to branch out a little bit more but overall pretty good
well if you want me to be brutally honest, this was a fairly bland, lackluster review. you're moving around too much, your use of jump-cuts at the beginning is a bit excessive (yet later on you don't use them at all for your gaps of silence), sometimes you slur your sentence and also you harked on the "elaborate" issue for way too long.
the tone of your voice also makes it fairly boring, because you don't sound all that into doing the commentary.
thanks for the criticism. In my next video I will take your advice. I just wanted to try doing a commentary after seeing many people, including you, make commentaries about certain topics. I will try to be more enthused in doing the commentary and not be repetitive.
Im sure your next commentary will be a lot better.
Epicsniper3x 1 month ago
@Epicsniper3x
it will. i even wrote a script
Matt9001000 1 month ago
It sounds a little like MrSirRaven, also you could make your voice sound interested in making the commentary. But it is good for your first commentary, much better than my first commentary.
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it seems like every time you end a sentence your voice drops down at the beginning then you got louder then dropped back down plus it feels like I am watching another commentary over this that has already been done my inspiration for this was MrSirRaven but if you look at our videos they are different it honestly feels like I am watching pauldragonmaster2's commentary with a bit of MSR just try to branch out a little bit more but overall pretty good
treycount64 1 month ago
@treycount64
yea i know. it was my first commentary though. but i will be more original
Matt9001000 1 month ago
well if you want me to be brutally honest, this was a fairly bland, lackluster review. you're moving around too much, your use of jump-cuts at the beginning is a bit excessive (yet later on you don't use them at all for your gaps of silence), sometimes you slur your sentence and also you harked on the "elaborate" issue for way too long.
the tone of your voice also makes it fairly boring, because you don't sound all that into doing the commentary.
MrSirRaven 1 month ago
@MrSirRaven
thanks for the criticism. In my next video I will take your advice. I just wanted to try doing a commentary after seeing many people, including you, make commentaries about certain topics. I will try to be more enthused in doing the commentary and not be repetitive.
Matt9001000 1 month ago