"The The Impotence of Proofreading" Kinetic Typography

[skyelinedesigns]

Thank you for the crits - I especially appreciated that you phrased them in a positive way so that I can do better work as I improve my skills! Don't see that happen much on the Internet... ;)

Now that I've had more classes, I see that this was more about working on my AE and Cinema4D skills. While this is important - especially because as a student I SHOULD work on these skills! - it's not /meaningfully/ adding to the awesome artistic work that is Mali's poem, as was pointed out.

[frankcesca]

speaking of proofreading, it'd be nice not to have made a mistake where the poet didn't - the way he said it was advice, not advise.

[Trismegustis]

Not to mention that they spoil the humor of the reading by displaying everything onscreen before he says it and adding pointless cartoon sound effects. I'm sorry, but no. Try again. You've missed the point. Kinetic Typography is about enhancing the spoken word, not replacing it.

[HandiCripple666]

Addendum: I think I like this one better than the other written spelled out one. My advice is to alter the original work less, and just add to it. To alter the original work too much is to do it a disservice, not an honor. I personally often say that I don't make great things, I make great things better, (I think that was a company motto some years back, DuPont maybe), but I always try my best not to replace the original idea. I hope you take this as intended, constructive criticism. Great work!

[HandiCripple666]

It's a great idea applied to a hilarious poem by a brilliant poet, but I think the order of "impotence" of these three things should be the other way around. The original work portrayed on paper alone is great. The visual affects are funny as hell and definitely help one to better grasp the humor, adding to it in fact, but as great as the visual and audio effects are, the latter, and to a lesser degree the former, overpower the actual poem insofar as making it hard to hear Mali speaking.

[0equals1]

Clever work! I like this much more than the original reading: it's shorter and much more visually engaging (and with funny sound effects!). Thanks for sharing!