This entire poem was made by the ending. The content was very unoriginal, very mundane. The punch at the end just hits hard and that sticks with people.
Delivery in parts could of been better. Some of the words used eg. 'glove' instead of 'condom' I did'nt think was needed . The emotional journey of the character was so captavating it didn't need any 'slang' or crude words for the shock factor. It had had all it needed a great story and someone with great timing to tell it. There was a true understanding of the character of this poem and that is what makes it WITHOUT A DOUGHT BRILLIANT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
as i watched this i was like: "this is all heard before, nuthin new, just sum1 addressin sum random issue" but that conclusion "i was born" - thats sumthin that will stick with me
wowww amazing
ilovejasminevx3 9 months ago
i love this.
poeticshock2294 1 year ago
dat was reall deep
MCCOGGLETRAVEL 1 year ago
omg wow
MCCOGGLETRAVEL 2 years ago
jazzers shredded this
celestialBCF 2 years ago
i dont even know what to say. that was deep.
n3llz43v 2 years ago
this is amazing..i have so much respect for her..this is deep
charmedluver2 2 years ago
woww
i cant even compare to her writings.
i thought i was hecka clean.ohh heckk no!watch out,shess verryy veryy gooddd!!!!(:
benoenandmatt 2 years ago
WOW THATS powerful
sneakerluvgal 2 years ago
This entire poem was made by the ending. The content was very unoriginal, very mundane. The punch at the end just hits hard and that sticks with people.
glassEyeballs 2 years ago 5
WOW... this brings tears to my eyes
Clemt0wnsBabiiGoon 2 years ago
Delivery in parts could of been better. Some of the words used eg. 'glove' instead of 'condom' I did'nt think was needed . The emotional journey of the character was so captavating it didn't need any 'slang' or crude words for the shock factor. It had had all it needed a great story and someone with great timing to tell it. There was a true understanding of the character of this poem and that is what makes it WITHOUT A DOUGHT BRILLIANT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
MicaeliaBaptiste 2 years ago
as i watched this i was like: "this is all heard before, nuthin new, just sum1 addressin sum random issue" but that conclusion "i was born" - thats sumthin that will stick with me
mk510mk 2 years ago
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gay azz shit
grasslily 3 years ago
owned
celestialBCF 3 years ago
Amazing...Im speechless
emilyrose2323 3 years ago
Jazmin kicked ass.
Grizkey 3 years ago
sickkkkkk. Thanks for putting it down for yours, mine, and all the other young mothers out there.
wateristhebest 3 years ago
you betta spit that...this was some good poetry...
sbgal13 3 years ago
she was very good
PHPMANE123 2 years ago