JEFF!!!!!! This has serious potential. The guitar melody kicks ass. The banging and clanging kills it though. Sounds like your play and singing at a logging company or someting. My recommendation is to collaborate with someone on this and take it to the next level. The lyrics and melody and flow are worthy. I realized long ago that my talent for writing was great but I'd never be on stage Your problem is that, as is, you'll only reach 2 percent of the people...
yeah i was thinking about changing that or redoing it i would really love feedback as a backround noise though not as loud.thanx for listening im probably going to post one without it also.
"soft spoken obscenities we progress and transgress into a grey haired maze a laze of days we wait for reminiscent haze on green jaundous folly catch the trolley white sparks electric zigzags cigarette smoke spoke in adult waves reminding us of a faint spark of prepubescent gaze the waves move forward akwardly ticking the serene scene clean and we are lean and mean older"
just went to a restaurant with some friends and some thoughts like these were there. With age, I worry we all become posers.
how was this recorded?
robs70986987 3 years ago
on a very crude editing system i had to record everything separate. listen to the other version its got a cello backround on the keyboard.
ndargatis 3 years ago
windows movie maker you convert the file to wmv you hit publish to convert it and then you can upload it.
ndargatis 3 years ago
yeahhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
stonerman000 3 years ago
JEFF!!!!!! This has serious potential. The guitar melody kicks ass. The banging and clanging kills it though. Sounds like your play and singing at a logging company or someting. My recommendation is to collaborate with someone on this and take it to the next level. The lyrics and melody and flow are worthy. I realized long ago that my talent for writing was great but I'd never be on stage Your problem is that, as is, you'll only reach 2 percent of the people...
poemsbytom 3 years ago
yeah i was thinking about changing that or redoing it i would really love feedback as a backround noise though not as loud.thanx for listening im probably going to post one without it also.
ndargatis 3 years ago
jeff....hey new kind of video :)...and a cool grunge song..what a beautiful title...and liked a lot to read the more information...*****
jelasings 3 years ago
thanx.
ndargatis 3 years ago
"soft spoken obscenities we progress and transgress into a grey haired maze a laze of days we wait for reminiscent haze on green jaundous folly catch the trolley white sparks electric zigzags cigarette smoke spoke in adult waves reminding us of a faint spark of prepubescent gaze the waves move forward akwardly ticking the serene scene clean and we are lean and mean older"
just went to a restaurant with some friends and some thoughts like these were there. With age, I worry we all become posers.
tayloreh 3 years ago
thanx glad you liked it.
ndargatis 3 years ago