OK you.... I can't watch any more. Between your clever use of words and your adorable accent and those big gorgeous brown eyes of yours, I'm starting to get a crush on you.
But don't worry- I'll be back. And please drop me a line if you post anything new.
I'm serious about setting something to music one day. But it'll have to wait- I'm just super busy right now.
very cool poem, you have a lot of talent for someone so young. A great start. :)
I like how the rhythm seemed to flow in a circle which really pushed the last lines into a maddening motion that coupled with the meaning. This is a rare thing to accomplish so well.
The first thing that comes to mind is Schizophrenia, great delivery and the notable pauses at the right moments, I detect a hint of excitement in your tone which in itself helps elevate the text. Excellent poem!
I saw the video response and thought it would be another really bad poem. Because that happens with me. Lots. I was wrong. This is good, so damn good.
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this is fucking weird
PurelyRebellious 1 year ago
duuuude u suck lol i cud write better poetry with all 3 of my eyes closed.
subftw2798 1 year ago
OK you.... I can't watch any more. Between your clever use of words and your adorable accent and those big gorgeous brown eyes of yours, I'm starting to get a crush on you.
But don't worry- I'll be back. And please drop me a line if you post anything new.
I'm serious about setting something to music one day. But it'll have to wait- I'm just super busy right now.
keep it up!
composerdoh 1 year ago
PS- ditto what nyhee7 said down there.
composerdoh 1 year ago
lol "She" sounds too familiar!
Good work :)
x
SUStheCROC 2 years ago
I LIKE, I LIKE, I LIKE!
I am glad you sent me a request, if you hadnt, I would have never heard this.
MsProHomo 2 years ago
very cool poem, you have a lot of talent for someone so young. A great start. :)
I like how the rhythm seemed to flow in a circle which really pushed the last lines into a maddening motion that coupled with the meaning. This is a rare thing to accomplish so well.
Nyhee7 2 years ago
Excellent.
meridianfrost 2 years ago
The first thing that comes to mind is Schizophrenia, great delivery and the notable pauses at the right moments, I detect a hint of excitement in your tone which in itself helps elevate the text. Excellent poem!
VisionGhostPoet 2 years ago
Haha =D thank you for the comment.
peebzzz 2 years ago
Great stuff. Subscribed.
DavidRandallCurtis 2 years ago
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you're teh scariest little emo boy i've ever seen in my life.
GibranisHardcore 2 years ago
Lol. You don't get out that much then.
TheUnveilingBee 2 years ago 2
This is my favorite of all your work.
I like the imagery of it.
"...trapped without the fucking key..." "...trapped by a shrinking fence..."
czmma 2 years ago 2
That was / this is
Amazing!
leftgreenthumb 2 years ago
Brilliant last line, just when I was thinking it couldn't get better. 5* fav
dashpoet 2 years ago
This poem was really spectacular, and I'm glad BERSKERpoetry shared this.
You've just got a subcriber. Hope you post more and I'm not just talking to myself (JESUS thats a bad joke... lol but one of my more barable ones :P )
ellyunfortunetly 2 years ago
i second this comment.... BERSERKERpoetry is the reason I came as well.
Great piece!
secretpray3r 2 years ago
great delivery
frankblame 2 years ago
'that detainee trapped without a fucking key.'
god youre good. you ought to post the words, love.
healthyaddixion 2 years ago
Thank you very much.
And just for you I will post the words to this one now =]
peebzzz 2 years ago
hey thanks! i listen to alot of poetry on here, and i find it really adds alot to be able to read along at times.
healthyaddixion 2 years ago
Well thank you for the advice =]
And thank you very much for the sub. I really appreciate both.
peebzzz 2 years ago
I saw the video response and thought it would be another really bad poem. Because that happens with me. Lots. I was wrong. This is good, so damn good.
BERSERKERpoetry 2 years ago
Hey BERSERKERpoetry, my poetry isn't THAT bad.. and you should appreciate my video responses cunt! :P
hehe
ellyunfortunetly 2 years ago
hahaha.
BERSERKERpoetry 2 years ago
hey, your poems are amazing.
markuskoenig 2 years ago 2
Thank you very much man =D
If you still want to try and make a track to something message me your email address and I'll send you an mp3 =]
peebzzz 2 years ago