Added: 11 months ago
From: MakTheMc
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  • You seem to imply drug use and what i would take as what happens in poverty which often leads to gang fights...is drugs and small town violence not just as bad as war?

  • @TrinityGamingHD That's another good point that could be brought out in the song,but like my perspective i was like saying it like the soldiers smoke weed to relax em down b.c of all the bull shit.but i might put that in the next verse cuhz u are absolutely right.

  • not bad. Could be better but keep going man you'll improve :)

  • Not bad. The flow is good, but you could get a lot more raw on this topic though. If your going to make more tracks similar to this in the future, you should def check out Immortal Technique and study the way he spits and writes his lyrics. Keep at it man.. you def got talent and potential.

  • @d0zi7 thanks bro and immortal technique is fuccing raw, it's kind of hard cause i write shit on my perspective and on how much i know of the topic you know, IT is a gangsta ass history teacher.

  • Gj Bro just work on ur spelling and i think u'll make it ...

  • Besides your flow and delivery, work on your spelling. At 17, you should have no problem correctly spelling your lyrics. It looks more professional when people are able to read your lyrics.

  • @DrCutePuppies Which words were incorrect? Lol i had auto spell check on and i hardly make mistakes when it comes to spelling. Unless it's slang of course but thanks for the hint anyways

  • @MakTheMc Exauste, fean, cuhz, humane. Should be exhaust, fein, cuz and human.

  • @DrCutePuppies Oh shiet good looks didn't even realize that and i have auto spell check

  • Yo dawg saw ur comment on da mac miller video, I thought this was pretty sick it's just u should make more verses but u probly already kno dat haha

  • ya, dis is great, just da flow, u got erything else, just need to chill

  • respect for trying but sorry your flow and your just voice and shit it just doesnt sound very good. very ameaturish, and i'm not just talking about the quality it's just. idk

    no offense

  • @chabes12 thank you for your thoughts

  • @MakTheMc damn i feel like an asshole now. good message and good lyrics just work on ur flow and ull be good bro! at least you arent rappign about irrelevant bs! keep hustling! good luck

  • @chabes12

    Hello Mak the kid,

    Thank you for sending the song you recorded to True Story and for your kind words. We just checked it out and it sounds really heartfelt and your lyrics are really deep. Your flow is on point too; you've got a great voice.

    Thanks again for sharing that with us and doing the track justice.

    Best Regards,

    Sinima Beats<---------Person who created the instrumental

  • @MakTheMc um lol okay so what? an opinion is an opinion and most ppl would say your delivery is whack.

  • The lyrics are not bad at all.

    You just need to work on your flow.

  • @Tony0xB thank you ive been hearing that i guess i do

  • I saw your comment on a mac miller song you should make some more verses because this is excellent

  • @andrethegiantdick Thank You For Your Complement I Was Spamming the shit out of videos to try and get my music out and this is what i like to hear! and yes i will this is just a teaser so people like you would ask for more.

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