dbz fanfic final battle for peace part 1

[sojiroT]

FUCKING GREAT STORYLINE,

just make it better quaality

[desertstorm50249]

nice for a test fan fic

[cashgettag]

im jus sayin its alittle to bright

[evilsupergohan]

this is a test. the real version will come soon!!!

[llalaljsih1224356y]

oh cool this looks like ograndebata fanfic.

[evilsupergohan]

no but it is a big t.v though. i zoomed in.

[JindeSaiya]

This is good man and it has potential.

Just try to edit the fights. Also try to get a new twist on the story to make it fresh and new.I'm sure a lot of people have seen similar ones. Just some advice. 5/5

[JindeSaiya]

This is good man and it has potential.

Just try to edit the fights. Also try to get a new twist on the story to make it fresh and new.I'm sure a lot of people have seen similar ones. Just some advice. 5/5

[evilsupergohan]

thanks for the advise. i am a huge fan on your fanfic cant wait for part 6

[evilsupergohan]

i know but you helped me make it

any way it might be better when i do part 2

[youngsizzla196]

yo cuz its alright but i dont really like it car u carnt see the people n stuff n its to bright

[theoriginalNo1]

not bad for a test fanfic a few tweaks r needed but youll get there eventually in the end!

[evilsupergohan]

thanks

[evilsupergohan]

... and sorry if it looks like im copying ograndebata using final battle and soz if it looks like i am copying jlewis with ultimate destructoin(his is absolute destruction)

post part 2 soon