Opinion:NOT to be a hater or anything but i think u should have added more comedy and drama to the story. Also on parts when b5 were talking it didnt sound like them or match up 2 theirpersonalities wat so ever.
Question:why on every part u mention carnell in "hes stuffing his mouth" or giving a quick 3 word statement with his brothers?
Reply 2 opinion: Umm well Idk this was my 1st like for real story so I'm still improvimg my carft It get's better I like to think. You don't think it seemed like how they might act? I thought it fit ok but maybe that's cuz I wrote it.
Answer to question: It wasn't every and some times I forget to have people talk so I throw them in real quick I guess that must have just happend with him alot.
Opinion:NOT to be a hater or anything but i think u should have added more comedy and drama to the story. Also on parts when b5 were talking it didnt sound like them or match up 2 theirpersonalities wat so ever.
Question:why on every part u mention carnell in "hes stuffing his mouth" or giving a quick 3 word statement with his brothers?
Quick statement: good job working on it.
free2lookcute 2 years ago
Reply 2 opinion: Umm well Idk this was my 1st like for real story so I'm still improvimg my carft It get's better I like to think. You don't think it seemed like how they might act? I thought it fit ok but maybe that's cuz I wrote it.
Answer to question: It wasn't every and some times I forget to have people talk so I throw them in real quick I guess that must have just happend with him alot.
And thanks I do try
jasmy13 2 years ago
oh i didnt know it was ur first story. it was good but that stuff i said was like how fell about it. :)
free2lookcute 2 years ago
GO GIRL...AWESOME STORY...
sndingmessages 2 years ago
omg ii justt lovee yours storiess theree good lool
if you make it another b5 story if you don't mean it can you put my name in it :) thxx
But yours storiiee aree really good i loved it!!
keep doin yur thang!!
mianna12 3 years ago 2
Thanks and idk if imma make another B5 story yet but I think I am.
jasmy13 3 years ago
well my bad their is only the 4th on
imani203 3 years ago
click on more by "my name" and click Bryan story
jasmy13 3 years ago
witch story is it
imani203 3 years ago
uh Bryan story
jasmy13 3 years ago
when is it comming and why did Kelly not get a girl
imani203 3 years ago
Did u read the other story yet?
jasmy13 3 years ago
do u hav a bryan story up yet i really want 2 c it
B5forever11 3 years ago
lmao awsome story =]
ArIeSbAbE202 3 years ago 5