the shy retirer

[Turnmoximer]

the guitars really good, but with the vocals you really need to work on giving yourself enough space to breathe and hit all the notes. Try practicing it a lot slower and make sure each note (even if you do slide up to it) you reach, because the main fault with this is just that you slide up to the note, but then stop and quickly breathe before getting to the right note. Don't worry though, getting the vocals right is a bitch to pull off and the guitars amazing :)